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Diamond Tiara has had a secret for a long time now, one that she thought she would never share, now it's that time when she should tell Cherilee what's going on...
[NOTE:] Sex tag because of situations, there will be NO foalcon in this story.
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Nice story so far, though I can spot a few capitalisation errors.
Will the CMC be involved?
..............meep...............
sorry about the mistake, this is just a one shot. Maybe in the future though? who knows....
OK here I go sticking my snoot in your soup. I really think you should think seriously about continuing this story.
Reasons
one. Diamonds recovery from this.
two. Her reactions when she finds out that the CMC are her most staunch supporters.
three The reactions of two sisters whom she thought would hate her. Rarity and Applejack.
How on Earth or Equesteria you handle them finding out I haven't a clue. possibly Scootaloo might have had something like this happen, orphan Scoots, random stranger, bad foster parent ,?????
Just came across this and decided I needed more "sympathy for
the devilDiamond Tiara" in my stories. Here's my review:You have an important message. It really is an important issue and it's good that you want to portray it. Also, the story and interactions are done well, for the most part.
However, the story is too short with no real buildup or resolution. Also, the choice of Diamond Tiara and her dad... why those characters? Why not some nameless character instead of DT, a character whose whole spiel is "annoying, stuck-up bully" and surprisingly has a dad that actually is sympathetic and does not approve of his daughter's bad behavior? Also, this:
Imagining Cheerilee say this just takes me out of the story. It would be better to hear her emotions and her reactions in detail rather than one angry f-bomb.
However, you've obviously got talent and your heart is in the right place. I think with some creative rewrites or giving this another go, you could put together a story that would get a more positive response and help raise awareness for the cause. Good luck!
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thank you both for your reviews! I'm considering writing another chapter about Diamond Tiara's flashback on what happened. And maybe an epilogue for How the two royal sisters handle this sensitive situation and the charges that the father takes. Be patient!
5963267 Wow! thank you for your review! This fic for me was an important one to write. For myself and for others. I was just only testing the waters and getting a taste of one shots that can tell a lot with few words. Then this idea for my story hits me in the head at full blast! So I finished this one in two days, and I'll be honest... needs a lot of work. But now that I think of it, I think it's just fine where it is, so I'm leaving the story the way it is! But yeah, I've noticed that there aren't many a story that tread upon this...'sensitive'... subject, so I decided to raise a little awareness, ya'know? Remind the fandom that life isn't all happy sunshine ponies, and that even in the most innocent of show, there are dark and sensitive subjects!
So once again, thanks for the review!
Wow,.... This story was sad and amazing at the same time
5998665 your welcome.