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Cocoa Swirl 10201


My avatar, was drawn by my very good friend FelinFluff! Doesn't she just make you wanna eat some Reese's puffs?

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She called me here to the edge of this wood. The tops of the trees gently brush the sky with gentle loving strokes. I inhale the fresh air of the newborn summer. The wind has beckoned me here to this forest of fae. She tells me of a king with an antler crown, and wisdom for those willing, or worthy to hear.

Come now, tread carefully in this wood. Listen intent-fully to the sound of his thundering hooves, run with him now, hurry and catch up! Listen to the voices of the fae, an be bestowed with the knowledge olde!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 12 )

I like it! A few grammatical errors but is still cool!

5967638 thanks to adding it to your favorites! Means a lot to me.

5967658 you're welcome!!! Note, let me read a few chapters of your other story?

Nice job, though I wish you would consider making it into a chaptered story, there's plenty to expand on and I would love to read more.

5967716 I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile: But as far as extra chapters go, that's a big "if". But I for sure will try to fix that though, maybe one that describes the future for the two of them? :unsuresweetie: Just hope and see I guess! :heart:

this story is lovely...
have a like :scootangel:

Thanks for submitting this to my contest! It was good!
Some grammar mistakes, and small plot holes, (in my opinion) but, overall, a 9.7/10! :pinkiehappy:

6035940 thanks for your time to read this! I'm really glad this made 9.7 in your contest!

I like the idea of this story, from what I've read so far, but the grammar... ugh. I'm a self-declared Grammar Cop, and I couldn't continue past the first few paragraphs. Would you like my help editing? This story has potential, but it definitely needs polishing.

I believe you have great ability when it comes to writing and I quite enjoyed the way you describe everything. Well done on this story. Ive had it on my read later for a while, but only just got the chance to read it. Haha.

My only personal gripe is I felt like there wasnt enough context or development. Very little (event or dialougue wise) is told to the reader, despite what is said being relayed in an expert manner. Perhaps the next chapter shall attone for this.

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