I Lost It.

Same as short description, It's a short short story. Spikes lost it, Where he lost it, How he lost it, When he lost it, Spike can't find it , Did somepony else find it? Is this the end of Ponyville?
What did Spike lose besides his mind? What is it anyway?

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TheGreatEater

TheGreatEater #1 · Apr 28th, 2015 · · ·

dust pans,
Bear poop behind the throne?

Connect sentence.
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He stuck fast at first then he slid down with a sickening Squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee down to the floor below.
He rubbed his snout and crawled out to the next room bracing himself he got up and brushed off the confetti.

Space lines and indent.
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Little dragon flys fluttered in his stomach at the thought.

flies
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Okay .... there is a lot of the same error. and I don't want to flood the comment box. Go through the fic, and space paragraphs. At least the ones you haven't done already, and unindent the first paragraph. Since the rest of the fic has unindented paragraphs.
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Nada, nothing, zilch.If the cutie mark crusaders get it I'll never live it down and Ponyvilles future will only hold doom and gloom'.

Cap.

[Since it's a group / organization it gets capitalized.]
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"If you put an 'ordinary' label on confetti cannons, manic pink ponies zoos of apple animals and all the other stuff that goes on around here, Nope, I can't think of anything."

"If you put an 'ordinary' label on confetti cannons, manic pink ponies, zoos of apple animals, and all the other stuff that goes on around here. Nope, I can't think of anything."

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