The tumultuous romance and drama of a young mare's greatest crisis. Bella Rave loves Silver Spoon dearly and would do anything to help her, if only she could... but what she learns about her own family will throw her entire life into shambles.
This story will have optional clop chapters, and while they are not just gratuitous sex and do, in fact, add to the story, they can be skipped without losing your understanding of the story if you prefer. Links to them and to skip them will be provided in-chapter.
Warning – contains: sexual references and themes, teen pregnancy, 'off-screen' child abuse/rape, bullying, profanity. Optional clop chapters do NOT include rape/abuse: I refuse to write such filth.
A big thanks to my team! I couldn't have done it without them.
Premise Development, OC Creation, Cover Image, and Editing:
PonySlayer
Outline Editors:
Titanium Dragon | Tschloken | Sir Crystal Stardust | bathroomstahl | CyberSamurai | Forgoten Null
Pre-Readers:
LiveLife | Wacuire | The Hybrid Changeling | Super Trampoline | Forgoten Null | SupremeDevice | Flame6666 | tehspeleengpolise | MailboxBomber | exsnaggerwes
Proofreaders:
enti0 | bathroomstahl | Forgoten Null | GoldShockAttack | Mosho-JP
You've put a lot of work into this, dude. I hope it goes well!
Chapter 1: Solace 3,059 Chapter 2: Glee 4563. Words in total: 7622. It's actually 0 Words. You've done it again, fimfic xD
Anyways, I'm glad to see that the story finally is here! Hope it goes well! ^_^
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Totally love this so far. OCxCanon is something I see a lot, but f\f OCxCanon is kinda rare. Keep it up friend.
Gee, this story has all the things I love about MLP!
Sounds like a cheap soap opera. Pass. Good on you for the up-front warning though.
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It's not cheap; I can guarantee you that.
Still, yes, not for everyone. No story can be.
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I will, I will. ^.^
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I sure hope so! ^.^
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Gah! Yes, for some reason it's showing 0 words. Why, Fimfic, why?
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Me too!
5977679 Re-publish the chapters, might be it. Just take them down for a split second, then post them again.
Worked for me.
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Aha! You're right!
So is this straight shipping? Cause i saw it added to that group but the description and the first chapter point to everything but that being the case.
Not looking to dislike out of spite or anything, but I would like to know before continuing.
5977698 Glad to help ^_^
Liked, favorited... already enjoying the story immensely.
I'll get to reading this later. In the mean time have some recommended listening.
Glad to see this finally hit the wild.
Damn. This was not what I was expecting. At all.
It's good..but...d-damn.
Brilliant! Thanks for this gem, ocalhoun and Co.!
Edit: This has been featured. Congrats!
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Well, there will be some straight shipping later in the story.
I'll be upfront about it, though: there's not much. It's mostly f/f.
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Glad you're enjoying it. ^.^ That's what makes it all worthwhile.
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Heh. Don't worry too much. Unless I die in the next 10 days, it'll be published. ^.^
At any rate, in about 10 days, it'll be fully complete and ready for your reading.
(I fully understand not reading incomplete stories. I won't either. That's why I don't post them until they're done.)
This actually means a lot to me. ^.^
DT was awful in the early drafts of the first few chapters. I'm glad to hear that all the revisions paid off!
Stuff like that is partly Pony Slayer's doing. He did work on character and premise development some with me, especially in the very beginning stages.
And that took some doing, lemme tell ya.
I'm still not sure I've got it right... but at least it sounds good so far.
Thanks! ^.^ Not much of a mountain on this one yet... but it just hit the feature box, so I'm hopeful.
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It must be interesting, seeing the different versions evolve.
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Hm... maybe that means my long description wasn't very good... Glad to hear you still liked it, though!
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Just noticed that myself. ^.^
At first I thought it wouldn't, but it pulled through.
Not gonna lie... putting over a year of work into it and seeing it miss the feature box would have been a little bit heartbreaking.
5978069 Oh, no, the description is sufficient. I...may have been hyped enough on this that I dove right in based on your reputation only, without any background other than the cover image.
It was my fault, and mine alone, that I was met with something far, far weightier than I was expecting.
But I have to say, that one part, in the middle of chapter two. Oh man, you gutted me.
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Yeah, it is a lot more... weighty than a lot of my previous works.
And am I right in assuming that what got you in the second chapter was the revelation of certain family relations? ^.^ I did really enjoy putting that surprise into it.
5978204 That'd be the one, and it was indeed quite the moment. The juxtaposition was fantastic, sending me from tingling with nervous anticipation to cold chills, yes, in ten seconds flat.
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Don't give me that. The only difference between your perspective and mine is that for you the change was gradual whereas for me the change occurred over three distinct iterations. Of course it was interesting, the only reason you might not think it was is because you had to spend so much time with the thing.
How many passes did you give this thing again? Sixty something? I rest my case.
Anyway, I'll be sure to give you some final feedback when I finish reading the final story. I am actually kind of curious to see what you changed from the proofreading stage. I appreciate that you involved me in all this, even though I'm the one who volunteered for it in the first place.
Thanks again for writing this story for me. It is much appreciated. I'm really excited to reread it again
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Yeah... I should look at the oldest version again, just so I can see how far it's come. It's true I don't see the changes much, because they're gradual.
Sixty-eight, to be precise. ^.^
You appreciate things? You know you're the one helping me out, right? Part of this is yours.
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Heh. I hope it lives up to expectations... and I hope it was worth the wait.
This is a fairly decent story. I'm just curious as to why you're not making the whole story 'M' rated and adding in the clop chapters as marked 'cloptional' or whatever. That said, I don't think you're allowed to link NSFW, in this case a seperate clopfic—if I'm assuming correctly—in a story marked as 'E' or 'T'. So, is there like a viewing password for the link in the description? I can't get in without it.
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The separate story for the clop chapters hasn't been posted yet, since the first one is at the end of chapter 3. I've just submitted it, though, so it should be up soon. (As soon as it posts, I'll be publishing chapter 3 as well.)
I'm not one for romance stories. You surpassed my exceptions.Well done.
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^.^ This is hardly your normal romance story, of course.
ok so a password would be nice?
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The optional chapters have finally posted, so you should be able to get to it without a password now.
5982224 ty for the info
You know, thanks to you I've gotten really good at spotting these! Either way, double not space thingy m'do-dad, you should know the drill by now. I'm absolutely convinced that this is just an openoffice thing.
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Again?
Well, fixed it.
This story is like something out of Skins.
Also, for all the effort and planning that's gone into this the reception of it seems to be rather underwhelming.
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Out of what now?
Heh, you're telling me.
Still, it did at least feature box for a while, and that's something.
On this week's episode of Terrible Decision Theatre...
5984423 Looks at like/dislike bar.
Wow. I...yeah, that's pretty crazy. This is better than that.
Honestly, though, this thing is missing a [Dark] tag.
It is, at least at this point, very, very dark. At least, for an MLP fic. You may want to try to get it stuck in some groups that it might appeal to, since I'd wager that the general FimFic reader is looking for something substantially lighter in tone than this. And, even though I previously defended your choice to separate the [M] rated portions....I'm starting to wonder if that was the right call too. It seems like there's enough content here that treads the boundary anyway that it might get better seen by an audience it appealed to if the whole thing was together in an [M] rated fic.
In fact, if I'm being completely honest, the foal-rape might end up being too much for me. We'll see.
Additional impressions:
In fact, the second part of this chapter felt to me like a series of one abuse/rape cliche after another without really doing much to advance our understanding the specific characters or their circumstances. Sorry. 
At this point, Silver's dad feels very one-dimensional to me, a stand-in "disgusting person(pony) because the plot requires one". Now, I trust you (and the enormous team of talent you assembled putting this thing together), so I have faith that this will be explained in due time. But right now, that whole subplot rubs me wrong.
Also, there are a couple of clauses in this chapter that felt oddly...imprecise for you.
Such as:
This clause really doesn't add...well, anything, in my eyes. Maybe it's just me, though.
Anyway, sorry to sound super-critical.
I'm still interested to see where this one is going, but...just giving my impressions in case they align with reasons that others might not be giving this the attention it might deserve. 
Oh shit, it's Goofy time without the Goofy.
5984423 Skins, this show:
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Heh, you're right about that!
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Don't worry, I love getting detailed feedback!
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I guess it kind of is.
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Ah... heh, yeah.
So, a pregnancy scrying spell? That's a neat touch.
And oh no, things keep getting worse
"cloptional" chapters
Man, Bella is a stupid bitch.
SPOILER: What the heart craves is actually Brawndo.
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Glad people are appreciating that. ^.^
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Heh. I'd do that, if I weren't afraid there'd be one slow person who doesn't understand it and is then outraged at what he finds.
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Fair enough. She's very... impulsive.
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Who the what now?
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I have ben following this story from day one and I can say it is really good.
now this chapter just wow supper good exultant slice of life.
Harts Fire
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Heh, yeah. This is one of my favorite chapters.
The events written out and how they're conveyed, or words to that effect, to the reader, seem far too convenient. It's like all the gears are well oiled and running smoothly, and that it's not as dystopian as the story could be. No doubt you've written that way, but it's definitely showing now that I'm thinking about it. Everything perfectly merges with each other, but having the metaphorical gears 'jam' now and then isn't a bad thing either. As an example it's like pulling something apart and have the chapter end in the middle of it. It creates more of a cliff hangar then neatly tying everything up and whisking the reader off to what happens in the next chapter rather than have that margin of error where the reader debates what's going to happen next. When you prevent that from happening the story then you're not going to get too many comments outside of what's already been said.
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Huh... I don't think I've ever had anyone complain about the lack of cliffhangers before...
So you're saying that things are too resolved and neatly tied up at the end of the chapters?
5995179 Exactly. That is a problem in of itself. Things tie off too quickly to have any real conflict, What you could have done is end every chapter on a cliffhanger, and given the nature of this story, it would drum up more interest because it keeps the reader guessing. THEN neatly tie off everything in the end, which is a case of shit always hitting the fan then peaceful resolve. Personally I like that kind of thing better
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...But cliffhanging every chapter would fatigue readers, wouldn't it?