So far I am pleased with this work, definitely worth the slightly rushed relations. However, I must say there are a few errors that stand out, such as "there" instead of "they're"

I won't point everything out, but if you'd like, I would be happy to give your work a twice over and either point out mistakes or edit them myself at your request.

Just putting my aid offer out there, and I can't wait to see what happens next. :)