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Faded Echelon
I am going to start uploading fanfictions. I don't know how often, but I will be uploading them.
Faded Echelon
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So far I am pleased with this work, definitely worth the slightly rushed relations. However, I must say there are a few errors that stand out, such as "there" instead of "they're"
I won't point everything out, but if you'd like, I would be happy to give your work a twice over and either point out mistakes or edit them myself at your request.
Just putting my aid offer out there, and I can't wait to see what happens next. :)
Actually, that would be greatly appreciated. Yes, the relationship was rushed, but eh, I have a lot planned for this and I wanted to try and get most of it knocked out before spring break was over. I failed, but still I got a lot done. I am glad you enjoyed. Thank you for the read.
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5851676 After all, every good writer, needs a good editor. Mistakes are bound to happen. That's why once there made, you learn from them.
even though your writing does need more work
you have done a great job on fade and java's personality
making a character or characters with a personality that makes the reader care about and want to know more about them is not an easy thing and i can honestly say you succeeded
look forward to seeing where this goes
edit - is there a place where jinx uploads her art
5863820 I think so. I'm not to sure. She was doing commissions, but she is on hiatus for some personal issues.
5863820 On another note, I know my writing needs work. I rush myself when writing for time reasons. I've stepped away from that and am trying to do better with grammar and spelling.
5866964 that's cool
keep up the good work
you have real potential
I liked it. I'm an author as well, not bad so far for your first fanfic. But you said Java was carrying chamomile tea, and yet you wrote that its coffee that burnt her. Little inconsistency there, nothing big.
Little tip, you can put the thoughts of the characters in italics, to differentiate them from speech.
5867423 Yeah, I know about that. I just do it my own way. I'm weird like that. Glad you like it though. Thanks a ton.
5867405 Oh, XD I think I was up at like 4 in the morning typing that. That could explain it. I'll fix it when i'm done with the current chapter.
5867423 I fixed the inconsistency. I'll take italicizing thoughts into consideration, though at this point couldn't it confuse some readers?
very good
and very touching
and if your looking for a name (unless you already have one planned)
might i recommend Hazel
5875221 I don't have one planned yet. Thank you, i'll take that one into consideration, but keep in mind this is, in a way, a collaboration with a friend who did the art and is the creator of Java. I have to hear her input to the story before I make any plans.
5875221 I talked to her and I believe we are going to use the name. Thank you. To all you guys who are enjoying the story. The next chapter might take a bit. I've been a bit sick and haven't really planned for the next chapter. I'm sure it will be out pretty soon, but if not I promise I will continue whenever something comes to me.
5897886 wow thanks
Get well soon
Don't push yourself
5898038 It's nothing serious. GI issues. Just painful. Thanks for the concern though.
Working on chapter 6. It's slow going, but i'm learning about things I need to write as I write.
Well, a slight comedic bit in a clop chapter. I really love what you did there with the instinct telling Fade to shut up and listen to it. Wonderful, Echelon!
5957221 Well thank you. Glad you enjoyed
Hey, just popping in to say hi
Hope everything is going good for you
6132620 It is. Still working on how I want the story to go. Not quite sure yet, so this chapter is taking a lot longer than I was hoping. Damn indecisiveness.
I know this story has been probably long cancelled but it was still sad to come back from so long to discover this, really enjoyed where this was going, well i hope you're doing good, wherever you are