Just another crazy person, pay no mind.
(Warning. This is a self insert. Also my first post. Please keep all hatred to a two sentence minimum. Thank you.)
A new building has appeared in Ponyville.
With some encouragement from Discord, a human has opened a café.
What has motivated Discord this time and why did he toss a human into Equestra?
If anyone wants to see and learn about this new human, they'll have to go and see him at Le Café de la Vie.
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What? They didn't pay for the meal?
5827856
Sort of
"They were still chatting and giggling when Justin reappeared to clear the table, the ponies barely noticed, only to thank him for bringing the check, which Rarity picked up saying it was her treat."
Here's a few tips:
You shouldn't capitalize the "Q" here if the quotation is part of the same sentence.
Additionally, if the statement normally ends with a period, here you would change that to a comma.
Other than that, good read. --I for one couldn't tell it was a self-insert.
This is very good for your first story! On another note, I can't wait to see how you portray the BP's reactions.
You forgot to capitalize Discord's name here.
Other than that, nice job once again! --Keep it coming!
Oh boy, I wonder who Justin will hire? Also, can you write the interviews? I can imagine there being some crazy interviews, like a fanatical Lyra or a drunk Berry punch!
Should be "expect" here.
"(Warning. This is a self insert. Also my first post. Please keep all hatred to a two sentence minimum. Thank you.)"
thanks for the warning but now a warning for you. after reading this those like myself are tempted to troll ya beware.
ill get ta reading da story in bit
5870831 That's fine, just remember the two sentence minimum.
5871093 we shall see if thy story earns more then two <insert evil laugh here>
"So after some long discussions with my parents and teachers. They agreed to let me come here and try running my own cafe."
really? datz it? "talky talky, okay sure go to pony land iz okay" is wat they said.... meh better then it being just cause reasons or because magic but ya might wanna flesh out the 'why' part more in future chapters if ya haven't already (the how being cause discord which is fine(ish)). maybe give some thought when ya poopin or something i don't know when ya got free time after all.
that said not bad so far.
also six (seven if ya count the blank one) lines....come at me bruh
5872552 My parents let my drink, buy me combat knifes, are paying for my tattoos. Talking them into letting me go to an alien world isn't that difficult.
his siblings got tattoos? and hes like meh? bring up dem questions don't it. does his home world/dimension have marks that tell them what they are good at? or is he/his family chill bout dat ink?
...da ?s are realz
"Forgive me Princess Luna. I forget that I am not invaluable, I did not mean to test you."
...."not invaluable" you forget you have value? you sad sometimes bruh?
5883518 I meant to say invincible, thanks for pointing that out.
5884224 np