Im not sure how i feel about your story. Im no stranger to having bad things happen to the main character but it feels like your setting yours up for one hellova knockout blow.

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I just tried to be original. So I decided to use something that really happened to me. Although I was much worse than just an ankle. i had my chest wrapped up, left forearm had a hard cast, right ankle wrapped up, whole right leg in a cast and suspended, and a hard METAL neck brace. I did NOT like it.....and that was when I was in high school, and I DID protect mimzy.
sadly a week later she was still hit by a car.....and I loved that cat. I didn't sleep for a week straight.....other than 4 or 5 small 10 minute knocked out intervals by the medication I had....

But if you don't like it that's fine. I'm not gonna try to interest you in it. Like I said this is my first fan fic, so if people don't like it, that's their choice. I'm just glad I'm finally able to focus my mind on something.

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I believe i said i wasnt sure how i felt. I havent decided if i like it or not yet. Ill let you know flat out if i dont like it

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And I don't think I said you DID dislike it

I said IF you dislike it. That it is fine. Different people have different tastes, different ideals. And I respect that. Even if others don't see it, every person is unique in that way. New tech, evolving, learning, everyone will have different thoughts, no one will ever have the same thought on EVERYTHING. You both like games, but one dislikes soda. That makes you different. And that difference makes every person unique.

But if you brag about how things are bad, then that isn't right. I respect everyone's choices they make. Even if I don't agree with it. But it's their life, all I can do is give my thoughts in a kind manner, and if they ignore that advice...eh...,more power to them I say....and I hope and pray that they live a good life, and nothing happens to cut it short for them.....
unless it is really bad of course.....that is different....

6382335 I like the story, the whole 2 chapters of a story any way I have noticed you are putting daniel, from the story, through so much. Ok. First you hit him with a car, OK he's unlucky. Then he runs into a door, gets beaten senceless by rainbow dash and gets taken away by guards. Like Daniel is really unlucky....... It's kinda funny

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its a self insert of me and i am unlucky XD

also, he didnt get beat up by rainbow, she flew at him with the INTENT of hitting him, but she got caught by raritys magic before the hit happened. the shock of what happened hit him and he fell back when he got his senses back. XD

This is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it.

Wut? I'm confused...
And I will be honest, what kind of Professional Guard pointed their weapons at an injured patient lying in a hospital room demanding them to get up and go meet someone? Those kind of guards would be court martial. And any Hospital worth their bits wouldn't allow for that kind of thing to happen. Especially since he is in no way a criminal. You are failing to hook me up to the story with this sort of shit here. This is too forceful. This is disrespecting military discipline and common decency.