The descriptor is a bit excessive for someone whose weak constitution, namely mine, can handle in the morning. I'd bump up the rating or tone down the pitch.

If no one else has mentioned it however, great concept otherwise!

Not bad I like the concept, but this one line came across really ooc for me.

"She never doubted her magic, but she had had Rarity’s help the first time she tried the Cloud-Walking Charm, and wasn’t sure she could pull it off solo. "

Twilight doesent doubt her magical ability she just doesent like showing off.  Maybe I'm just nitpicking but besides that good story.

>>595899595899 I knew it wouldn't catch in the morning, but I was in a rush to publish it. Ah, well. Thanks for the input, though

>>595999595999 I like to imagine that in the episode "Sonic Rainboom," after Twilight gave Rarity her magical wings, she was too tired to enable the others to walk on clouds by herself. As payment for the wings, Rarity helped her in the casting. Thanks for nitpicking, actually, it helps!

>>596080596080 ah I see well that makes a lot of sense actually.  Wow I swear there was only 1 chapter like an hour ago I'll put this on my read later since I have to go to work now, but I look forward to finishing this.

>>596360596360 I derped and forgot how to upload multiple chapters at once But, they're all up now! Thanks for the fave, too!

Knew it!

>>596762596762 Heh, eeyup! It was obvious, but still, it had to be done. Who else had that kind of aiming skill?

Dear Celestia,

I saw a stallion's legs spread-ed far apart on the battlefield.

I never went back to war that day.

>>597781597781 Something tells me that he wasn't alive during that...

Plays like a dragon+No cutie mark=

>>597858597858 Why didn't I think of that!?

Just make sure not to really blast apart the screen in real life, ok Twilight?

>>599670599670 No promises.

I can't believe the suicide plan failed, oh well nothing is guarnteed in the world of Haylo.

DERPY!

>>603217603217 Nnope, nothing is guaranteed. That would explain my sister, who has Derpy-style eyes, being the single most menacing Halo player I've personally fought in splitscreen. Uhm, could you please hide those spoilers? You don't have to, but it would be an A+ in my book.

Ha "At a range, does less damage than hurtfull words." 1)Nice staying in Bungie style of includding humor at some descriptions [ ] or 2)If it came from a manual or something, thanks for includding it.

[At 0% damage: The player cannot cause any kind of damage, only glare and think angry thoughts. 0 lives: No respawns like real life, but at least your using it to kick ass across the universe and not hanging around your million dollar penthouse.]

>>609314609314 Totally original, as far as I am aware. And, if ya don't mind, could you clarify that second part up a bit for me?

This XBucks controller sounds worse than the 360's controller. Sorry but I prefer the Dualshocks. And why the hell do I have to hold down the button to turn on the controller, it should turn on with the consol.

Why doesn't anyone give love to the Gamecube, Genesis, PS1, Dreamcast, Saturn and other consoles in these types of fics.

Also I think Halo is just a little bit overrated. Good fic. I love it. Also what is up with XBox Live,  why isn't it free to access like PSN. Way to go Microsoft to line your already thick pockets. RICH BASTARDS!! AGAIN LOVE THE FIC!!!!

>>700529700529 Dualshocks won't work with hooves. You'd need suction cups to secure them onto a pony or else they can't play, which gives Spike a fair amount of difficulty.

The reason we don't do that is because a fair amount of us have no experience with thm. I've never used a Dreamcast, Genesis, Saturn, Atari, etc.

Eh, to each their own.  Personally, I can't stand playing Halo, but I still like it. I prefer RPGs and hack 'n' slash games. Thanks for the praise though. I dunno; I've never tried XBox Live. Not really that interested in it. Thanks for the fave, though.

Why does nearly everypony but Luna get a detailed description of how they were killed.... is she not good enough, and why doesn't she have an emoticon, she is the best pony and even twist gets one

>>702801702801 I didn't really feel like describing a silent killing. Any player of Halo knows there's little enough to be said about it. In regards to the emoticon, there's quite a few that people use that, while not in the standard set, can be found somewhere on the Internet. They have Discord, Luna, the CMC, etc.

Oh my god, I kind of want to steal Balloonatic as a screen name for things. That's just awesome.

>>714826714826 Go right ahead

And even with all that description, i still can't imagine what the controllers look like...

>>953020953020 Imagine a lap-desk with two plungers for control sticks, big colourful buttons, and the Xbox logo in pink instead of green. Actually, don't, that's still pretty hard to imagine...

>>596080596080 hows that work? Only Twilight can cast like that, and thats only because her special skill is magic. Rarity can only cast the diamond hunting spell because her special skill...diamonds?

>>955056955056 She just contributed the energy; Twilight was worn out from the wing spell, so Rarity donated a portion of her magical energy. Essentially, Twilight "borrowed" some of Rarity's magic.

>>700529700529 Microsoft also gives far far better servers. And Halo is sooooo fun to play with friends, especially when their in same room. They choose 360 because 360 is currently the most popular console (Wii has the lowest players, but ironicly far higher owners)  

And 360 has great controllers, far  better then ps3 (not my fault cause experience, I played ps2 for 8 years, 360 remotes felt instantly more comfortable. Its terrible for FPS, but all consoles are, only a mouse and keyboard can play FPS well.

And the button in the centre, it does turn on the controller, but if the console isn't on, it also turns on console.

No I'm not a console gamer, im all for pc gaming.

Crazy assumption time!!

...what if Split Screen is Discord?!

>>956098956098 Nope, he's too busy being *dons his sunglasses* stoned.

Yay!

Fluttershy, as the highest ranked of the six

You literally just said Pinkie was rank 3, and the Flutters was rank 6. *slow clap*

>>960429960429 An error!? Which chapter? I shall smite it with the fury of a thousand suns!!

Also, thank you kindly for pointing it out.

Edit: I feel stupid. I only just noticed that the chapter number appears on that little bar there. 'Tis fixed.

Despite being a gamer myself, I never once imagined a battle quite so epic as what I just read in any game, and with another promising one coming up shortly This fic has my undivided attention right now.

... this conclusion was not at all what I was expecting, and yet it is probably the best ending to anything I have ever read. You deserve infinite likes and favorites for this, you brilliant writer, you

>>13691821369182 Heh, apologies for taking so long. Try the other works I have, they're worth continuing. Also, glad you liked it!