Dear Diary,
I’m writing those lines to lets you know how the kingdom is doing. I shall write in this journal the whole story of what happened after the Changelings’ attack on Canterlot after the death of the Adoptive prince and son of Celestia, until the ascension of Blueblood to power. Those lines shall only be read by myself or somepony else that I judge of confidence.
I think I should start by what his now called by ponies “The Day when the sun lost is flames.” know too as when the long thought lost Changeling Kingdom attacked our nation and killed our beloved prince Onyx. Soon after the burial of our deceased prince, Celestia, ex co-ruler of Equestria, entered into a deep state of depression. At the start, only ponies close to her saw it as she was barely eating or going out of her room, the only exception being when she had to be at the day court or to cry in the royal garden where her son was buried, but it soon started to became worse as the days passed. Her mane was no longer flowing, she was cancelling almost every day court and no longer wanted to see her sister nor any other member of her family. Sometime she would stay in Onyx’s room for days, crying his name, hiding from the rest of the world.
Then Cadance had to leave Equestria to go rule over the Crystal Kingdom. I will not enter in the details but I can say it did not do anything good to Celestia’s state of mind.
Now with two of three of the Alicorns no longer available for the day court, only Luna remained to take succession on Celestia’s business.
In the first month, Luna had the strength to take care of both the day and night court. Even myself I thought that maybe things will go into a nice direction, that maybe with Luna taking care of every royal responsibility and me taking to trying to heal the mind of Celestia, things could return like before, but I was wrong, I was very wrong. After maybe seven months of attending every court, raising the sun and the moon, holding every festivity and more, Luna found herself out of strength to continue this way, she was forced to abandon the day court so she could put her energy more on the night one, which had the consequence of making the kingdom less efficient. Ponies were talking about how things started to degrade themselves, the sun was less and less bright, the nights were dull, the ceremony short and on the verge of being deadly boring.
Now with two of the three rulers of Equestria not being able to properly rule over their kingdom, the council had no other choice but to take things in their hoof, and so they “momentarily” threw Celestia out of power and gave all her responsibility to Blueblood, Saying that he was the only one fit for this role. As for myself, I think that the council is nothing more than pawns that would do anything for gold, and if there is something that Blueblood has, it’s gold.
From a military point of view, I could say that Blueblood did a good job on protecting the kingdom, the economy is strong for the royal family, no other nation threaten us, the sun and the moon both rise at the right time, and our military is well prepared for any other attempt of wars against us. But from a more civil point of view, I can say that the land has drastically changed. There is but only a few celebrities happening, the ponies have less and less time to be with their family, since the taxes are so high that everypony needs to work twice as much time than before to be able to live correctly. As each day passes, more and more ponies get thrown out of their own home for not being able to pay their rents.
I just hope that someday things will change for the better, in the meantime I shall do my best to take care of my son, Dusk Sparkle, who is now ready to start his first year of school, and my Husband.
Twilight Sparkle.
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Dusk Sparkle stared lazily at the blackboard, who was to the far front of the room, sitting in his desk, diligently writing down the notes that Sweetie Belle herself was writing on the blackboard in front of the class. Since three years ago, Mayor Mare had allowed Sweetie Belle to have her own classroom, neighbor to Cheerilee’s class, and with the financial help of her sister, she had been able to buy new items for the class so all the desks and boards were fancy and new, and the classroom smelled fresh. Anything that Miss Sweetie Belle was saying was drowned out by the scratch of the students’ pencils.
“Now class,” Started Sweetie Belle as she placed herself behind her teacher’s desk. “it’s time to start the presentation about the thing you love the most I made you all prepare for today? So, who wants to start?” She asked in an excited voice.
In a perfectly coordinated movement, every student raised their hoof, all wanting to be the first one to present their project. As Sweetie Belle looked through her class to pick one of her students, she saw that one of her new students was daydreaming in the middle of her class.
“Dusk Sparkle.” Said the teacher in a calm and motherly tone. “Would you mind presenting your project in front of the class?” She asked.
The young stallion, who was no one else than Dusk Sparkle, raised his head to face the teacher. He was not particularly happy to be called back to duty by his teacher, but there was a small part of him that felt proud to be the first one presenting, and he hoped to make a good impression on his classmates. Being the new student of a class was never easy, but his mother told him many times that he had everything to succeed at making friends fast and have good grades,
“Sure, I guess.” Said the pegasus in a low shy voice as he raised up from his seat and walked to the front of the class, a huge cardboard stuck under his left wing, with a plush representing a phoenix under his right one. The young Pegasus placed the cardboard in front of him and faced all of his classmates, before he shyly started to talk.
“My name is Dusk Sparkle, and I would like to talk about my favorite toy,” Started the Pegasus, before showing to everypony the plushie he had brought with him. “his name is Philomena, and he was given to me by my mom, which herself received it from an old friend of hers. She said that it came from t-” Continue Dusk before being interrupted by an older classmate.
“Look at that, the little baby wants to talk about a toy for baby,” Yelled the bully, a yellow unicorn, to the other classmates, who all smirked. Dusk ignored them and kept going.
“My mother said this plushie represented a past friendship she had and wished me to, just like her, make as many friend possible. Each night I-”
“Do you still sleep with it like a baby who’s afraid to be alone in the dark?.” Asked the same bully from before, laughing at the expense of Dusk. The other classmate laughed at him too, before Sweetie Belle intervened.
“Bulky! Be nice to your classmate! You were the new one too, once. How would you have liked it if you would have been treated like that?”
“I would have been angry and sad.” Answered the yellow unicorn before whispering under his breath.
“Good, now keep going, Dusk.”
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Dusk opened his locker, the bells had rung a couple of minute ago, signaling the end of the class and every students were preparing himself to return home. As Dusk pulled out his backpack from the locker, he felt somepony pushed him on the ground. The young pegasus turned his head to see who pushed him, before meeting the face of the same unicorn who had made fun of him and his plushie earlier.
“If it’s not the little prick that brought his plushie to school.” Said the bully as he picked up the backpack of Dusk with his magic.
“What do you want?” Asked Dusk as he rose up on his hoof. He was a bit scared, but he did not show it.
“What do I want? I want you to learn your place in this school. I want you and every other pegasus that attend this school to show me respect!” Answered the Unicorn as he opened the backpack, and started to pull out everything that was in it.
“Why would I show respect to a bully like you?” Dusk asked back with a taste of anger in his voice. If there was one thing that Twilight had teached him, it was to never be racist, and Dusk despised racists, but this Unicorn was clearly being mean to him for being different from him.
“Simply because I’m a unicorn, which makes me superior to you and every other pegasus who come to study here. Plus, if you don’t do everything as I say….” Dusk breath became faster as he saw the bully take his phoenix plushie with his magic. “If you don't do as I say, I will make sure that you never see your so precious phoenix, ever again.”
“No, please give it back.” Said Dusk, tears in his eyes, but the bully only ignored him and left with the plushie, leaving the young pegasus alone in the hallway of the school.
“ I want my mommy…” Whispered the pegasus before a rain of tears falled down of his eyes..
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plz bring onyx back. i dont know how but do it!!!!!
Well shit, Blueblood's in charge...as if things weren't bad enough for the kingdom...Still I enjoyed this, and I beleive it was well worth the wait.
Can't wait to continue reading, but I shall be patient....ish
...A bit too grim from the get-go, but all in all, I look forward to seeing Onyx come back and beat Blueballs into his proper place.
Glad to see an new story but how in the world did Twilight had a son? I guess the next chapters or two will explain.
This is going to be really unsubtle, isn't it?
Heck, the obvious bully character is even called "the bully" by the narrative. Doesn't exactly leave much room for interpretation.
Now if something unexpected happens, like, say, Blueblood performing as more than just a negative backdrop against whom the OC protagonist can look good...
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I made it obvious because it the first thing I wrote for the past 7 month and I kinda rushed myself for it. (which why the chapter is not even 2k words.) But I plan on making the next chapters in better quality.
with Blueblood in control, Canterlot has leaked into Ponyville. This can't be good
Grammar has improved... good. I'll fave, see how this goes.
What the heck happened?
Ousting Celestial and Luna from the throne? So now we have widespread bigotry for the unicorns who have bought power. Disgusting. This will turn into a wildfire that will burn down the entire nation if it isn't stamped out, with the oppressed calling out for Blue boy's head on a pike.
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I decided to return to my roots when I made Blueblood an Asshole...I think people like hating him
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That's rather blunt. I think people just like to have an identifiable villain or know who the main antagonist is. Blueblood, to me, got off on the wrong hoof. We had one night to see this guy and not too much else to go on from there. That's just me though, how you want to write your story is all on you buddy. Good to see you back in action.
YES!!! finally man, I have high expectatives on this, by the way, i too release the sequel of my story fang, feel free to read it if you haven't.
The end to the first book was so sad
I taking a guess that Duck is Onyx and Twi's son. But the only evidence backing this is the sex scene in the clop stories for the first one and that is stretching it a bit.
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Well ima put this in read later. Cuase i have no freaking clue on whats gonna happen
Ah, nice. I enjoyed your last story, despite it's flaws. You and author of The Monster of Canterlot help inspire me to do my own take on these kind of stories. I can't wait to see where you will take us this.
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First of all, this chapter seems a little rushed, the character's personalities appear to be very lacking in depth, and (please don't let these next couple of statements be to discouraging) your grammar skills are lacking, and the story overall lacking in depth. Don't be to upset by my rather blunt criticism. I think this story has a lot of potential and all it needs is little more effort to get off the ground and into the featured box. My suggestion, is that you get an editor or a friend (after all, friendship is magic right?),or family member that help you with your writing and overall story planning so as to get decent and satisfying (for you and the reader of course) chapters out at decent pace.
I am sooooo proud of you! Though this chapter can be better, it is a great start after your long break. I have Favorited, tracked, and Bookmarked this story, as well as liked it. You have my full support and I am so happy for you. (God I sound old) OKAY! LET'S CELEBRATE WITH CAKE!
I missed you so much
I'll admit I never did think I would enjoy your last story but I got into it and gave it the Benifit of the doubt, and I did in fact enjoy it greatly. Been a while sense i last read it but I have to admit the way you made this chapter seemed a tad rush.
Ether way, keep writing and more shall come!
Just a little help with that little bit :)
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You may not know this, but high taxes = bad economy. Home foreclosure is also one of the fastest ways to shoot the economy to hell. In a situation like this the economy would be in shambles, not "strong".
I also find it very hard to believe Celestia would fall this easily. Many kings from many civilizations past have lost their children but they continued ruling because it was their responsibility to. Celestia doesn't strike me as the type to give up on the kingdom that loves and needs her. It looks like this story will have the exact same problems as the last one. *sigh*
The underlined parts are unnecessary details. There are more but I'm pointing these two out specifically because they're so close together.
Why isn't the teacher stepping in immediately? "Evil triumphs when good men do nothing" and she did nothing at first. She temporarily allowed the archetypal, shallow, and poorly characterized "villain" to "triumph" when she could've easily stopped him after his first outburst.
Like it or not, he has a really valid point. The unicorns are very clearly the most powerful of the three races (excluding alicorns).
This sh*t again? You used almost the exact same BS plot point in the first one.
I hope Twilight and Onyx rekindle their love.