It's the one year anniversary of two mares: Lyra Heartstrings and Bon Bon. Unfortunately, Lyra has forgotten all about it and is met with a disappointed Bon Bon.
In order to save face, Lyra lies and says she was playing with her to see if she remembered. When Bon Bon suspects she truly forgot, she makes a bet with her to see if she really did put together a nice night for them.
Now Lyra has to put together a completely on the fly anniversary... and things don't necessarily go as planned...
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I'm not sure if you want feedback on this, but here goes...
I think you have written Lyra and Bon-Bon characters well - I find them very relatable.
In particular Lyra's vulnerability and need to be loved really makes me feel for her.
Bon Bon's less sensitive, but level-headed personality provides a great counterpoint.
What I enjoy the most about this story, though, is their interaction.
The fact Lyra's vulnerability bring out a softer side of Bon Bon's
personality - Bon Bon taking care of Lyra when she is injured, and
reassuring her when she is in distress - adds so much to the story.
Finally: To hear that someone loves you. To hear that they do so
despite everything that goes wrong because they know that you
tried. To hear that this is what matters to them, and know,
from the that experiences you've shared, that what they
say is the truth - that will always melt my heart.
5773835 Thank you NineLives, I appreciate it.
So adorable. That's what I want in a relationship. Someone who doesn't care if you mess up, someone who cares for you when you're hurt, and loves you unconditionally.
6706871 I've been in a relationship where things have gone wrong, and you get punished for it. So I decided to write a story where I could have the characters show each other what love really is.
I love this. I especially like the part where lyra snaps at bon bon and bon bon doesn't miss a beat in how she responds with her tough love, especially in how she doesn't respond by getting upset at lyra for how she was acting because of her emotions.