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"I'm Off!" said the Madman!!

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Queen Chrysalis is a queen no more. Her children are dead, her body is broken, and the love that Shining Armor and Cadence hit her with has sent her far, far away from Equestria, far from the world that she knew.

Now she lives on the fringes of human society, taking love where she can, not sure why her will to live hasn't been extinguished, wishing for forgiveness for failing her poor children.

Then the dreams begin, dreams of a vast, sprawling necropolis, a place where the monsters live, a place called....Midian.

So, driven by guilt and by hunger, she heads off, North of Athabasca, East of Peace River, near Shere Neck, North of Dwyer, to Midian.

There she is welcomed by the Nightbreed, a group of monsters who shun the human world and live in peace.

Chrysalis believes that she may have found a new home. But her arrival has caused some stirrings, and an old foe of hers has awakened and joined forces with a human madman.

Now Chrysalis will have to confront the ghosts of her past to protect her new family, and her journey will take her from Midian back to Equestria as a fallen king and a serial killer hunt her and her friends down.

Diverges from MLP and Nightbreed.
MLP is owned by Hasbro.
Nightbreed/Cabal is owned by Clive Barker.
The pic is a Fright-Rags t-shirt.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 40 )

exoic spices

exotic.

that he was one

Narcisse sounds like a female name. *shrug* Also you didn't adequately explain if Chrysalis transformed into a human which made me puzzled for a bit.

Haven't watched it btw. The movie.

5900985 Actually I think you have a good start. Please keep it up.

5901087 Though I currently don't have dark dark stories please do check my stories too if you can. Ty.

That scene always makes me cringe, I just feel so sorry for the guy. This was an excellent start, I cannot wait to see more.

instinctually

No such word. Instinctively maybe?

Bigger chappies if you please. I want to see more.

Just when you thought things couldn't get worse... :twilightoops:

“Of course!” He crowed, “That’s what controls my magic here! My anger, of course it would be my anger, hahaha!”

12:30 Minsc escaping reminds me of this. Btw your Sombra is scary but... eating children? PFFFFT really?

Sombra was quiet throughout, never once interrupting, never once making a sound. When Decker had finished, he sighed and said, “I know Chrysalis, she committed a grave offence towards me long ago.”

A bit wee cornily vague but... untriguing.

as she has done

,as she has probably done,

Btw the way the doctor was revelaed as also a villain suprised me... and sickened me. Good job.

6016484 Thanks for the comment, 'm glad Decker's reveal gotcha, and as for Sombra eating children, well..... I kinda wanted to take him down a creepier and more unpleasant path. I mean, he was basically the Lord of Fear back in Equestria and I'm pretty sure watching your kid get devoured by some sharp toothed monster who also rules the place you live in and won't let you leave is pretty damn terrifying.

We'll learn more about his rule later and, rest assured, it'll get worse.

6016773 What I mean is that eating children is something the grannys say to their children. Usually children are sacrificed.

Ah, Peloquin. He was always my favourite Midianite. Midianese? Midianotian? Midianer? Monster. :heart:

<Hazzah! Chrysalis has finally found Midian! Hopefully they shall accept her as one of their own. Bonus points for the appearance of Peloquin and Shuna Sassi. I wonder if they will see just how well the Changeling Queen can shapesift into other forms. Can't wait until next chapter!>

<Also, I just noticed a quick grammer mistake that should be fixed!>

“Pah, fools.” she said aloud, feeling his spirits lift higher at the mockery.

6167742 I think monster is fine with them. :)

6168470 I think you need to give Chrysalis a bit more "strength of character". Chrysalis was a really "bold" character and it's a bit offputting for her to well... cry so much? Dunno. She needs something like a dark determination... a drive to see things forth, to try and reclaim what she lost, to ammend her mistakes.

Comment posted by Hopefullygoodgrammar deleted Jul 10th, 2015

so wondrous and grotesque as Midian.
Chrysalis had never seen anything so grand or grotesque.
It’s like nothing I’ve ever seen.

Nothing wrong here just... a wee bit repetitive.

Question... how could they know she could shift? Unless I didn't see her use her abilities here. Sorry.

6191129 Crap, you're right. *Sigh* Lemme redo that 'un.

6193641 Awesomeness. btw this is a movie or a series?

6193662 It's a movie, it can be found on Netflix.

6200308 Don't have netflix in Greece if it's a channel.

6201108 Meh I'll still see if I want to see it or not. If I have to pay I might just torrent it.

6201158 It's worth SO much more than just some torrent. Buy it somewhere, there're so many places to do it, Amazon, Itunes and Youtube. It's worth it, watch the trailer and get the feel of it. But don't torrent it, please.

6201247 Would I if I could man. The truth is not much can be done with banks closed.

6201389 I see...hmmm...guess I'll leave that decision up to you. M'pretty bad with current news. Did something happen?

6201401 I'd rather discuss the situation of Greece over a pm.

It lives! An excellent chapter that was worth the wait.

Glad to see this story gets a well deserved update! Hopefully the next one will be be in time to celebrate Halloween!

Heard the name of the movie, never watched it.

So far I really like it, I just hope things will go well for Chryssie.

One note:

“Let me finish, bird-brain!” snapped the winged woman, “The older ‘Breed were there when we first came under attack, they were there before then, too, and they told me that there are other worlds, all connected. I just can’t remember the name...Squiddy...Scorney….Tweedleedee?”

Chrysalis’s eyes lit up at the prospect. The spark of hope, which had been waning ever since she had first seen the new world, rekindled.

Feels like there's something missing between these two paragraphs.

Cya
Raziel-chan

6582206 I think there was, but I have no clue what it was. I'll have to remedy this later.

It lives!

Nice chapter. I wonder what will happen next.

And merry Chryssiemass!

Cya
Raziel-chan

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