It's okay.

eh pacing needs some work

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Though I should rather blame myself for turning "View Mature" on.

Well, look on the bright side.

This story is perfect material for RatherHomely's riffing. Sadly, qualifying for this means that the story is of the same quality as "The Spiderses", "Sweet Apple Massacre", and "Luna's Magic Wand." In other words, reading it causes psychological trauma.

550882 thank you for your constructive criticism i will admit i did try to fix the names but got lazy in the middle and stoped. and yes im not the best at grammer or writing in general but i will try to improve on this (at least i tried). i also do have a tendency to referance things i have read or seen like sweet apple massacre i just thought of and said okay ill just put it in and see what happens like in the next chapter a cupcakes referance might be put in. and the gender mixup i didnt catch on my proof read so thank you for catching that for me. and this is my first time using the site to post stories and stuff so i didnt really know what i was doing at the time. so thanks again

lol! I should read more clopfics it's hilarious to see these characters doing unsavory things amongst each other. Especially, when the spelling is atrocious! 'shoved his duck into her, huh.' Kinky!

There is always a few insane people that like stuff that is clearly terrible.

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I think you replied to the wrong guy there.

556366 At Least You Had One

This is a good idea but the #WordCrimes are so many and so distracting, got to work on that, but this is really a good idea for a fic