Hmm... It's good... Not enough blood... Or viscera, for that matter. While ripping the heart out and feeding it was a nice touch, there was not enough of that. All we're really seeing is Blacklight go around killing shit. The pet thing... Not bad, but could be better. Not enough scenes describing it. Yeah, cut off the legs. Woo, collar. Yay, 'pet'. Clever words are clever. But, I want a story to make me shudder as he rips them open, and feeds them their internal organs. I want Mortal Kombat levels of death. The story is fantastic, don't get me wrong. But, it is simply just not enough. Gimme more gore, and I'll keep coming back for more. (Oh, hey, a rhyme! I seem to do that sometimes!)

Yay! Its back.

This is gonna be a looooooooong hunt.

Very good work, this was a bit rushed but good never the less.

I'm really enjoying the plot, and all the opportunites it brings for the future, you're wording is on point and while you are descriptive you are only descriptive on certian parts.

Thanks for the read, and hopefully you can write more soon.

~☆The Fallen Phantom

The Blueblood hate is getting old

Master a few minutes I finally cornered her in a dead end corridor.

After a few minutes.

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Thanks for pointing that out. Don't know how I messed that up. It should be fixed now.