I write silly stories about ponies. Beware
Sometimes its hard to be a narrator. Join one as he tries to write a Spike and Sweetie Belle ship fic. The attempt will take him quite a long way as the ponies show him that just cause you can type, doesn't mean anypony is gonna cooperate.
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Your grammar could use a little work, but overall it was a nice story!
Story was nice. Just some grammar and spelling errors. Pretty good for a first fic.
Question though: is your OC a slightly used virgin? They make awesome sacrifices to the narrators
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Thank you. I'm never really sure if my grammer is any good. I work at a factory and type it up on my phone during break, and open office only catches so much. Any advice about the grammer you can give me?
5537076 There's the writing guide here, and I also noticed you sometimes wrote stuff like this:
That period should be a comma, because it isn't the end of a sentence. A comma is appropriate if the dialogue is followed by an action.
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Ok. That was one of the things I wasn't sure about. Thank you. When I get some time I'll clean it up. And I'll keep it in mind while I clean up the next fan fic I plan to post.
5537144 Anytime!
This is a brilliant concept, and you did a great job. There were several grammar errors, but I had little-to-no problems reading the story. The story was nicely paced, and I stayed interested (which is relatively rare for me).
It was not perfect, but you have talent. Great job.
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I myself might want to use this concept later on. Would that be OK?
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Don't see why not. Feel free to run with the concept and have fun with it. I'm also glad you enjoyed it so much. With all this positive feedback, I'll be sure to post the other one I wrote soon.
I spotted a few mistakes, but all in all I give it a 9/10. The concept was really interesting and the writing pretty good, liked and faved
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
Who's the Other tag for?
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I have. They gave me an automated rejection letter saddly. I'm cleaning it up to send it back in.
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The other tag is for Kranglor, the narrator, and the random OCs at the end.
Also, I just resubmitted it to EQD. Like I said, they sent me a rejection note before but hopefully it will make it this time. But I am glad you think it belongs up there. Its positive support like yours and everyone elses that really makes the writing worth it. That and whenever some one head desks at a troll fic I write.
Ha got a few good laughs out of me. Mostly cause of the pointed out cliches Althogh I don't shop at all. And dislike lesbian /gay ships so that like most shops in this site gah.
This gonna be a meta story isn’t it?
Knew it. Was funny. Nice work.