Is she alright?
Oh no, what should we do…?
Let’s just leave her alone already, she’s probably just nappin’. Like I was…
Of course not, Dash. She clearly needs help.
Voices…
Wait guys, she waking up! Hello? Hello, are you alright?
Where do they come from? My head was throbbing like crazy and I heard voices, which sounded strangely familiar. I opened my eyes slightly, meeting six pairs of others. My eyes widened. Six mares were staring back at me, worry and curiosity in their eyes. I looked around as I tried to sit up. Slowly standing on my hooves…
Wait a minute? Hooves…?
I looked down. Hooves… I had hooves! My whole body had changed and was coated in a dark purple color. What was going on? I looked back at the six mares in front of me. I looked at each one of them. They looked familiar, they were the main six of the series. Twilight approached me as I failed to stand and stumbled back down. Some other pony behind me caught me before I could hit the ground. Blinking a few times, I looked at them. It was Big Macintosh. He had worry in his eyes as he held me. I opened my mouth to speak, but the words came out as whispers. I sighed and decided it was for the best not to talk.
“Are you alright?”
Twilight approached me closer again and put a hoof gently on my shoulder. I nodded, still not quite understanding what was happening.
“Why don’t we bring her to nurse Redheart, Twilight?”
The purple unicorn nodded and asked the stallion if he wanted to help. He nodded back at the mare and brought me, together with the other ponies, to the hospital. I don’t remember much after that, waking up a while later in a hospital bed with the other ponies still there.
“Twilight, she’s waking up” One of them whispered. I couldn’t hear which one, but I heard footsteps(or hoofsteps) coming closer. My eyes opened slightly, not used to the bright light that surrounded my whole being.
“Where am I?” I asked, looking around the room when my eyes adjusted to the light. The purple unicorn walked closer and sat down beside the bed.
“In the hospital” She told me. “We found you just outside town. You were lucky we were there for our weekly animal day, otherwise you would probably still be there, alone.” She had worry and relief in her voice as she talked to me. Her eyes showed pity and looked at me warmly, as though she had been really worried.
“We saw ya' fall from a tree” Another pony said. I recognized the voice as Applejacks. She sounded just as worried as Twilight. I looked around the room again.
“What’s your name?”
I looked at the purple mare and remembered something. I’m a human. Well, before I became a pony… I looked around the room for a second before looking back at the unicorn.
“Angel”
I said, making up a name from my own.
“Angel Blossom”
I made up a total pony name and smiled as Twilight and the others seemed to believe me.
“Alright Angel. I’m Twilight Sparkle” She said before looking at the group of ponies behind her. “These are my friends” She pointed at them with her hoof.
“Applejack”
“Howdy” The orange earth pony tipped her hat slightly, smiling at me.
“Rarity”
“Hello there” The white unicorn smiled warmly. She wore a fancy scarf and a beautiful hat.
“Rainbow Dash”
The cyan pegasus grinned brightly before flapping her wings and doing a loop inside the room. “The awesome Rainbow Dash” She corrected before landing back on her seat again. Twilight sighed, ignoring the rainbow maned pegasus, and continued.
“Pinkie Pie”
The pink party pony jumped up and bounced towards me, making me smile with anticipation. She was one of my favorites from the show, because of her always positive atmosphere. Pinkie Pie grabbed one of my front hooves and shook it lightly, obviously not wanting to hurt me. I smiled even more at that. She was just so kind.
“Hey there! I’m so glad you’re alright, I was so worried when we found you ---“ She kept talking until Twilight interrupted her.
“Pinkie…” The pink pony looked at her friend confused before realizing what she was doing and walking back to her seat mouthing a ‘sorry’. I smiled at her, accepting her apology, which made her smile back.
Twilight continued again. “And Fluttershy”
The timid pegasus smiled slightly at me, partly hiding her face behind her mane. I smiled warmly at her as she whispered a quiet ‘hi’. Then Twilight looked back at me.
“Nurse Redheart said you weren’t hurt badly, only that you were exhausted”
I nodded in return. “Yeah, I don’t feel to great…”
“What happened anyway?” Twilight asked. I looked at her, thinking what had happened. Then it hit me. How I had gotten here. I was sent here by the villains. If the main six knew, they would probably banish me or something! I don’t even know how to go back to my own world. So apparently I didn’t have a choice. I had to stay here, because I couldn’t go anywhere else. Though there was just one question;
What should I tell them?
The six ponies looked at me curious as I smiled weakly. I looked at every one of them muttering a quiet ‘um…’ I sighed.
“Well, I don’t remember actually…”
I looked at the sheets that covered me in the bed. I didn’t know if they believed me or not.
I looked back at the main six. Twilight nodded to me in understanding. “Maybe you should stay here for the night” She offered.
I nodded to her. “That would be better”
“I’ll ask nurse Redheart if that’s okay” Twilight said, already getting back on her hooves, but I stopped her.
“That won’t be necessary. I’ll ask her myself” I smiled weakly at her as she thought for a moment before frowning slightly.
“No, you stay here in bed. I’m going to ask her” With that the purple unicorn left the room, her tail wiggling from left to right and back again. It was just so weird seeing all this in real life. I was a pony now, but I had no idea where to go. I don’t know how to get back to my world. And to be honest, I don’t even want to go back. I’ve always dreamed of living in Equestria, so for now, I’m going to enjoy my time here.
The five other ponies in the room talked to me about their adventures and told about the Elements of Harmony. I already knew about everything, but I’m not going to tell them. They would hate me and I don’t want that. When Twilight came back, she looked at me with a big smile.
“You’ll be staying at my house for now” She exclaimed. I blinked. Her house? Why? Still I smiled, unable to hold back the happiness that filled me.
“I’ll be taking care of you until you get your memory back” She told me. Now I was shocked. They thought I forgot everything? Well, I did tell them I didn’t remember how I got here. Let’s just roll with this.
“That’s great, Twilight, but you don’t have to go through all the trouble just for me” I said, waving a hoof defensively. Twilight trotted over to me.
“Oh no. I’m taking care of you, if you want it or not” She said, grinning brightly. I smiled at her. She really was a mother type.
I sighed. “Thanks Twilight” She smiled warmly at me.
“No problem”
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who cares? i have never read a fic where a human was sent to equestria by the main villains.
come to think about it. this is the first HiE fic i have ever read that has a female main character.
that must be fixed, any recommendations?
oh this story is going to be good, i can just feel it.
im not even kidding, my instincts tell me that this story in gonna be great.
never before seen equestria enter scenario, first girl as the main character AND really well written. I LOVE IT!!!
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It's better than the human becoming a pony willingly. At least for me. It's a major turn off for me. Dunno why.
567756 Thank you. That really cheers me on to keep writing
Personally I like HiE, hell my stories are HiE (just not earth human), and this one looks promising.
hm.. a female HiE well that's a bit unusual and just because of that fact i'll give this a shot
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Happy to help
But remember this:
Im not praising you just for the hell of it
Im praising you because you earned it.
Remember that
You deserve it. Every single word of it
Now keep em coming in the pace you feel like
"otherwise you were probably still there, alone." otherwise you would probably still be there alone.
Just finished, and well....err, geh, (Deep inhale of breath[Dramatic Effect]) AWESOME!YAY!
okey after reading this i have a few thing i don't like but over all i say its good
The tund pony thing.. im not liking it, never really have and probably never will. its just so plane/boring and above all overused as hell, and i fail to see the significance/point of the character be human in the first pales if he/she will en up a pony.
and also while we are on the topic of HiE turned pony, you haven't said what kind of pony she is jet, you may have left that out accidentally or on purpose but regardless you shod include that the sooner the better, i mean there's no reason to delay it sean's you can't do any plot twists with that,
unless she is an Alicorn...
that who'd be quite cool even tho that is notlikely sean twilight with friends who'd have probably react to that. but i like in HiE´s especially adventures ones when the human protagonist have powers, ability´s, intelligence, just something that make them stand out.
so the pony turnd thing is so far the only real thing i have to complain about, the rest of the story is in my opinion quite good, the idea of having discord chrysalis NMM working together in someway and playing this girl as a pawn in there game, i like that. i wounder what ulterior motives they all have, or if they simply use her to get free from imprisonment
(tho i don't see why chrysalis needs that sens she got of easy compared to the rest of the trio) maybe there will be any backstabbing between them as well?
Equestria in this universe is not just this different world but a creation of humankind and watched as a show, meaning Angela knows stuff..
and i hope you have Angela keep that kind of information to her self.
but i doubt you will do that scene what's the point of having it in the story if you are not gonna use it, and if that is the case i hope you at least try to come up whit a good explanation for it, diffident dimensions/universes i don't care everything is better than just leaving it at
"I along whit millions of other people use to watch you on tv (which is not creepy at all) and your just a cartoon we invented"
And last 3 more really quick points i wanted to bring up
1# its possibly i missed this even tho i red it twice, but i did not caught Angela´s age, i would appreciate if you would include it in an upcoming chapter
2# your using NMM as a villain in this story and so far it seams she is her own individual and not a part of Luna, and that's good im so glade you decided to play it out that way, but if your going to ever have her posses someone to get control over there body or some shit along those lines, have Luna NOT be the target, that is so cliche and even more dune to death the HiE turn pony so please if your going with that have anyone else except Luna be the target
3# when Angela is lying in hospital the first thing she asks “Where am i" which they responded to and just a few sentences later twilight asks her if she can talk??
What did she forget they talked only a few seconds ago? now i know this is just nitpicking for errors but its bothering me much more then it shod, so i just thought to point that out
I hope you liked my criticism/thoughts on this and i hope you find it constructive rather than just pissing you off hehe
Great chapter cant wait for more
569751 Thanks, it's a great help in some things.
And 1; Sorry, I did forget that But lets say she's about 16, 17 years old, maybe a bit older but not much
2: I'm not going to let NMM posses Luna, so don't be worried about that
3: Woops, never noticed that I'll change that later
Thanks for the critisism though, it's really nice to see people that care about it :D
569751 Alright, I removed the 'can you talk?' part Thanks for pointing that out
Thank you for answering my question and reading that wall of thex that was my comment, i tend to ramble on when i get started
and no problem, if i think something is good or bad (or i just want to voice my opinion) i always tries to comment, gives the writer some acknowledgment a chance to improve,
not that my opinion is always right, but you get what i mean
Amnesiac?
A classic.