(Not a Fairy Tail crossover picture gave me an idea) Victor a creation of science a man with little knowledge of the outside world thinking of it only as a distant dream is given a chance to be part of a new world and a chance at a life
"Fluttershy correct (she nods) okay consider it a small repayment for letting me stay at your house...........adding this and any help you may need at your house could be my rent to you till I can get settled and find a job."
first off, i cannot understand this statement but i will do my best to fix it.
"Fluttershy, Correct?" She nods. "Okay then. Consider it a repayment for letting me stay at your home... In addition to this, any help you may need could be my rent to you until I can find a job and get settled."
First, if he was a lab experiment, why/how does he know what a job is, much less rent?
ugh. reading this just begs for attention. Please either get an editor or let me help. the story is good but the grammar is horrid.
Dear author, I am almost done with my edited version. I did not change the story, simply edit out unnecessary information(which i did not find that often) and made the paragraphs make sense. i will privately message you the version when it is done.
Okay get the whole alternate universe and dna dragon thing, but honestly it dosent feel like it deserves to be a dragon fic. To me, it just feels like one of those dumb anime fics where supposedly they are half something but just really have just ears and tails, something of a cheap costume and little to no creativity. I know its not your art but concept is still the same and lacks true character.
RD and AJ : not cool
THIS FIC : SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO COOL
.....you better make it good or else.
I was redirected here by the Blocked and Deleted club.
Well then. That escalated quickly.
first off, i cannot understand this statement but i will do my best to fix it.
First, if he was a lab experiment, why/how does he know what a job is, much less rent?
ugh. reading this just begs for attention. Please either get an editor or let me help. the story is good but the grammar is horrid.
Dear author, I am almost done with my edited version. I did not change the story, simply edit out unnecessary information(which i did not find that often) and made the paragraphs make sense. i will privately message you the version when it is done.
5464320 Okay thanks ?
I hope you plan on continuing this
5468952 yep
5469683 nice pic by the way
Karu want more
Didn't see that coming. Looks like that brought back some bad memories.
Moar
Okay get the whole alternate universe and dna dragon thing, but honestly it dosent feel like it deserves to be a dragon fic. To me, it just feels like one of those dumb anime fics where supposedly they are half something but just really have just ears and tails, something of a cheap costume and little to no creativity. I know its not your art but concept is still the same and lacks true character.
5480175 ok
I like the pic, but why is it of Natsu?
5480312 Found it on facebook some guy posted It like it tried my best at cropping the pic
5480327 MOAR
5481178 soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo-
(Looking up at him, she easily dwarfed Victor by a good two feet and from what she could tell, he stood around 7'' 4 in height )
If he's taller, wouldn't he dwarf her?
i will kill you Rainbow Dash
I fucking hate rainbow dash