A little bit of mood whiplash there at the end. Trixie's thoughts before that didn't indicate she minded that much. An extra sentence or two indicating how upset she was might have helped, even if it was just Sunset noticing Trixie was trembling while getting dressed or something. But all-in-all, the characterization makes sense.
It did feel a little bit forced, but I'm glad it's there. Things don't always go according to plan, and there should be consequences for their actions.
Now...if Trixie really thought Sunset forced her into having sex with Sonata, and believed she was raped, I would love to see the outcome of that. Either a big fallout, fight and then a make-up bit OR take it to an extreme and have Trixie call the police and have Sunset arrested.
I look forward to more. Great job and keep up the great work.
Awesome Chapter!..
I'm sorry but i have to say this...
After A Month Or More In Developement.. Will The Next Chapter Be Worth The Weight?...
now if you need me... this girl has matters to see too...
Great job . Please bring out a new chapter .
A little bit of mood whiplash there at the end. Trixie's thoughts before that didn't indicate she minded that much. An extra sentence or two indicating how upset she was might have helped, even if it was just Sunset noticing Trixie was trembling while getting dressed or something. But all-in-all, the characterization makes sense.
I liked the conflict at the end of this chapter.
It did feel a little bit forced, but I'm glad it's there. Things don't always go according to plan, and there should be consequences for their actions.
Now...if Trixie really thought Sunset forced her into having sex with Sonata, and believed she was raped, I would love to see the outcome of that. Either a big fallout, fight and then a make-up bit OR take it to an extreme and have Trixie call the police and have Sunset arrested.