I like what you've done with Twilight's character here, but the sex scene didn't feel like it was fleshed out enough. The fast-forward to Twilight's jaw aching, and then the cut away after Sonata showed her the strap-on were both a bit disappointing. I understand you wanted Sunset to walk in on them after the cut away, so it does make sense from a story telling standpoint, but I'd love to read a more fully fleshed out anal scene between Twilight and Sonata. Or, you know, if you wanted to start the next chapter immediately where this one left off and have a threesome scene...
Well anal isn't my thing, but this chapter was pretty great and hot. Some part could use more details, like the part whit the strap-on but it wasn't bad. So you get a cookie for the chapter.
I like what you've done with Twilight's character here, but the sex scene didn't feel like it was fleshed out enough. The fast-forward to Twilight's jaw aching, and then the cut away after Sonata showed her the strap-on were both a bit disappointing. I understand you wanted Sunset to walk in on them after the cut away, so it does make sense from a story telling standpoint, but I'd love to read a more fully fleshed out anal scene between Twilight and Sonata. Or, you know, if you wanted to start the next chapter immediately where this one left off and have a threesome scene...
Well anal isn't my thing, but this chapter was pretty great and hot.
Some part could use more details, like the part whit the strap-on but it wasn't bad.
So you get a cookie for the chapter.
Loved this chapter!... i really did love this chapter though i wanted to see more Sex Scenes with Twilight And Sonata.. with more then just Anal...
*Points at Hakuno* *Taking a guess here with what i wanna say*
It's True! She Is Real Super Sand At Making Chapters!
Update: Take my follow. And a cookie.
Much love,
Pandora
I will give you a cookie if you continue, this is a great story