Poppy Seed is just your everyday earth pony. She grows plants for both a living and a hobby. But ponies need love more than they need money or entertainment. Poppy sees plenty of single stallions on the streets of Horseshoe Bay, but Poppy Seed's barn door doesn't exactly swing that way; Poppy Seed prefers mares over stallions. Nopony knows this, not even her Best Friend, Dandelion, the mare shes been in love with ever since they met in High School. Poppy Seed is desperate at this point to be with the mare she loves... But she's too afraid...
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Note: I've been working on this for a while now. Hope you enjoy! Don't forget to like and favorite! Tagged Mature for the occasional sex reference.
*If anyone can proofread or edit, feel free to pm me!
I really like this story a lot. Very fluffy, very sweet. Lovely original characters. Will there be more?
Hm, could use work, but seems kind of cute. I like it I guess.
Hmm, just looking at the description, tags, and the explanation for the tags. And what I think is that usually the mature tag would only be used if you were planning on going into detail about the sexual things you said you would be referencing.
I would change the tags to teen and add the actual sex tag to give people a better idea what they're going to be reading, but that's just me. Now, excuse me as I start on the first chapter.
5349283 Absolutely! I'm really glad you liked it!
5349393 Yeah. I'm still practicing. But I'm glad you liked it
5349415 I only added the mature tag for the sexual references. There will be a few every now and again. But I hope you enjoy it none the less
5349431 First thing, yes, I did enjoy it.
Second thing, expanding on this guy's comment>>5349393 your main issue seems to be with the tenses. Most notably, in the first paragraph you start it out in past tense, then switch to present tense in that same paragraph, that particular word being 'can't'.
Third thing, I would actually go and ask a mod what would be appropriate tagging policy for this story if you're keeping it mature out of caution.
5349448 Hm... I did not notice that... And I will add the sex tag. Thanks for the advice and Im glad you enjoyed it
Does this mean she's a super-hetero?
5349484 I did not think anyone would see it like that... Not even I did... Should I change it? Darn. I can't decide...
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I mean, if you actually DID give her superpowers, that'd be totally rad. If she's just gay or something, then yeah, it's a bit odd.
5349507 Well thanks for your input... I guess...
Plot twist: She sexually identifies as mayonnaise and gets a sex change because she's always felt like a dolphin in a mare's body.
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Yes, you should change it. Proper corrective work is always for the better.
Remember the old saying, "If you cannot be 'right', be correct. That way, you win no matter what."
5350367 Eh... Say what now?
5350599 I plan on doing a rewrite of it when I finish. Dont know when that will happen though.
5350599 And I see your point. Thanks for the advice. I hope you at least enjoyed it either way. Also, I changed the description. Hope that fixes it.
There was a tense swap in the first two sentences. Nope.
5367943 Yeah those will be found throughout the chapters. I don't mean to swap tenses, it just happens and I don't realize it until its too late. I really need to work on fixing those...
5367963 I would advise thoroughly reading through what you wrote. Re read it twice just to be really, really sure that you corrected whatever grammatical, spelling, or tense errors you may have made.
5367984 I'll do that. Thanks for the advise. But I cant right now. Too busy at the moment and I won't be able to tomorrow either. That's why I'm looking for a proofreader and/or editor.
5367994 I would offer being your proofreader but I'm too much of a lazy bastard.
Sad tag has been replaced with the comedy tag. There will be more comedic parts than sad parts. Apologies to those who were expecting a sadfic
I enjoyed this. I can't wait for chapter 3!
5370881 I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Well if you write quicker shorter books than I guess introducing a cute way to gain attention to the story isn't bad. Also what I just said does not necessarily mean that it will be a short book, you could make it an elaborate story about how they try and fail to show each other their emotiions until one just comes out and says it expecting rejection and then end the story with a kiss for a good opportunity for a sequel.
that wasn't too elaborate was it?
5382576 Who knows
Sex tag removed for lack of sexual content.
Nobody on this site ever said anything like that. I just say it makes reproduction slightly impossible.
Nice story as well, but had to make my joke.
8/10
5497059 Yeah yeah. Nature n'stuff and that wonderful nonsense and the like full of flowers and stuff.
Heh, anyway. Glad you liked it! Expect more in the future!
Expect a little drama in the next chapter
Can't wait to see the next chapter