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The mane six have reached the end of there journey in search of ancient tome that Twilight has been seeking. Fluttershy gets cursed and the only way to fix it involves kisses. Will Fluttershy let her friends save her from the curse despite how embarrassing it might be, or will she live with it?
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5324136 Thank you. I'm glad to see people enjoying this story. XD
5324140 i love it! It's really so cute!
Needs a once-over for capitalization and punctuation issues, but otherwise I see nothing wrong.
5324150 Pls fix the many capitalization errors, at the beginning of every quote except for continuations of previous quotes MUST BE CAPITALIZED, IT DOES NOT MATTER IF IT'S IN THE MIDDLE OF A SENTENCE (No, I'm not yelling, just trying to make a point) Good story all the way, never thought a FlutterPie story could be so awesome, write a sequel or another pls? Also, if you need an editor, just ask, i'm willing to help you in any way possible.
5324208 Thanks for pointing that out, i was under the impression that it was the other way around. Lol, now I feel silly. Thanks again for pointing the capitalization mistakes, and for enjoying the story.
Don't worry, I do have more Pinkieshy stories in mind for future projects. So keep a look out for them. XD
That was cute.
awwww so cute <3
okay, I just fixed all the capitalization mistakes I made. Now it should look pretty. XD
So... much... d'aww...
Hey, look, FlutterPie! I haven't seen you in a long, long time my friend. Always a treat to read one of you, especially after Filli Vanilli. I think that episode destroyed any chances of this ship growing, and that kind of ticks me off, because these two are adorable together. I mean, why does a single episode bring down something so lovable, just because of the way a character acted?
But I digress. This was rather cute for what it was. I always like to see new spells emerging in Equestria, even if it's protected by a... kissing curse. Okay, what possible threat does a curse like that serve? How could that possibly slow down anyone?
...Eh, well, Equestria's full of other crazy stuff like this as well, so it's not exactly far-fetched as they go. If it was just another reason to bring Pinkie and Fluttershy together, then I've got no complaints.
As for the characters, they were alright. Though I couldn't help but feel that they were slightly flanderized. Take Rainbow Dash: everything she said here was to do with her ego, and that's fine for the most part, if you're setting this during Season One, but this takes place after Twilight becomes an alicorn. Believe me, I can get that she'd say some of the things she did, but not at the quantity she did. She wouldn't have stroked her own ego as much, is what I'm saying, and it kind of made her one-dimensional, to a degree.
Then there were some reactions. Take this:
It's alright, but it kind of feels that Twilight is overreacting. Grabbing Fluttershy in a hug is a bit hasty, especially in this situation, because, again, this takes place some time after Magical Mystery Cure, and Twilight wouldn't really act like this on a whim. It could possibly work better with a few back-and-forth sentences of dialogue, ending with the hug. Makes it feel slightly more fleshed out, rather than jumping to an action so quickly. Then again, Twilight's so obsessed with books that she might very well do this, so don't take my word for it—it's just my two cents.
Those are really my only narks with this. There's a few typos I found too, but I enjoyed this as a whole. It was very cute for what it was, and I liked it, so have my upvote. We can always do with more FlutterPie.
This is so cute!
That was adorable!
Sweet baby Jesus
A bit predictable, and it could _definitely_ use some fleshing out or better pacing, but otherwise, an okay fanfic.
I will buy the awfully suspect kissing curse, because this curse was put on the book a Thousand years ago or so. It would make sense that at the time nopony knew how the curse was lifted, but that the trick was figured out much later. Untill then, I imagine quite a few ponies probably lost their cutie mark to this curse. After all, who would think to start kissing them?
It's only trivial now because they knew the trick, if they hadn't, goodbye butterfly.
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