It's been two years, two years since two mares started dating. The mares are two of the elements, Kindness and Laughter. This Hearth Warming Day is the day of their second year anniversary, and a small present lays under the tree. What's in it? A circlet. In front of Laughter are two cupcakes. A seemingly simple act of kindness.
This is the first Romance Request Writing as requested by TheGingaNinja
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This was good...
Your other stories weren't bad, but you really seem to have a knack for writing romance.
Dang, this story is so good I wanna cry! Excellent job Cherry! Keep up the good work!
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3676054 I captured de' feels
manly tears, they have been shed
3702594 I would like you 25 more time if I could
No manly tears from me.......but liquid pride. Thats totally different
This is looking good too! Absolutely no regrets in following you
4019425 YAY!! Would you like to follow the link to my Romance Request writing? I'd love to do one for you :D
I approve of this ship and this story!!!!!!!
I liked this. You really captured the mood you sought to create.
There were a few weirdly worded sentences sprinkled throughout, but other than that, there's not much to complain about. Well... except for this:
"After Fluttershy had finished Pinkie gushed out her secret; she just couldn't hold it in anymore. She'd been shocked when Shy had kissed her, but quickly complied. It turns out that Shy had loved Pinkie since the party pony had first become her friend. She had taught her how to win over her fears in the Everfree forest, that had meant so much to her."
This paragraph glosses over the most important part of that flashback, which is a real shame, because it was building up to the reveal so well. I don't think I need to elaborate too much on why it's better to "show" and not "tell," but I will say that it is very important to not gloss over the most emotional parts.
5230555 Thanks! I'll keep that in mind for the future