I look at myself in the mirror. My mane and my tail are much longer than what is usual for wearing a tuxedo. The fashion show is many hours away from now, and yet as I stare into the eyes of my reflection, I feel that the mirror's image lies to me. The pony in the mirror is not Rarity. I am going to fix that.
Covered in a light blue glow, a pair of scissors floats aside my head. I pull a strand of my mane between the blades of the scissors, and with a snip, the scissors close as a purple strand of hair falls to the floor. I take a deep breath, and continue cutting my mane. I finish, and as I look at the stallion cut I gave to my mane, I can't help but think: It looks so nice on me. And why why wouldn't it?
That is what I am, after all.
Rated Teen for sexual themes. So, I’m gonna leave that there as a testament of 2015 me being ignorant. This is Rated E for Everyone.
*Its shape
*If they would turn you away, Rarity—the greatest designer I have seen since I was brought back from the moon—for...
*and ask, "How
Also, her eyes seem more blue (turquoise?) to me.
Interesting start. Like I've said before, this is certainly a unique idea. I'll definitely give it a fave and see where this goes.
Keep it up!
Oh, I also suggest adding this to more groups, Transgender Bronies and Slice of Life to start.
5707741 Fixed! Thanks a lot! I don't know how I missed that first one.
I think turquoise looks a bit more like Nightmare Moon's sclerae.
5711573 Is it dead?
6325992 No. Next chapter will be up next week, tops, or may I be struck by lightning (and survive).
6326421 Ah, okay! That's great to hear! I just asked because it's been some months. I wanted to make sure it wasn't dead before reading it. There were many times where I've read a story and fell in love only to find out later that it was dead..
Ah, yes. Luna is always there to console others. Too bad I couldn't buy her plushie.
Anyways, this story sums up exactly how I feel about myself.
Good story, nice work, can't wait (that long) for a new update.
Nice to see an update on this! And kudos to Sweetie Belle for being so awesome.
Mm. Short and simple, which is a bit of a weakness here but also pretty good.
Rarity's reasons are sound, acting like a fancy mare to fool himself into thinking he was one. Fake it till you make it, if you will.
That being said, this was really short and kind of watered down. We don't really get much input from the others besides the "oh but you're still our friend!" part. Which is nice! And no drama or angst, which is cool! But they don't seem to be individuals, and the scene isn't anything special.
All in all though, one of my favorite stories. Certainly worth the read, upvote, and bookshelf. And congrats on finishing it! I certainly enjoyed it.
Now that's how you start a story, amazing. So few stories ever get around to Luna dream-walking.
I rate this a 4 out 5. It lost a point for being too short and lacking in external response (i.e. His friends gave too simple a reaction). Other than that, it's a really good story, well done :)
6574328 Well, I am working on a sequel, but from Spike's POV. It's probably gonna be as short as this one, though.
6574361 I'll be looking forward to it
This is a cute and sweet story but it could be better.
The main problem is it's too long for the amount of conflict it containts. Rarity get's reassured too quickly and too often.
Ways to make it better(not that I expect you to since this finished but for future stories):
Remove Luna from Chapter 1 and let Rarity keep her fear thought out the story.
Shorten it(i.e. Remove almost every actual(non-dream) pony) and converted to a short think piece.
Add more confusion from her friends(trans isn't well known in the real world, there no reason it be well know in Equestria) and let Rarity react from her fears.
Show more(every time Rarity tells a real pony you when into telling rather than showing)
Focus more on the week or months leading up to this went Rarity was fighting with herself over weather this 'really' is the right thing to do.
Of course all these suggestions wouldn't work together but they give you idea of what could've made this better.
Sweetie Belle is the best
Congrats in finishing your first story. Now the key is to not stop writing.
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7752185 I don't understand.
Good story. An interesting take on Rarity's character.
Yup, he's still Rarity, glad that hasn't changed.
Gender isn't as important as personality, and Rarity is and should always be THE drama queen.
Well the end was kind of cringy
but I really like the rest of the story. It was relatable, endearing and entertaining. 
Definitely worth an upvote, if not a fave.
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I always felt that the ending was a bit anticlimactic, but that’s how I like to believe it would happen if it was an episode of the show. Anyways, I’m glad that you enjoyed the story.
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Don't get me wrong, Twilight's first line was epic:
I didn't even consider that it could be interpreted in a negative way until Rarity did and that bugs me, perhaps unfairly but it does, I expected better from her.
Then it got to this:
Yeah, that's cringy and pretty mean for Twilight to do to a friend and it felt stiff and out of character for Rarity to just brush over it like that.
That said, sorry if I sound harsh, I really liked the story and it'll probably go into my fave-folder. It's just the last few lines that rubbed me the wrong way. Props on you for finishing one too, I know how hard that is.
9367272 Don’t sweat it, that’s pretty solid criticism. In retrospective, it was a jerk move from Twilight, and a failed attempt at a joke from me.
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Well kind of, it's Rarity's fault for taking it the wrong way too. I'd be lying if I said I hadn't made an equally awkward joke myself. (So I know they aren't forgiven that quickly)
Anyway, If you ever finish another story be sure to let me know, I'd love to read it.
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https://youtu.be/2AxiATxLofk