Hangfire isn't the best Weather Pony, but she tries, and now, due to some of the havoc she's wreaked on the weather team, she's been assigned to the Night Crew.
She didn't know they HAD a Night Crew.
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NFire
Just a fic writer, looking at things from a bit of a different perspective sometimes .
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I positively love your vivid descriptions and insane emotion in the first chapter! It's completely opposite of how I would start a beginning chapter. But that's the beauty of it. It's a very different approach and I like it!
5344284 Thank you so very much for the kind comments, hopefully I can keep the rhythm flowing for the whole story.
And thanks so much for the favorite as well, it's always appreciated!
I'm loving the story - but watch those commas and quotes!
5435175 Awesome, and thanks!
I really liked this story.
It also fits in well with my concept of Commander Windvane's New Pegasus Mandate Conspiracy, some of which is detailed in my (unfinished) Love Amongst Monsters. Basically, Windvane is the evil uncle of Fluttershy, who forms a conspiracy to overthrow the Realm using the Rainbow of Darkness, empowered by the Pegasus Device, supposedly to restore the old virtues of the Pegasi. His cousin Ill Wind is the mad scientist who ransacked the Crystal Imperial Library for the secret records required to build the Pegasus Device -- a machine capable of extracting and transforming the life force of Ponies to empower the Dark Rainbow. In that conception, this murderous scam would have been one of the many murky ways the Conspiracy was financed. Love Amongst Monsters takes place about four years after when you set this, and Windvane's Rebellion eight years -- in my chronology.
I loved your heroic band of misfits. I like interesting OC's, and this story was full of them. I found their personalities and relationships interesting and believable, and hope you write more about them.
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I actually have been thinking about a few things for them. I'm glad you liked them, loved making up a few loveable misfits and putting them together, it really was fun to do. They're not perfect, they aren't rich and famous, but they are tenacious. Thank you for the kind compliment as well!
Hah, a good story. Like how it all wrapped up neatly. And as scary as it sounds I have worked for company's where the managers treated there employees in almost the same disregard.
5837950 So have I, it's just bad out there sometimes, I tell ya.
The hell happened in there?!
I see you've been gone a while, but if you ever come back: I enjoyed this!
My only criticism is that the whole, uh, pegasus eugenics conspiracy thing was a bit out of left field—not really foreshadowed, or at least as far as I recall there was no mention of ponies going missing or anything like that. Of course you don't want to give anything away, but even one or two carefully placed, vague hints could tie things together and yield a bit more catharsis for the reader.
Beyond that, the main characters were cute, and I really liked their bonding into a little misfit family, and overall the more comedic and SoL parts of the story were nice. I might have to steal the idea of crazy pony showtune/harmony magic turning a normal night out into a black hole of a party. I'd agree that seeing more of this world and these poners would be welcome, however unlikely that may be.
Nice. Got really dark by the end, but nice.