oh man

Heh, more upvotes than views at the moment. That's an odd sight. Small note: the very first line of the story isn't indented.

Edit: Oh, and I don't know if it's just temporary or anything, but I'm not seeing this in your list of stories.

>>504272504272 Oh man, lets comment the hey out of this story too.

>>505529505529

Don't. Please. I don't mind the blog post, heck I found it funny, but not here. Alright?

>>505551505551 Oh, I wasn't going to. That was just fun and games. I wouldn't do it to a story. Just a little love from your 100th follower

Dude, this story bucks flank. You have terrible commentators.

well shit...

I love it. The only thing this story needs is better transitions between scenes and more time to flush out the characters personalities.  Tracking.

>>505806505806

I agree, but after I hit the 7K mark... Well, it was supposed to be a One-Shot... So I wrapped it up. Thank you for the fav!

Interesting....

I definitely enjoyed the suspense elements here. It felt very sci-fi, and I do happen to like a good sci-fi. Nice job RD!

  Well that was... horrible.

  I don't think I'm sleeping tonight.

Invasion of the Body Snatchers! Twilight needs to use her immense magical abilities and get them the hell to another location within the capital where they can hold out until they eventually kill them all.

Again you astound with you skills as an author. After reading so many happy-go-lucky stories something like this comes along and evens things out, thank you. If this was just practice for suspense and tragedy I can't wait for you to add those elements into OSGaW.

Very cool. I only thought that the professor should have got an inkling on his own, based on his lecture. LOVED the professor, by the way.

this seems like a zombie fic poniefied parasitefied mixed

>>506439506439

Sorry...

>>507150507150

Thanks mate, I miss your Edgar Allen Poe pic

>>509435509435

Haha, thank you, I loved writing him!

>>510087510087 Yeah the more I keep looking at it the more I see how bad of an artist I am, MS paint isn't the best to start again. I felt like changing for the story Im about to post. As soon as I finish the stupid chapter... dialog is hard...

>>510087510087  It's okay, after all this was a great story.

Holy.  Fuck.

>>513000513000

Is that a good "Holy.  Fuck." or a bad "Holy.  Fuck." ?

>>513006513006

VERY good.

isnt inky scribeswell  bunnyhelms secretary from of steam

>>513059513059

HAHA! You've made my day!

Been waiting for somepony to point out that character!

Inky Scribeswell is in ALL my fics... No really. ALL of them...

>>513075513075    nah no way time to go reread alot of stuff

I would have read this story much sooner if 1.) I didn't have exams 2.) if I didn't have baseball 3.)if I didn't have 47 chapters to read on my favorites list and 33 stories on my read later list

I made this a priority

It was pretty good, but not really my type of story, it was well executed so I assume that's what made up for my preference of stories.

God...I would read if IF I'm not buried in all of those planned pictures I need to make. And my fic needs some writing also so I don't have time to read this.

Shouldn't have waited so long to read this story, it was quite enjoyable.  Only real complaint is I feel you should have drawn it out a bit more to build up more suspense.  Possibly having Twilight and the professor coming up with plans to stop the changelings during the run to Canterlot that give the reader a stronger feeling of hope for success as soon as they can make it to the princess.  That way the final scene would hit all the harder.  As it is currently, the more rushed feel left the encounter with Celestia feeling as if it is merely another step on the path of a longer story as opposed to that final punch to the gut to end all hope.  Either way, the professor's final line was perfectly chosen.

I liked it, but it ended far too soon, and the whole Bad End thing needed a bit of work. I think Celestia is a bit tougher than that, it felt like it happened simply to punch the reader in the gut.

It's ok, I didn't even plan on sleeping this week!

But seriously, well written.

>>532336532336

I agree, once I reached the 8K mark I was kinda tired of writing, I'll admit that I rushed it a little.

>>532475532475

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed my drivel.

Um... is this the end? PLEASE DON'T TELL ME THIS IS THE END!!!!

Either way, fabulous writing! I saw a few errors here and there, but nothing severe. I look forward from more grimdarky stuff from you (especially if it's a sequel)!

>>532336532336 So that's why I feel so funny in my gut... That end...

All the ponies are taken over... then the Changelings run out of food and starve, and the whole planet becomes a dead wasteland.

*Alondro, the all-powerful sighs and nukes the whole thing just to get it over with*  Next time, I don't let gods with chronic depression help me design a world!  

This..... This......

Buck's sake, I'm scared now.

Amazing horror fic, very well written and captivating.

Very well written! And dat end

Can't wait for the next chapter

Oh shit

Judging solely on the comments, I'm not going to be sleeping tonight.

Let's put that to the test

*Begins reading*

EDIT: I was right

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Hmmm... 'The Mentalist' type of use of dictionary. Might be worth a try.

Wow...good work. Great horror fic. I especially liked the ending. It was a kick 'em while their down type moment, and I honestly think it was the perfect finishing touch.

hmmm...  lets see this one!

*click*

*reads fic*

*crys*

all i wanted was some ponys *dies of scare*

Impressive...yet...disturbing. Good work.

I was extremely sad when I realized that there wasn't going to be a continuation of this.

>>538670538670

Sorry mate, I get ideas then I spew them at the screen until they stick, otherwise I have a head full of plot (hehe) and I can't focus on my larger, more improtant, fics.

>>538972538972

Well I'm glad you wrote what you did. You ended it at a good point too. I think I'll check out the rest of your fics.

EDIT: *checks profile for other fics*

*facehoof*

I've been meaning to read Of Steamgears and Wings forever.

Good story and that ending made me sad more than scared. The entire time tho, I was thinking how this fic made the changlings seem like a cross between the Zerg (the infestor type monster) and the Flood (the meansof reproduction). And again that ending made me sad.

Btw where was Luna during this?

Ah, yes.

Dilly Dally, I would reccomend applying the patented Snakefire method of problem solving to this little connundrum....

#1. Add one large shotgun, plus two cartridges of buckshot. Load and pull trigger in general direction of problem.

#2. If #1 fails to work, add more cowbell.

BUT SERIOUSLY RUNNNNNN

Well, as an experiment this is a nice little into the suspense territory... kind of Resident Evil-ish(?).

I would love to see you give this genre a more serious take in the future. (as long as it doesn't halt Of Steam)

>>567951567951

I was thinking of starting a detective-esq story today, it would sink into this style a bit more. I actually really like the feel of it.

>>540153540153

Probably the same place she was during the actual episodes - sleeping (and thusly an easy target).

Truth be told, I thought it was a brilliant story, but it feels incomplete. I'm not saying I can't handle a sad ending, but I'd have liked to find out a little more of what happened after the end, as well as the fates of Twilight, Shining Armour, and Silver Spoon, but other than that, it was really great.

Wow, This is well done, Granted it could have been fleshed out a bit more. This is Definitly an interesting take on the changelings, relying a bit more on the insectile part of the fannon.

Is Dilly dally an Oc... Or an actual BG character?

At any rate the ending was both satisfying and disappointing, leaving a cliff hanger for a possible ghost continuation, but also tying up a few knots in case it's never given a second look.

Hmm... I might try to make a second part... Or not either way this has given me a reinforcing idea for a plague in one of my fics.

Lastly, I found a typo... You called dilly dally a she

Cool story. Reminds me of the War of the World TV series. Could almost see this as a pilot to a series that has the three heroes battling an insurmountable battle against the changelings. Good work!

Well... Damn.

Dohohoho.

Nicely done. If you aimed to build a little suspense you certainly managed to pull it of.

Typical ending, though. But an enjoyable read, nonetheless.

The suspense in this story was amazing. And the ending? Yes, it was a punch to the gut, but once I read it, I realized that it could never have been anything else. This is AMAZING work, and as has been said before: Who needs sleep? Ever. Again.

Also, theoretical question: Let's call it the "Infection." What would the "Infection" do to, say... Discord?

>>632492632492

Hmm, if the er-- "Infection's" target are ponies... then I doubt it would do much against Discord...

Don't misunderstand me. There is nothing wrong with your story, but anything like the creatures from Slither make me want to throw up.

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I think you gave away to much of the climax in the professor's initial lecture.

Or it might be me reading "Manhole" (a manga by Tsutsui Tetsuya, no ponies), that one deals with a similar parasite-theme.

Fuck the zombie changelings! The worlds now gonna roast with nopony bringing the sun down!

I...

I... But...

This needs a resolution!!! I hate bad ends!!!

The Elements have to be able to fix everything...

I beg of thee... Luna and Cadance could still be out there!

Even if the changed ponies can't be saved, there's still potentially two princesses!

The hay, I bet DISCORD could even improve things!

This story makes me so sad!

Very well written, Raven. Splendid characters, great pacing. It's better than oSGaW I think. But... what's up with that half-hearted ending?

>>10657681065768

Hehe, never got through to finishing it...

Also, EqD accepted before I had even published it on Fimfic, so I rushed it onto here.

Glad you like it that much mate, it's one of my later works.

Looked. I thought 'this is cool, what's this?'

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Saw. Had mind blank, Registered what I had read.

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And promptly left and I was all like...

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And then I was all...

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This... had some serious dower ending, alright. And your description of the changelings' effect on other living beings during infection made me feel a little sick. May I add that, due to me being a fan of good, slowly building horror, is a good thing? You picked a good point to end the short story, too.

Now, if you will excuse me, I must go and live out my newly rekindled hypochondria thanks to you.

Good story. It was a pleasure to read it. Thank you RavensDagger.

>>12649881264988

No problem sir!

Written for your enjoyment.

That's one theory as to how Changelings reproduce that I haven't heard of before. Much... darker, too. Very good read, ending aside. (Bit rushed, but I've read the comments.)

To read or not to read? If I read tonight, I won't be able to sleep at all. I HATE/LOVE stories that make me feel uncomfortable...

>>15811381581138

It's not THAT bad.

I wrote this before discovering SCP. If I were to rewrite it...

>>15811451581145

Ok, I give. Time for a bedtime story!

Oh, and what does SCP stand for? My acronym vocabulary is next to zilch.

>>15816091581609

Um...

Its the common name of The Foundation (the foundation being too generic to identify them properly) a collection of nightmare fuel based stories. Very entertaining if you don't mind sleepless nights.

Ick, ugh, and bleh. I think I'm not sleeping well tonight.

>>15816181581618

I'll have to give those a read, then.

That was pretty good, least Luna is alright!  So far...

Interesting. I got a very "John Carpenter's: The Thing" feel from it. I wouldn't really call it a tragedy, by the strictest definition, but it was a good read.

Shining Armour shared a look of deep resolve with the professor. “We’re going to kill it.”

It's just my opinion, but I think he should have said something like "whatever is necessary." That way he's portrayed as preferring to avoid killing when possible, but never compromising about protecting Equestria. Plus statements that imply without actually saying tend to have more impact.

Dilly Dally, too, looked at the town. Stalls lined the edges of the small square in front of the wooden town hall.

I find it a bit disconcerting that this was enough to tell me the town was deserted. I don't think there's any reason there can't be stalls and ponies in a town.

Well that went well.