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casualbrony10


College student and aspiring engineer. Been a fan of mlp fim for a year, but am really into it.

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Tirek is defeated and Twilight is princess of friendship, but all is not well in Equestria. An ancient force has been released and prepares to plunge the land into misery. Only true friendship can stop it, but in order to do so, the mane six must confront the shadows within themselves. Old wounds reopen and old memories surface as our heroes face despair itself and find that the evil at work is greater than anypony could imagine. There are some spoilers in this story if you haven't seen the season 4 finale or Rainbow Rocks, as this takes place right after those. It has a lot of chapters but they are mostly very short, less than 2000 words each.

Thanks to Silverbirch for the cover art.
Update: Apologies for the abrupt and unfinished ending. College, work, and family has been very strenuous for the past 2 years and when I wrote the latest chapter I knew that I may not be able to get back to this for a long time. I intended an epilogue and sequel and to come back and improve the story, but time is something I have had little of for a long time. I don't know if and when I'll be able to complete this and I'm sorry for that, you deserve better. I will try to finish this and give it the ending I envisioned.
Update: It is complete, thank you dear reader if you followed me all the way through this journey.

Chapters (27)
Comments ( 22 )

... Okay where are the comments this story is very good, but why are there no comments other than mine???

... Really where are all of the comments?

... why is no one other than me commenting on this story other than me unless my phone isn't loading up the comments other than mine

what happens next?

7223714 LOL, congrats on being the first to comment, and thank you. It's nice to know that somebody likes my story. Up til now it was mainly for my own enjoyment, I had given up on it getting any attention. As for new chapters it might be some time, it's midterm season and finals are in a few weeks so I probably won't get back to this til summer. Currently it is about 3/4 of the way through, although to be honest I make up the details as I go so that could change. I had the general plot outlined since the start, but as they say the devil is in the details.

... Nice
uh, Lightning you alright?*pokes Lightning repeatedly with the poking stick*
poke harder Sparky!
I'm Poking As Hard as i can!
staph poking me.
YAY! *Throws poking stick out the window only for it to hit so random person with all the poking fury of a god*

They had better survive this.

7331253 Not entirely sure what's happening here, but I hope the random guy is okay. :rainbowhuh:

7338949 Don't panic, I'm sure the magic of friendship will triumph in the end. :pinkiehappy:

7338962 Never-mind, you may resume panicking. :applejackconfused: :fluttercry: :pinkiesad2: :rainbowderp: :raritycry: :twilightoops:

This is a very poorly written story. The feelings feel forced. The dialogue tends to be wooden. Too much tell, no show. Your understanding of the characters is limited to the superficial. The edge is soooo sharp. When ever this Erebus shows up, I want to yell, "lookout, we got a badass over here!" This guy just screams "EEEEEVVVVVIIIILLLL!!!!" and not in a good, well built villain way. He might as well eat babies and use a power that hurls burning kittens at people.

7369979 At last some good criticism, thanks for the input. I was somewhat aware of the problems you mentioned, but was unsure how bad they were or how to correct them. I've read good stories and bad stories and I know that mine is among the bad, although maybe not the worst. I honestly don't spend a lot of time on this and do it as a minor hobby. This story is almost finished (about 3 chapters left) so I probably will not be able to fix it as a whole, but anything I learn from writing this story I will use in my next one. I may also go back and rewrite some of this story once it is done. Will you please look at my short story The Waste. No one has commented on that and short stories have a different style and thus need different criticism. Much appreciated.

Only one thing to say about this. F:raritydespair::fluttershbad:K!!! F:pinkiegasp::raritycry:K!!! F:twilightoops::fluttercry:K!!!

Oh, snap here comes Solar flare!

Thank you for writing and Finishing this story it was a fun read👍

All at once, the light dimmed. When Erebus looked again, he saw a flame in the shape of a heart, about the size of a pony. The fire glittered in a myriad of colors swirling through the strange object. Energy flowed out from the flame, growing and forming into a shape around it. 4 legs took form, then a head, a tail, a mane, two wings, and a horn. The light became solid as it formed, becoming a glittering coat of starlight, the mane and tail were blazing rainbow fire. Two eyes opened, both shining white with magic. Erebus stared slack-jawed as the new being looked herself over with awe. She resembled the large alicorn that had appeared over the concert when they defeated the sirens, but her proportions were those of a pony instead of a horse, giving her a smaller and stockier appearance. It was the strangest feeling, 8 minds united as one, 8 energies combined into one body, but the individuals were still there, they were just in sync, flowing together like streams into a river. She was each of the 8 friends and all of them, but yet she was also something new. She realized Erebus was speaking to her and listened.

Start listening to this song NOW.

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