I rewrote some bits of the story, and then when I tried to update the chapter here on fimfiction everything stopped working oh god why and I was already stressed because of university work and it wasn't working and after two hours it still wasn't working and I couldn't go back to my university work until I could be in peace of mind about it and then all the comments disappeared out the window and then I panicked and asked a mod to sort it out for me and then he did and now I feel better.

But that's where all the comments have gone. I'm going to go and have a cup of tea and cry a bit, and then I can actually go back to university work.

>>530177530177 it works now, and it is still a great story. Good work, and good luck with Uni.

Same dude, again the story is very well done

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That was so good. You brought tears to this man's eyes, good job.

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As it was before, a beautiful story.

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Dude this is amazing. I got a strong feeling from the picture. But this put it into words.

"Aye! I see somethin' cap'n!"

"What it be lads?"

"Featured bar ho!"

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Well, its not often that I read a story that makes me cry (Shut up, they be manly tears and you know it!) and this story made me shed a few tears. I commend thee of this story for it is one of the best I have ever read (though thats not saying much, as much as I should anyway). I have no idea how I caan put my feelings for this story into words, other then its a happy sad feeling. Thank you for writing this one. I am sure that every now and then I will go back and read it over, just to remember what it was about, and how it made me feel. Thank you again for writing this.

dear sweet celestia and luna i cried harder the second time through; still crying as i type this message and oh my god why wont the tears stop flowing.

Many a Teenage Boy Tear were shed

BTW were there some Lord of The Rings references in this

Damn, that was amazing. I wish the star ratings were still in place so I could complain about not having a sixth star to give you. Bravo.

Gah! I cried. They weren't manly tears, as I'm a woman, but they were sad and meaningful nonetheless. Thanks for the great story, it was beautifully written and extremely thoughtful in its premise.

I thought it a very charming story indeed, and using the elderly CMC's as the main characters was an original way to approach it, along with Sweetie's granddaughter to give it a generational feel.  Well done, and I'm flattered to have played even a small role in inspiring it!

>>538338538338 I'm glad you liked it. Thank you very much for the inspiration!

Wow. Ive never actually cried reading. i cant even remember the last time i cried. I choked up the moment twilight said "A long time ago, I used to look up there, hoping I would see a rainbow. I’d sit in my chair all day long, just waiting." I dont know why, I dont even think it was designed to be sad. But i felt a deeper meaning. A muscel under my adams apple tensed up and i started choking, literally choking. There was one point where I had to stop reading because i thought i was going to pass out. I've always wondered about what will happen when i get older and eventually die, i think this just completed what I couldnt understand and made me realize just how precious life really is. I feel old right now and  Im no where near the age to be worrying about the rest of my life. I havent even begun it yet. Thanks Tamar. I dont know what you did or how you did it. But you made this one hell of a powerful story.

Defibrillator! I need a...

HNNNNNG!

*thud

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Oh...oh god that...that was beautiful........thank you just...thank you for this....Ima go cry now....

I was pretty well-off, until I read Twilight's note...

Then I totally lost it.

R.I.P. Twilight Sparkle! :pinkiesad:

Look at that, you made Fluttershy and Mikuru cry...

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Goodness me, I just finished watching The Cutie Mark Chronicles with my little sis, then I read this.

Very well written story, made me cry, thanks for that

That was beautiful.

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You know i'm pretty much known as heartless and i rarely cry but this story was the first time i really felt sad enough to cry and it was due to a story based on a show for young girls. Now that really goes to show just how amazing this fanbase is.

Not ashamed to say I shed man tears on this well written story. Also glad to know I'm not the only one though.

Very well written. Bittersweet without being either too sweet or too bitter.

Somehow I managed not to burst into tears, but it wasn't easy. Beautiful story.

I'd certainly like to learn more about the laws of harmony, the concept sounds interesting.

>>553429553429 It's the wonderful thing about writing. You casually invent something for plot convenience, and accidentally make up a whole new concept.

How did Twilight write the Laws of Harmony? Are they legally binding? How many laws are there? When did she write them? And what do they say?

I will leave that for somebody else to write, if anyone wants to.

My roommates are sleeping, and I must B'Awwwwwwww.

Am I the only one here who didn't end up shedding tears?

Just so you know, I am a Little Dashie veteran.

Damn that was deep man, real deep. and i did cry, a little. but give me credit I've been stuck in the sad section for the last 2 days.

I may not have cried but I felt, which is just as important. Powerful writing. My jaw tightened, my eyes stung, and my stomach clenched. All those signs, for me at least, point towards a great story.  

it so sad but good at the same time.

great job

wow. great job! it's very similar to "i might have been"

check out my read of it

http://youtu.be/cF4G3E_R3Ys

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No way! That's awesome! Thank you so much for recording that, it's brilliant!!

>mfw

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I....I.... can't stop crying....

It isn't often I find a story that makes me cry like this. I mean I tear'd up at the Battle of Wethoof in The Ballad of Echo the Diamond Dog but I didn't actually cry outright. Kudos to you sir... Kudos for days....

Very sad, very heartwarming... and simply amazing...

So many manly tears have been shed.

There are so many of these stories. They are all so similar.

They also always, invariably, reduce me to a weeping pile of goo.

Thanks for this story. As I said, the plot and setting are very common, but your writing and choice of characters added enough to make it feel unique. I think the "time for another adventure" line was my favorite, as Bilbo is best hobbit and that line was his very best, IMO.

>>668615668615 Even as the author I have to admit it's not very original.  It was really an exercise of me trying to put my own spin on a tried and tested theme - people seem to like it

The greatest adventure for last...

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Wonderful. Just... wonderful. So many feels.

That...was so beautiful...*sobs*

I don't know why I love torturing myself with these kinds of heart attack inducing fics, but man do I, and yours nearly killed me several times over.  I clicked the thumbs up button like ten times, but alas, it only gave you one.  

Amazing job.  I'm now going to go cry myself to sleep.  I hope I wake up in the morning...

I swear it's raining inside my room. Truly a touching story.

beautiful story.

Also, Lotr reference in the title and in the story itself?

>>837457837457 But of course.  Glad you liked it.

This is fantastic, incredibly well written and contains all the sad themes of life that strick me right in the soul. This is the sort of writing I would use as a benchmark in how i live life. My little Pony & this wonderful story of yours. Yes I cried most of the way through, especially when noticing all the wonderfully subtle references to old ponies 'leaving' and the other gems in there.

*wipes eyes*

Thank you for this service ^^

Bless you sir. Bless you. You and all other authors who are so gifted and so..... wonderful as to create such magnificent stories that capture peoples imaginations, wrestle their emotions and fill people with joy and sadness. dread and adventure. You can write beautiful stories and tell wondrous tales that bring fans closer to the characters that we know and love, and that make us just as connected to said characters as they feel to each other. A great Traveler once said that if it's been thought of, it exists. And that makes me feel hopeful. That somewhere out in the Multiverse, there are characters that live and die, laugh and love. And that while we may not know it or see it, stories like this happen every day. That the mantears that we cry are not in vain, shed over/about something that isn't truly real. That when I look into space at night, I can dream about something tangible and real. And that is a truly wonderful feeling. Thank you.

Oh man, where do I start. This fic is one of those one's that if you don't start to feel that burn in your eyes, if not outright cry, then you know there's something wrong with you.

These fics maybe a dime-a-dozen throughout various fandoms, but rarely do you see one as well written and emotion inducing as this. This is one of those stories that no matter how many times I read, it will always make me start crying at just how, well I don't quite have the words but how, powerful the scenes are. It's a kind of bittersweet passing of an era, that you can't help but cry at knowing the world is just that little bit less bright.

Now if you'll excuse me I'm just going to go and reflect for a while about friends lost.

Excellent story, glad I finally got around to reading it. Definitely gets added to my user page wall of recommended oneshots.

Excellent.

God damn-it I promised after MLD I'd never read a sad story, but I did it anyway. I haven't shed this many tears since the first time I saw Titanic (Don't judge me) This was amazingly executed, I commend and resent you for making me feel this way.

Wow. I loved you you mixed Greek/Roman mythology into this (Elysian Fields), seeing as how it's canonical. In the words of Gandalf from the scene I'm sure you were inspired by along with the picture: "I will not say do not weep, for not all tears are evil."

These tears are definitely not evil.

This is still one of the greatest MLP fanfics ever written.

right in the feels...

Bravo, sir. Excellent work.

This story is good. I can't even put into words why I cried the way I did, but I sure did cry. That's what makes this one so good.

THIS close to tears, but that alone is a good sign that this was emotional. A sad yet bittersweet departure of an old soul who desires to see her friends again after so long. Amazing detail goes into how Twilight was in her final days--somewhat strange yet highly intelligent. And to see her note to the girls to keep contact with each other and to remember their times with the book was a heartwarming and saddening piece. Very nice job.

The fact that Celestia has to see this happen to so many of the ponies close to her... That's the first thing that did it for me... Then finishing this oneshot... I almost cried ;___; That's major for me, because nearly no media, video, written, song, etc. can make me tear up but the most sad and most beautiful ones... Not only make me tear up, but make me actually feel sadness. (Wow, I sound so heartless.)

This was absolutely beautiful :'D

Wh-what is this? Why are my eyes leaking?

so amazing!

Very well written. I cried. A lot.

Not bad. Have a thumb.

My feels are hurting.

One thing that's bothering me: how much age difference are you assuming between the CMC and the Mane Six? It's my experience that pretty much everyone, myself included, goes with something in the general vicinity of ten years. Yet you speak of Twilight as if she has lived far beyond a normal pony lifespan, whereas the CMC are old but not yet cripplingly so. Young enough still for Apple Bloom to tackle Sweetie, and for Scoots to still fly places, in any case; they seem like they could have another decade ahead of them without magical aid, if nothing too bad happens.

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Hi Borg,

I basically assumed that the Mane Six except for Twilight have "passed on" by now, and the CMC are "very old". Sweetie Belle is pretty stiff when she sits in front of the fire, even if she's not in a wheelchair. I think it's feasible for Twilight to be unnaturally old - older than anypony can really remember - while still only being roughly ten years older than the CMC.

It's not perfect, and requires a bit of suspension of disbelief ... but isn't that the point of a story? For the purposes of this short story I was happy with the chronology; if it was a longer and more complex story I would want to be more exact with the timeline, but since it's just a little one-shot, I'm not going to be losing any sleep over it.