"To survive in this world you need to do one of the following; lose yourself to it, go mad, survive or get broken." For Inkwell, those words should of come sooner; had he known them after hoofington he'd probably still be free.
5479162 i didn't know you based it on that. i guess i didn't pay attention to the details.
Anyways, this is a good chapter, i like it a lot and helped out on some of the details of this. Especially for the new foal scene in Celestia's head, which i am happy to add something that stands out.
Either way, this chapter pretty much sums up one thing.
The Elements are not happy and actively trying to fight back when they can.
548089554807425478623 With Rockwell walking through the Elements's minds remind me of the game Evil Within. and the part with Evil!Pinkie in kitchen remind me of the first part of Evil Within with first enemy of the game.:
54822735480884 Oh, I almost forgot to mention that you didn't do a scene with Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. Does that means that Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are faking that they're under control of evil!Celestia and are waiting for the right time to strike?
5482485 She's growing up Red... we are f*cked up people to come up with this horrific stuff... also I'd wish Kiz would acknowledge the fact that Homunculous Pinkie Pie is based off of Angry Pie too.
5482504 Yes, that's what the Evil Side of Pinkie Pie is called from the Reharminization story.
5482405 I feel you should go back and reread chapter 3 of Unsung and then reread this chapter on TCB!Rainbow Dash and TCB!Fluttershy; if you can figure it out I'll PM you a spoiler to Unsung.
This was my favourite chapter in the story so far.
While it covers familiar ground, I was glad to see the return of the Element Bearers' true selves trapped within their own minds. Rockwell's steadfast determination to save them is heartening, and makes me like his character a lot more. Additionally, you made the right call by not showing every last Bearer; by the time Rarity's scene came along, the hopelessness of their situation was all too clear. And I loved small touches like how Pinkie's alternate personalities try to defend her from a demon worse than any of them.
5536455 No I meant he never did, not once in the previous chapter's flashback there was a comment left of Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash. Rockwell may of not went through them... but I think somepony else did.
Ah, incorrect answer? Well, colour me surprised. As for singing a song, I'm afraid I haven't seen Rainbow Rocks, meaning I can't provide anything related to Equestria Girls, sorry.
Eh, no need for that, after a bit of to-ing and fro-ing, I've now got enough to go upon, thanks again. I'll just reiterate that it was a good idea to withhold seeing Fluttershy's and Rainbow's dreamscape for later, rather than put all your 'nightmare' cards on the table at once.
I have to admit, I was kinda sceptical when you rehashed the wham moment from the main story.
But this? This is a work of art, definitely this story's high point.
Once I get my mitts on my laptop, I can assure you this gets mentions in the main, Heartwarming, Tearjerker, and Awesome pages.
5477690 You know, truth be told Sledge I was planning on having the TCB Twilight's part be shorter than that originally.
BTW to readers: I edited to make Homunculus Pinkie Pie look like this.
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You're welcome for the nightmare fuel.
5478623 Kiz, she also looks like Angry Pie from the Reharminaztion Series.
5478623 Dangit Kiz, I was going to sleep.
Cannot unsee.
5479162 It's still different when originally written, it was Kizuna who changed the shout out from Angry Pie to well that.
5479162 i didn't know you based it on that. i guess i didn't pay attention to the details.
Anyways, this is a good chapter, i like it a lot and helped out on some of the details of this. Especially for the new foal scene in Celestia's head, which i am happy to add something that stands out.
Either way, this chapter pretty much sums up one thing.
The Elements are not happy and actively trying to fight back when they can.
5480742 Did you like the part with Rockwell comforting TCB!Pinkie Pie and making her feel happy again?
5480870 thumbs up
5480884 Good
5480895 5480742 5478623
With Rockwell walking through the Elements's minds remind me of the game Evil Within. and the part with Evil!Pinkie in kitchen remind me of the first part of Evil Within with first enemy of the game.:
And the new foal scene in Celestia's head remind of this pic:
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5481944 Awwww dang it, I thought I'd be able to be original and symbolic with the newfoal here.
5482273 5480884
Oh, I almost forgot to mention that you didn't do a scene with Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. Does that means that Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are faking that they're under control of evil!Celestia and are waiting for the right time to strike?
5482405 ha.... hahaha.....
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHA
5481944 Why thank you on the Evil Within comparison. I've been deciding to try my own hoof out on making some nightmare fuel myself.
5482466 the baby is leaving the safety of the warmth we provided...
into the cold depths of hatred...
it is a sad day.
5482485 She's growing up Red... we are f*cked up people to come up with this horrific stuff... also I'd wish Kiz would acknowledge the fact that Homunculous Pinkie Pie is based off of Angry Pie too.
5482494 thats what its called? I thought it was Bot-Pie or something.
5482485 Don't wory, I'm still gonna be the heart and feels person of the group. Don't you worry about that!
5482515 Cute song
5482504 Yes, that's what the Evil Side of Pinkie Pie is called from the Reharminization story.
5482405 I feel you should go back and reread chapter 3 of Unsung and then reread this chapter on TCB!Rainbow Dash and TCB!Fluttershy; if you can figure it out I'll PM you a spoiler to Unsung.
5482494 *cough*
Still the only guy without nightmare fuel stuff here.
It will come, sooner or later.
5483047 You want me to get you a cough drop Sledge?
5483050 Cough drops are not cool.
5483052 What? I'm just offering you medicine since you had a cough a few minutes prior
This was my favourite chapter in the story so far.
While it covers familiar ground, I was glad to see the return of the Element Bearers' true selves trapped within their own minds. Rockwell's steadfast determination to save them is heartening, and makes me like his character a lot more. Additionally, you made the right call by not showing every last Bearer; by the time Rarity's scene came along, the hopelessness of their situation was all too clear. And I loved small touches like how Pinkie's alternate personalities try to defend her from a demon worse than any of them.
5536422 Did you notice one particular thing Vox?
5536447
One particular thing? I'm often good at picking up on little details, yet it may not be any you have in mind...
5536451 Never once did Rockwell encounter TCB Rainbow Dash or TCB Fluttershy's mindscapes.
5536453
Yes... that is something I did mention, and called it a good choice from a narrative perspective.
5536455 No I meant he never did, not once in the previous chapter's flashback there was a comment left of Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash. Rockwell may of not went through them... but I think somepony else did.
5536463
Somepony else did, now? Hm, I think I may know whom that pony was, but I don't want to risk spoilers by talking about him openly here.
5536469 Actually I'm afraid you're wrong Vox, not him; her. Also, for a hint on which her - well; sing us a song then.
5536474
Ah, incorrect answer? Well, colour me surprised. As for singing a song, I'm afraid I haven't seen Rainbow Rocks, meaning I can't provide anything related to Equestria Girls, sorry.
5536480 Then you still aren't correctly; I'll give you a hint from the next chapter:
*Thump thump*
That's the sound her heart makes, it's a such a wonderful thing.
5536488
At this point I'm falling back into my familiar game of speaking in riddles.
5536492
Noted, thanks, though we could have discussed it via PM.
5536495 It's a result of the forum, I'll delete the comment and we'll continue it via PM
5536502
Eh, no need for that, after a bit of to-ing and fro-ing, I've now got enough to go upon, thanks again. I'll just reiterate that it was a good idea to withhold seeing Fluttershy's and Rainbow's dreamscape for later, rather than put all your 'nightmare' cards on the table at once.
5536509 Well enjoy yourself Vox, catch you later.