Equestria has not always been the peaceful land it is known as today. In the days of old, ancient beings wandered its lands, all seeking to assert their power over one another. Some sought power, others sought a challenge, even more simply wanted to cause misery in others for the simple thrill of it. Very few and far inbetween were kind, or forgiving, as they were usually the first to perish.
Enter a young mare by the name of Celestia, and her sister Luna. With their parents dead, the two siblings suddenly find themselves in a position of power they are ill prepared for. However, they must rise to the occasion, or their subjects and their kingdom will be crushed underfoot by the monsters that seek to devour them all.
Join these siblings, and experience the pain, struggle, battles, and hardships they both had to endure to make Equestria into the kingdom it is today.
Editing done by 2D-kun and Doccular42
Hill count: 5
Mountain count: 3
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It appears your new story was as popular as my new chapter.
I love the concept of this story! I hope to see some Discord some time in the future?
Other than that, I love how you composed this chapter, and I hope to see more chapters soon in the future!
Behold! The Titans of Equestria! Rock turtles everywhere!
That was a great start, and I'll enjoy the ride.
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Thank you! :3
and yes, this will cover all of the canon plot, as well as fill up some of the gaps with my own personal headcanon and whatever my mind can come up with. Celestia and Luna's first encounter with Changelings, for example.
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I guess you could say,
*dons shades*
this chapter rocked.
I'm still hearing the Shadow of the Colossus music in my head.
That was pretty cool. The writing style in the beginning was a bit odd, but once Luna and Celestia entered the story, it read much better.
One thing to note, though: Italics is almost always better than bold for emphasis. Additionally, one exclamation mark is just as good as three. The extras actually end up being a bit jarring.
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Thank you
and yes, I'm considering re-writing it. I'm kicking myself in the ass for not beginning from Celestia and Luna's perspectives right away, but I don't trust my own ability to make dialogue interesting enough to grab the reader's attention, and I kind of wanted to explain why they were out in the middle of the badlands.
I meant to comment on this story a long time ago, but I'm a procrastinator, so...
This is what we need to see more of; the two best princesses kicking tail and protecting their subjects using their own great power and not relying on the Elements of Harmony for everything, which I like to believe actually happened fairly often. While there is little the Elements cannot do, I imagine that there is a lot that they will not do. They are, by nature, a defense against the forces of chaos and darkness, and while the Earthshaker was certainly an amoral, antagonistic asshole, it didn't necessarily fall under either of those categories. Rather, I felt that its actions stemmed more from indifference and a massive sense of superiority. From its perspective, the ponies were little more than ants, and it couldn't think of any reason to spare so much as a thought to the life of an ant. Unfortunately for it, two of these "ants" had a rather deadly bite
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'Indifferent' is definitely the best way to describe him. He wasn't specifically out to kill anyone (until Luna and Celestia annoyed him quite a bit) but he didn't care about the destruction he caused.
Oooook, twas quite interesting, and a bit of
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Good luck with further writing