• Member Since 26th Oct, 2014
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LeapingEquine


Your average pegasister.

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In the years after the dangerous Discord War, but before the banishment of Nightmare Moon, love is in short supply. Ponies are inclined to be fearful and mistrustful, and are only slowly beginning to adjust to a peaceful lifestyle, with kind rulers. This is bad news for changelings.
The hive is getting hungry and becoming weak. It is accepted that the ailing queen will die. However, this old changeling has one last trick; her death will come about giving birth to the new hive leader.
The changeling most closely related to her will step out of the woodwork and become regent to the young monarch. Strange that he was the runt of the hatch, and trailed the old queen like a weak shadow.
And yet, it looks like good times are a'coming to the hive! But not all is as it seems.
The child queen is weak in mind, as a normal young queen would not be able to survive on her limited rations. She is bullied mercilessly. The day she is granted her ritual Proving quest, no one expects her to survive. But if she does...she will gain her full rights as a ruler, and be granted a name, something rare among changelings. And she will wield her power supreme.

Edited by the awesome bobdat

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Comments ( 21 )

Absolutely amazing. I love how you explored the Hive into greater detail and portrayed the life of the Changelings. So is the newly hatched Queen Chrysalis? It is definitely a interesting work and your exposition of the operations of the Hive was rather interesting. It felt like I was truly there seeing all of their inner infrastructure. Really great struff

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Thanks a lot for the praise!
I'm glad you liked how I portrayed changelings. Part of the reason I wrote this story was because I felt that there was more to changelings than some stories showed.
An entire nation of shape-shifting insect ponies is pretty awesome, after all.
And there's so much room for exposition!
As to whether the newly hatched is Queen Chrysalis...well, you'll just have to wait and see, won't you? :trollestia:

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I mustache you why you want to read my story, but I'll shave it for later.
:moustache::moustache: ( Two mustaches! And a pun! I beat you! :pinkiehappy:)
Thanks for wanting to read my story! I'm thankful to all the users on Fimfic who took the time to glance at it.

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I'm thankful to all the users on Fimfic who took the time to glance at it.

Except for the one who disliked; fuck him/her/it/them. :pinkiecrazy:

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I'm not bitter! :pinkiecrazy:
No, really I'm not. Haters or not, all these people who don't even know me took the time to look at this story. That really means something to me.:pinkiesad2:
All I can do is try to make their time worth it with a good story I enjoyed writing. I think it's working. I hope it is.:pinkiesmile:
( On a less serious note, holy celestia! I've never used so many pinkie emoticons before!)

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Wow, I have someone's respect!
Wait...do you respect me for my pinkie emoticons, my policy towards haters, or my story?
I'm aiming for the story, but any one of them's good.
By the way, what did you think of the story, if you've read it yet?
I enjoy feedback of any form! Praise is wonderful, and I love it, but constructive critism is what I need most.

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Haven't read it yet. :twilightsheepish: And since you enjoy feedback of any form, mine will be... A MUSICAL NUMBER! Not really.
And it's

Haters or not, all these people who don't even know me took the time to look at this story. That really means something to me

that I respect; some people treat this site as some kind of contest or a way to gain popularity.


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Wait...do you respect me for my pinkie emoticons, my policy towards haters, or my story?

Aaaaand there goes the respect. :facehoof:

This is amazing. I also liked how you put the changeling life differently than other Fics :derpytongue2:

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Thanks for taking the time to read and favorite my story! :pinkiehappy:
By the way, have you noticed that "revolution" and "small, but painful, intimate, and deep-reaching betrayal" are almost the same thing?
Not a spoiler. Just a little hint. You'll know what it means after you finish reading the whole story.:trollestia:

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Thanks!
What did you think I did well? Anything you think could have been better!
Feedback, especially constructive criticism, makes me happy.:pinkiesmile:

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Hundreds can be angry, but eveything depends on just who holds grudges.

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I've changed the wording ever so slightly to get my meaning across better.

And it was tainted by bitterness, hatred, the anger of hundreds of changelings who had been passed by, who never felt a hint of the power.

                    It was ours. the Hivemind whispered, Ours!

                     Hostility. Rage. A burning desire to rid the world of the bastard Queen.

                     Hostility was normal. Anger was normal. It was quickly forgiven, forgotten.

                     But one changeling's grudge was not normal.

                     It would lie dangerously, a sleeping dragon, for years.

                     But it would one day strike.

  

Dawwww.. Little Chryssi is cute! Flip-flaps!

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I know.:pinkiesmile:
Even though she looks like a teenager, she's still a hatchling inside. Cute. Naive. Easily manipulated. Very emotional.
Am I hinting at something here?:trollestia: Stick around to find out!

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