Zecora has a story she keeps hidden, a story of her origins and a story that holds many memories she chooses to forget. After her experiences that changed her life she took on an adventure that would provide her with a better life and a knew identity, an adventure she would find true friends and peaceful hospitality to help her escape what she knows and what she fears.
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As a note, this is an alternate universe, as in, anything that happens in my story has no intended relation with the show or any hasbro cannon. Stripe Strider is actually my OC and the purpose of the creation of this story is purely for the character build on his part.
Cover art source and Credit:
http://huussii.deviantart.com/art/Lone-Denizen-of-Everfree-352021473
NOTE: Proof reading is not going fast at all so, I am probably not going to incorporate that before publish the chapters. Any mistakes you notice let me know, and I apologize in advance about the grammar mistakes.
This has potential but so short, seems like barely anything. Also you called Zecora's mother Golden Lace a Stallion, stallions are males.
Again feels like lots of potential but the shortness of the chapter leaves me wanting more detail and for more to have happened. Feels like the encounter with the alchemist should have gone longer and involved more. After guessing Zecora seeks ingredients for a academical potion why does the alchemist assume she knows the potion and it wasn't her mother or a granny sending her out to gather the ingredients? Feels like he should have "tested" her a little bit more before deciding she had the talent for alchemy.
Yes the story will be quite long. I plan on extending it like a novel, but I have just recently started it and it may take some time to get my chapters proofread and published for viewers. The Prologue was not suppose to be much, just to set up the situation but I will think of a way of extending it, although that might not happen. Ill make sure I change the mistake on Golden Lace, wouldn't
want someone to get the wrong message LOL
Great suggestion! I feel also that it could add on more character build and I changed a large portion focusing on that! It is currently being Proofread and should be up in the next day. I will also see about extending my chapters in later ones to come.
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Sorry about the wait on the change up in the chapter, My proofreader is taking a long time to approve over my chapters. I did involve the alchemist more so check it out.
The shop keeper seriously needed more description. All we got was "tall and scrawny stag", and later he was casually referred to as a "man". You can do better that that.
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Thanks I made some minor improvements and i will be modifying it a lot more later. I apologize for the typo and I will make sure I look closer for those. My proofreaders arn't very on top of helping and it takes me too long to depend on them so I have trouble finding multiple perspectives and skipping over those things happens pretty often
Hey every one, just apologizing that I am not able to post a chapter yet. The one I am writing is quite large and I am doing a lot of plot planning for later story, though I can promise that it will be progressing more (do to the fact it isn't really going any were) though it will be about another 3 chapters estimated.
SPOILER FOR NEXT CHAPTER
Moments passed as a tear ran down Stripe Strider's eye. The candles continued to flicker until Zalika spoke once more. He noticed here holding back tears of grief, "I'm sorry... I should have given this to you much sooner, I just couldn't get myself to do it." She reached underneath the counter and rose her head once more with a wooden box just big enough to fit in her muzzle. She gently set it upon the counter for him to clearly see. "This was his... he wanted you to have it."