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Delvius


I've written a few FoE fics, mostly to please myself and others and to practice my craft as a writer. Now for 4th-wall breaking. "Greetings! I am Delvius, chronicler of Roam and friend to Goldwreath."

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Evicted from his stable, Goldwreath is forced into a life full of perils and tragedies the like of which he has not asked for. Now facing entities of power far beyond anything he can imagine, a tyrannical military organization, a mysterious defense array in the mountains of Roam, and a foreboding phenomenon forming in the south, he must gather his wits and put his training to use in order to save the city of Roam. His enemies are tough, and his friends may not even be his friends, but no matter how hard the path he will defend the city to his last breath. That is, if he hasn't lost his sanity already.

Chapters (27)
Comments ( 845 )

If you haven't already, come on over to the Fallout: Equestria Side Stories Compilation Document here! You can post your story there, and people are always willing to be impromptu idea trampolines/proof-readers :twilightsmile:

Someone thumbed down, I thumbed up to counter. I'll read the story after I get home from school today because it looks good.
Also, I'm friends with the cover artist so he told me about it hehehe.

Welcome to the FoE sidefic herd :twilightsmile:

Thanks for helping me start off my fic, guys. I don't know who thumbed down, but I only hope they thumbed down because they actually read the story and didn't just decide to troll me.

Again, thanks!

Congratulations on the beginning of your story! :pinkiehappy:

And don't worry: the downvotes were probably trolls. There are a small few anti-FOE boys here who tend to do that with every FOE sidefic. If the voters actually read the story and didn't like it, they would have posted to say why. I wouldn't give them a second thought.

Happy writing! :twilightsmile:

Oh, wow. Thanks Kkat! I'll admit, I was pretty upset with the dislikes, and no matter how I thought about it, it still made me uncomfortable.

Again, thanks! I hope that it'll be a good addition to the side-fic pantheon.

Dude, epic story. I'm hooked! Thumbs up, bitches!

(Footnote: FoE haters: MINUS ONE):rainbowwild:

Oh and btw, I'm writing a sidefic of my own, and I would enjoy collaborating w/you. I like your style!:rainbowdetermined2:

Thanks! I would like to collaborate with you as well; it provides more insight.

I'll see on how to contact you.

Thanks for the like!

cant wait for the next chapter this one was good :twilightsmile:

Ok I would like to start by saying that this is looking like it will be an interesting read.

Just a bit of constructive criticism, each time a different character begins talking start a new paragraph, it makes things much easier to follow when you do that

definitely a good story you've got going on here, can't wait for more!

678054 Alright, I'll try implementing that.

678145 Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

And then the Courier appeared and killed half of what was still living in one day.

688371 Uhhh...

What does that mean?

689167 Well, if you count fallout 3 and New Vegas...

But I think I get what you mean now.

cant wait for the next chapter this one was good :twilightsmile:

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Thanks, although if you have any suggestions, I'll be glad to listen to them.

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Thanks again.

And, may I ask, have you been reading this story? The 'I like how you write now' suggests you have.

Lastly, you mean that unicorn buck on the cover art?

wow, nearly 30,000 words in just over a week, that's like Somber levels of writing
I'm looking forwards to seeing where this goes, though the sentient APC does seem a little over-powered, so I'll bet it'll get blown up pretty soon, did some say heroic sacrifice?
one small error: it's not the Ministry of Magic (that's Harry Potter) it's the Ministry of Arcane Sciences, though the speaker being a zebra lets this kinda slip by

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Whoops. I guess I should try to correct that.

And, actually, due to the fact that most important events will take place indoors, the APC will have to stay outside. When I was thinking of this chapter, I was kind of hoping for a Shepard-EDI relationship, you know? Makes it more interesting. And, besides, he's going to need that extra power. He isn't like blackjack or littlepip in which he faces threats at few numbers at a time. Trust me.

748642 I've never played Mass Effect, so I have no clue what you're talking about there...
so he'll be facing 20+ foes at the same time? also I'm hoping for vehicle combat now

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Aw, that's too bad. Buy, yes, exactly.

And I do intend to place some sort of vehicle-oriented combat.

And, again, don't worry. As the story progresses, the APC won't seem overpowered anymore. At most, it'll just save their sorry flanks when they really need it.
OR NOT. DUN DUN DUN

:yay: yay APC with an AI I can see where this going to go :trollestia:

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Oh, really?

Haha, yes, well, considering the shit I'm going to get them into, their probably going to need a damned tank.

When I was writing that chapter, I wanted to create a sort of BOND between them and the vehicle, you know? Lil'pip and the Sky Bandit was fine, but it lacked... personality. Something like Shepard and EDI.

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Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

ohhh new chapter and a good one again :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for the kind words! I know it isn't really much, but I'm going to make chapter 7 as long as possible, while still maintaining it's quality. (hopefully)

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Oh, don't worry. When you read chapter 7, you will get but a mere taste of what Goldwreath and co. will be facing. Mwahahahaha:trixieshiftright:

And, uh, what's RT?

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Ah, ok. I was confused there for a moment.

Oh, don't worry, I'll be planning to do some nasty shit to them soon....

I only finished chapter 3 so far but this is one of my fav side stories I've read so far :twilightsmile: I love the main character, the setting, and the legion:pinkiehappy:

with this chapter you've gone from a standout FO:E author to one of the best, the action is very well done, and chapters where the darkness of the wasteland comes crashing down onto the 'heroes' are my favorites and you've done that in a extremely brutal way, yet completely reasonable, I'm guessing the next chapter will have a lot of soul searching, right?

and do I sense a recurring villain with this specter zebra? again watch the power levels

813316 I'm guessing the omni-tanks sound a lot like mammoth/Apocalypse tanks from the C&C series
would the omni-tanks look anything like this?:
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(this is the mammoth tank from C&C 3)

822009 Thanks for the words! Big praise to hear that, especially considering the greatness of the original FOE and Project Horizons

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First off, Thanks so much for that! I mean, I wouldn't consider myself THAT good (am I?), but thanks anyway. Also, where exactly did I do horrible, brutal stuff to them? And isn;t project horizons like... a lot more brutal? Sorry, I get kind of lost sometimes. :twilightsheepish:

Secondly, the zebra dude will be...an important character. You'll see. Oh, and, uh, what power levels? :ajsmug:

Lastly: Did I really make the reference that clear? Damn. :facehoof:

Fantastic story ! :yay:

I just finished chapter 2 and can't wait to read more.
This will keep me awake all night I just know it :facehoof:

824279 firstly, you're updating on a regular basis while most of the big FO:E fics on here have either died or gone 'On Hiatus' (Misfits, New Beginnings...), secondly you're doing the Zebra side of the war, which hasn't been explored yet, that wins you SO many points, third, the characters are awesome, fourth, you're doing the doing the Zebra side of the war (did I mention that one already?)

as for being brutal, you're not as brutal as Project Horizons, though it's been a while since I've re-read it

whether someone/something is 'overpowered', though you have a lot more leeway with villains/enemies, given they have to be smarter/stronger/faster etc. then the heroes in order for them to be a challenge, just be sure to not bend the laws of reality to their favor (for both sides) without sufficient explanation

as for the mammoth tank reference, I didn't get it while reading the story, because you didn't really describe the omni-tanks that much, but once regolit brought up Red Alert, it all became apparent

825063 Thanks! Good to know more people are reading! :yay:

826727http://subjectsigma77.deviantart.com/art/Goldwreath-311396313
I'm not the best artist but I hope you like :rainbowkiss:

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