Thousands of years into the future Equestria has progressed greatly technologically and is capable of amazing feats of healing and restoration. Limbs can be lost and replaced within the same day. Bionic hearts can be produced and used to save countless ponies' lives. But just how great is this technology? This story follows Orion as he lives out his life in Equestria, as one by one, he discovers that every single pony he knows is a machine in some way or another. Can he cope, or will he be driven into depression as the world around him takes shape, for better or for worse.
Chapters (2)
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I'll read this later with a real comment, kthxbai
EDIT: REAL COMMENT
Well... I can't say that the story idea isn't interesting... but I still like it. Try adding more descriptive things, for example, like the night when the kid returned home to his family after sneaking out. Maybe describe why he was sneaking out? Describe his family? Hay, even describe what the night felt like. Go on with it.
Yes there are some grammatical errors, but I think the concept is good and if you keep your flow going that it will be a decent story
As far as i have read, this story has a lot of potential in it.
Keep trying, as even though it was a short chapter it was a good read.
Hmmmmmmmmmm......
Interesting will be interested with the next chapter
Must..........Read...................M-.........................MOAR!!!!!!!!
You shall have more, in time. I'm not the fastest writer so you can expect weekly to bi-weekly updates, on both of my stories. If you're interested in reading more from me, go check out my other story which is much longer than this one. I'm sorry I can't update faster, but I'm juggling two stories, school, and life, so this is the best I can do. (Also, just so you know, I'm only 12 and still 'peck' as many people call it so that slows me slightly, although im quite a fast typer anyways. This is also what causes spelling or grammatical errors too.) Sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo...... bye!
i like this story
It's an ok concept I guess...
Very interesting start, hope to see more soon.