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So I was just wondering how you feel about the first chapter of the story. I don't want to go too far into this story and then find out people don't like it. So just leave a comment and if you like it recommend it to your friends. It woud be a great help if you could. Anyways, I will be either shutting down or continuing this story based on your feedback. Remember to comment telling me your opinion, besides grammatical errors. (p.s. i know this chapter is short, just wanted to get it out there. And remember to leave a like if you'd like to see more. :D

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I Brained My Damage

I Brained My Damage #1 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · ·

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I'll read this later with a real comment, kthxbai

EDIT: REAL COMMENT

Well... I can't say that the story idea isn't interesting... but I still like it. Try adding more descriptive things, for example, like the night when the kid returned home to his family after sneaking out. Maybe describe why he was sneaking out? Describe his family? Hay, even describe what the night felt like. Go on with it.

lmrm7

lmrm7 #2 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · ·

Yes there are some grammatical errors, but I think the concept is good and if you keep your flow going that it will be a decent story

Huntersniper117

Huntersniper117 #3 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · ·

As far as i have read, this story has a lot of potential in it.
Keep trying, as even though it was a short chapter it was a good read.

Low-quality memes

Low-quality memes #4 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · ·

Must..........Read...................M-.........................MOAR!!!!!!!!

Silver Centurion

Silver Centurion #5 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · ·

You shall have more, in time. I'm not the fastest writer so you can expect weekly to bi-weekly updates, on both of my stories. If you're interested in reading more from me, go check out my other story which is much longer than this one. I'm sorry I can't update faster, but I'm juggling two stories, school, and life, so this is the best I can do. (Also, just so you know, I'm only 12 and still 'peck' as many people call it so that slows me slightly, although im quite a fast typer anyways. This is also what causes spelling or grammatical errors too.) Sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo...... bye!