With the blood of her sister on her hooves, will Celestia reach out to those closest to her in time before her own nightmare begins? Or will the unfortunate events that will unfold force Celestia down a much darker path than her sister ever took?
What woud Celestia do if the blast that repelled the changelings also Repelled Twilight because she was using dark magic. Or what if the Crystal Heart did blew her apart for the same reason.
I'll just put all of the Crazy faces that I want to use here, so they don't clutter up my comment:
There you are, you annoyance. Happy to see me?
How long until "my precious" replaces "you annoyance"?
This is the forty-second morning in a row you've reported to be in some shape or form.
42! Because... I dunno. Just 42. Also is that "be" supposed to be "me" or am I not reading this correctly?
Rarity shook her head. “Everything is perfectly fine, Mistress.”
Yus, Mistress Twilight. Also, I feel like I would have used someone somewhat less important to test long term effects.
Meanwhile, in Canterlot:
“Everything seems so quiet without you near, Twilight Sparkle.” Placing a hoof against her chest to still her aching chest, Celestia released a heartfelt sigh, content that their lives had intertwined the way it had.
But she wanted more.
She wanted all of Twilight’s attention.
Celestia is gettin' JELLY of a book.
I mean, when I put it that way, I feel like it isn't that much of a surprise that Twi's special somepony is jealous of her time spent with a book of magic, but this particular set of circumstances (Dark Magic actually corrupting her mental faculties) shines a new and far less humorous light on things.
And finally, I have spotted several grammar problems, none of which are huge, but I would like to offer my services as an editor (unless you already have one, or just want me to post them here.)
And even more finally: ALL THE BLACK MAGIC. AND TESTING OF SAID MAGIC. Getting some flashbacks of Code Geass.
5692166 Thanks for spotting the mistake there. I know there is a few grammatical errors hanging about, and I do change them when I see them, but for the most part I haven't an editor on this Fic since chapter 3ish? I have considered it greatly, however, the more this fic's popularity increases.
I would very much appreciate your help, if you are willing? I know people ain't going to enjoy the totality of this comment because I plan to put this Fic on a small Hiatus so I can step back and re-read/-re-edit what I've got and plan ahead for the future.
I am currently constructing a Gdoc with all of the chapters on, so if you want, I can send you the link for you to edit EVERYTHING, if you so wish? I am sure there is a legion of errors waiting to be pointed out to me and my stupidity.
5703693 It probably is not going the way you think it is going to go, but, it kinda will? Hard to explain that one. But in any case, I did go a tiny bit Lelouch, because I can see that happening in this Twilight's instance.
Jealousy may play an important factor but it won't be the heaviest theme.
5689757 Completely correct. That's why I am going to use him quite extensively. Ya'll not seen the last of him.
5689800 That Gundam fic is up btw.
5689881 will this ever be like v for vendetta sooner or later?
5689989 *Blink* If it does become anything like that I would consider myself a genius. Let's hope it does?
5689994 Alright.Good luck.
Did you got my Dark Night returnes plot?
What woud Celestia do if the blast that repelled the changelings also Repelled Twilight because she was using dark magic.
Or what if the Crystal Heart did blew her apart for the same reason.
5690161 LMAO.
I'll just put all of the Crazy faces that I want to use here, so they don't clutter up my comment:
How long until "my precious" replaces "you annoyance"?
42! Because... I dunno. Just 42. Also is that "be" supposed to be "me" or am I not reading this correctly?
Yus, Mistress Twilight. Also, I feel like I would have used someone somewhat less important to test long term effects.
Meanwhile, in Canterlot:
Celestia is gettin' JELLY of a book.
I mean, when I put it that way, I feel like it isn't that much of a surprise that Twi's special somepony is jealous of her time spent with a book of magic, but this particular set of circumstances (Dark Magic actually corrupting her mental faculties) shines a new and far less humorous light on things.
And finally, I have spotted several grammar problems, none of which are huge, but I would like to offer my services as an editor (unless you already have one, or just want me to post them here.)
And even more finally: ALL THE BLACK MAGIC. AND TESTING OF SAID MAGIC. Getting some flashbacks of Code Geass.
5692166 Thanks for spotting the mistake there. I know there is a few grammatical errors hanging about, and I do change them when I see them, but for the most part I haven't an editor on this Fic since chapter 3ish? I have considered it greatly, however, the more this fic's popularity increases.
I would very much appreciate your help, if you are willing? I know people ain't going to enjoy the totality of this comment because I plan to put this Fic on a small Hiatus so I can step back and re-read/-re-edit what I've got and plan ahead for the future.
I am currently constructing a Gdoc with all of the chapters on, so if you want, I can send you the link for you to edit EVERYTHING, if you so wish? I am sure there is a legion of errors waiting to be pointed out to me and my stupidity.
Oh yeah.
Nice spot on the Code Geass reference.
So Twilight is going Lelouch on her friends, and Celestia is slowly slipping into jealousy.
Sounds legit.
5703693 It probably is not going the way you think it is going to go, but, it kinda will? Hard to explain that one. But in any case, I did go a tiny bit Lelouch, because I can see that happening in this Twilight's instance.
Jealousy may play an important factor but it won't be the heaviest theme.
Next thing you know, Celestia goes on full yandere mode.