The great land of Equestria has fallen to ruin and disorder. The ponies try their best to rebuild their once great empire under the ground, buruing deeper into the mountains in the south of Equestria. Trying their best to escape the insanity. but they will soon find that the troubles of the surface can not so easily be forgotten.
I would suggest making it a long story like you said , with a deep story line of how eqeustria used to be
Seems good! I'll add to read later.
See if you can figure out what's wrong here...
this is really good for your first! you should write more and maybe some longer ones.
5109551 Thank you for correcting me, i forget my there's from my their's sometimes
I'll fix it right away.
Good story update please.