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I have nothing... therefore I am nothing. Revel in your darkness, for it is my light that made you blind. :3
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So, for those that are reading this. Thank you oh-so-very-much! Thanks for the ups and Favs, know you might not read this, maybe. I am still saying it here though!
Also, Chapter 1 - A Changeling Life (Part 2)
Is underway, I am currently piecing it all together now. I should have it out by Monday at what I feel is the latest... unless I end up looking at it and going... nope, nope, must change something! Then I have to change everything to form properly. -_- Stupid brain and it's random, yet sometimes awesome ideas.
Although, I was really hoping that someone would feel entitled to make a comment or statement about my writing. Just trying to learn how to make it better besides upgrading my vocabulary and trying to describe things in a better light, or darker light. 
So on that note, thanks for all those that Favorited my story again! Even thank you to those that thumbed me down! May not of been your cup of tea, coffee, or whatever you drink. I just hope you thumbed it down because you disagreed with something in it. Not that you seen it and said... go away, thumb down!
In the case you didn't do the formal, I'd be more than happy if you would share what you felt was wrong with it. 
Thank you very much again everyone!
It's annoying people thumb down without a comment. Oh well.
Anyways, quite a bit of exposition and world building so far. Not sure if that's a bad thing, but a lot seemed fairly irrelevant to the plot (well, unless the named lings are going to be important later...), and it felt a little distracted.
Interesting Sozo is running an open Hive, for some reason that's really not that common at all. Seems to be working, so who are we to complain?
Keep going! ;)
Great story so far, can't wait for more!
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Thank you! I am working and the final part of Chapter 1 to be released tonight, it's taking a lot of characterization and editing in this section... more than I thought I was going to put in... initially. Though I think some individuals will like the subtle scene I threw in. Thought it may help bring out a larger view on changelings, or at least Tempist and Sozo. When I post it up here, please, let me know what you think! If I ruined the story a bit... uh... well... then crap! I'll just have to amend it with a makeup chapter or something then... *sniffles*
5266488 Don't worry, It's probably going to be great
I am just taking this moment... to say sorry yet I Apologize for nothing!
Sadly... I've not delved into the deeper parts of this story... ...yet. I feel someone is going to report me and I'm going to cry... 
Though I hope you enjoy it!
<--- I love these---> 
Wasn't expecting this. That escalated quickly, it really got out of hand fast.
but the story is yours and don't let anyone change the way you write, you took time and effort to write this and who are the readers to judge.
I'm going to keep reading this story until it's finished, my friend.
Interesting the opposing reactions to the end result. I take it she will be a pegacorn (note: different than an Alicorn) changeling? Sounds interesting.
There were a few word swaps here and there, like entree and plane for entry and plain.
Kinda irks us that supposedly close siblings would betray so heavily, though Sozo 's reaction was way more subdued than I anticipated, so I guess they didn't feel it unexpected.
Keep going! ;)
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I did feel I might of over-used a few words to... hmm, another once over won't ever hurt and some minor editing will always flush it out as well. 
Oh, shoot... ugh, I swear I thought I had all the proper words in place... UGH... I bet while editing I totally skipped those thinking I spelt them correctly. I'll take another Once over when I have the actual energy to re-read the whole chapter... My eyes get a little strained after re-reading/editing constantly.
Notice any other discrepancies let me know!
As for Sozo's reaction, it was very subdued. Technically one of the things a Changeling in the universe I'm attempting to develop here is that they will rarely give up any part of territory if it can be helped. Though they are close siblings, what happened between them is very much touched to as a dominate humping... or a price that had to be payed... granted she was... with child... *Shivers* I am kind of glad at the moment I didn't go into full detail mode for that. Sick'os!
Yes, a bit estranged but it works. Though I can tell you she was definitely hurt by her sister's actions emotionally... maybe I failed to fully emit that in the writing... apologies, I shall stride to do better.
What was the hurtful aspect was that her Daughter's.... Uhm... Spoiler here! >>>>> Her Daughter's future choice in what she is was to be was essentially stolen from her. Though it became a far more cruel thing when they found out, a bit late, that she was not a full changeling. A lot of half-breed changelings tend to live roughly twice the length of normal ponies, so anywhere from 120 to 200 years roughly, on average. As well they share a rather tough... interior, making them excellent breeders... though they live a life full of constant birthing... painful... very painful and always regenerating wounds from birthing. Although, that is not the case for every single half-breed. That is all I'm giving ya' for a spoiler//insight from authors perspective.
Pegacorn, Pegasus-Unicorn, with thrown in Changeling genetics for good measure.
And yes, NO. 
She is not an Alicorn.
Thank you for your advice and encouragement so far, it has been helpful!
So changelings here Ascend via food overdose?
Keep going! ;)
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No, but maybe you didn't notice her first feeding of fear. Her mother knew she was close to becoming the next stage... though she didn't know how close. As a note, it was the fear feeding that finished her advancement.