In the near future, where the brony fandom is alive and well, a group of fans got together at the announcement of the NerveGear, a full-body immersion virtual reality device, and decided to create a game. That game, known as Equestria Legends Online, was much anticipated by a majority of the fandom and soon people were lining up to get a copy when it came out. This story follows the adventures of MidnightDreams in this new Virtual World, yet soon, things take a turn for the worst and the whole shebang goes from E to M. Welcome to Equestria Legends Online, welcome to the death game, Search, Slay, and Restore Harmony.
Original Story- Equestria Legends Online
Chapters (7)
It's good, but a few nitpicks:
One, double spacing makes it a whole lot easier to read.
Second, I don't know if the iOS version of the site does well with images, but you should add a text description of yourself so that I know what you look like.
Third, buble.
Keep up the good work for now.
I fixed all that. Thanks for the help.
When I saw "ELO" I thought Electric Light Orchestra. I am severely disappoint.
5077580 I'm guessing you only got so far as the description?
5077585 Yes. Virtual reality fics don't really catch my interest.
5077587 Alright. Try another of my stories if this doesn't interest you.
Nice work
Though I do have to agree with what Mersey said about the image
5077734 I know. I apologize about that. It wouldn't let it go to the page. It should be linked through the "Me" at the end of that sentence.
5077738
It was still good none the less
You should put a link to the original story in the description.
I was kinda hoping ELO stood for Electric Light Orchestra...
[youtube=http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=S2ds8tCtomQ]
There. It is no longer confusing.
5077955
Thanks man I appreciate it
5078682 No problem.
Wow, that was the complete opposite of what I imagined you to look like, I've been imagining you sort of Flash Sentry-coloured with a white mane. Not that it's bad, just... unexpected.
5080200 XD
Surprise Surprise.
But no, I get what you mean.
What do you imagine Midnight sounds like?
5080797 A mixture between Applejack's pitch and... Twilight's accent. And, with an added little bit of Scouser. Because I can inflect my town onto other people, can't I?
5080802
Oh wow...
Um I'm not certain what Scouser could be.
5080832 Eh, Liverpudlian.
5080861 ?
5080869 Think of the Beatles. You're on the right track.
5080871 Oh. Wow. Good lord.
If we ever make a vid or something That voice would be PERFECT
5080916 Really? I'm really only able to be not a girl, since I'm 76.8189% sure I'm not.
5080971 Only 76. something% unsure?
5080995 No, only 23.29% unsure. I am 1/4% unsure of my gender.
He just killed a man. Where is the reaction.
5141153
Exactly. None.
Now that was an...interesting turn of events.I'll have to read it again to fully understand it :O
I agree with Blaze rod.
This chapter seemed too rushed, and we don't get to see any actual character improvement.
5471177
...
Ugh.
I get it.
yay great story looking forward for more.
So, are you going to erase the story, erase the chapters or make a new story?
8414600
Revision enough to make it basically new
Where is the character development and the remorse’s of killing someone?
Cool!
Doin good
Nine bosses