Eh, you kinda dragged it out a bit, I personally think you could have foregone the ear drum part, it's a little past its descriptive duty at that point. But very good digestion scene, if a little jarring with grammar.
Sweetie Belle blinked when some of the stinging acids dripped in her eyes. The burning brought tears to her eyes. By then, the itching on her body was quickly changing for the worst. It now felt more like her whole body was on fire. Sweetie lit her horn for illuminate the dark fleshy cavern. It was the only spell she knew that took no concentration. What she saw shocked her. Her entire body was nude of any fur and patches on her legs and belly were a deep red. All she could smell was the acrid, acidic air around her and her eyes were bloodshot.
Umm if your describing what she saw how are her e yes being descibed???
Comment posted by DarkyBoode32 deleted Dec 1st, 2023
Eh, you kinda dragged it out a bit, I personally think you could have foregone the ear drum part, it's a little past its descriptive duty at that point. But very good digestion scene, if a little jarring with grammar.
Umm if your describing what she saw how are her e yes being descibed???
sweetie belle fucking dies nooooooooo
Very nice