I'm 40% jokes, 30% serious, and 20% romance. The Last 10%? You tell me. Ko-fi: https://ko-fi.com/overlord_flinx
One would think a short time to practice your instrument wouldn't be such an allusive chore. But Octavia rarely gets much practice time in. Why? Every time she tries, a scratch always interrupts her focus. A Vinyl Scratch. But a friend is a friend; no matter how much they bother--Trouble you...
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Complete? I'm... a little disappointed, since it just... I don't know.. I mean, it's good, yeah, but it suggests something more at the end, and I'd like to see that, since you have a 'Romance' tag, but it doesn't even really do much for friend-shipping, let alone actual shipping. Just MO, but there ya go.
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It was my first My Little Pony story to be honest, not my best work... I have chewed over the idea of adding the secondary part to it (which I have put work on) but the story never took too well with readers... I suppose I could write more to it and delve into it further like I originally planned, but at this point I'm more proud and placid to work on my other works. But yes, I may add another part to it later down the road. A much better and much more colorful piece compared to this.
467560 It's not that this was bad! I just... Felt like there was more to say, that's all! One shots need a slightly better resolution than normal stories, because (obviously) a short story like this is different from a story with chapters, and the this story progressed felt like a short story up until the end, where it seemed like there was more to say. I mean, leaving the ending to the imagination is great, but it just needs reworded a little or something.
Alright, fair enough! I know it sounds like I'm pressuring you, and I apologize for that! I know I come off as being a bit... brash and an egotistical know-it-all, but I'm honestly just trying to help spot flaws to help you get better, so I made mention of it. ^^; I'm going to bed before I shove my hoof further up my mouth! If I didn't say it before, thanks for the story!
Just gonna track, just in case you were gonna continue it. It feels like there could be more added on seeing as there wasn't really any romance to speak of. Either way though, it was a good story.
Moar! I'm liking it a lot, I would like to see it continued.
You should keep writing/revising this story. I'd like to see what you do with it.