Angel the rabbit has been part of a killer cult on Mission Dom, determined to dominate the world, starting with the Mane 6. But when the time comes to kill Fluttershy, can the rabbit go through with it?
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Arya Stark
"Swift as a deer. Quiet as a shadow. Fear cuts deeper than swords. Quick as a snake. Calm as still water.”.......... I am Arya Stark. 'Nuff said. ;D
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That was overly gruesome in my opinion, and seemed a bit rushed. Maybe if you showed Angle having regrets for what he's done, or didn't make the deaths so painful sounding. Sorry, but this got a thumbs down from me.
4923811 Thanks for your opinion!! At least you explained why. Thanks!!
4924053 Your welcome. I just wanted to leave some constructive criticism, and I'm glad you read it!
Arya Stark first I like the story it really got my blood boiling which is a good thing it means that you made the villains so despicable I got angry and second I have to ask you a question I plan on writing a story that has to do with the villains of the series and was wondering if I could us the "Mission Dom" name for the group. let me know please and thanks
4924696 Glad it got your blood boiling! I consider it a personal achievement if I can mess with the reader's emotions...
And sure, use Mission Dom, I am sure that it is not a original name, I am sure many people have used it. ><
Also, it would be totally cool if we maybe co-authored in something? I mean if you are gonna use villians and my Mission Dom name....
Just a thought.
Thanks for the read! Be sure to thumbs up or fav it if you feel it is worthy! (Every author has their vain moment of self promotion....)
~A.S
4924716 Sure I'd like to work with you and if you're talking about the story I'm planning on writing I have to ask have you seen The Hitcher the 2007 movie and Hannibal Rising another 2007 movie (ironic huh?
) because those title characters will be a big part of the story.
4924753 No I have not :(
4924157 Then again, it was SUPPOSED to be dark and gruesome (ergo the tag, yeah?) , but the rushed comment, I definitely will take into account. Thanks again!
4924797 Should check them out good movies in my opinion anyway I'll give you credit for giving me the idea to add two more characters to the mix.
4924842 PM me if you want to collaborate something up!!
4924862 Ok sounds good.
4924827 I have no problems with dark stories, it's just the extremely gory ones like Rainbow Factory, Cupcakes, and, to a much lesser extent, Fallout Equestria that get me.
4924911 Really? Don't know how to put this...but this is not dark...at ALL...compared to what I could have done/ what goes around in my mind....the THEORY is dark, the actual writing was mild, at least I thought.
Oh well, thanks again for the opinion.
4924917 Well sir, you have me terrified now...
4925162 Um....I'm...I'm a girl.... XD
4925177 Okay then: Well Madame, you have terrified me now... um... uh...
4925237
"Just something that's been hopping around in my head"
... I see what you did there.
4926204 Heh, good, someone who gets my sense of humor
Me gusta. I like this bunny better, though.
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4928299 What the fuck?
4924053 story is pretty good, a little speedy, but good
4928717 Thank you!! ^^
4928299 That....is going to be the newest weapons we use in the army, I declare it now!
Who needs bombs? Send over the bunnies and DROWN THE ENEMIES IN THE FUR!!
4929252
TOO TRUE!! TOO TRUE!!
I wanna say its cute. Just cause he didn't kill Fluttershy. I wanna, but since best mane 6 is Rarity I just can't. Honestly didn't see that ending though. And the callsigns/nicknames were fun, especially Tirek's "BullBadass."
To be honest, I thought she was gonna kill Fluttershy (I didn't wanna wish it because Fluttershy's my favorite) but wow, that was one hell of a twist in my opinion. I loved how you formatted it with the ID Caller giving us little details about how Angel killed off everyone. Is it bad I actually laughed when they mentioned Pinkie's death...hm may need to get checked on that one but still an awesome story.
5079002 Thank you! I didn't know how to do Pinkie's death for awhile, but I figured hey, she defies all laws of EVERYTHING, so have fun killing her simply for once.
No, you aren't messed up laughing at it, because I DID write it, so if anyone is messed up... ^^
5079018 Thanks, and keep making stories if you can, they're really good.
5079024 My second best one is Sisters Forever, but my best SHORT ones are To Be Her Riders Legs or Fran-sass
5079068 I'm reading To Be Her Riders Legs right now.
5079080Thanks ^^
5079104 Your welcome.
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5079117 please consider adding another chapter called "...Leave a Message"! showing the other's reactions to his (Angel's male btw) death!