lol i haven't finished it yet but that like about aj's dick looking like it hung around seaports beating up other penises and taking there money had my laughing my ass off hahahahaha
haha alright i finished it. I thought she was actually going to be pregnant at first, then i thought "naw how would that even work" then i thought "well its magic" then it went away. No prego's haha. Twilights a bit of a nut haha. Anyway this stories great. Keep it up.
Really nice chapter, I think this has been my favorite so far. Looking forward for more, keep it up! Twilight seemed really cute in my opinion, regardless of her dramatic outbursts here and there Her personality you emulate makes her seem believable from what we've seen of her on the actual show from time to time.
As I mentioned in your thread, I simultaneously applaud how well Dash's hard-to-narrow-down personality carries over, and am sad that she's not as sympathetic as she is in my headcanon. All the same, your Twilight characterization is nothing short of wonderful. Great work as always.
I am liking Rainbow less and less, just as much as my respect for Applejack is going up. She's supposed to be the element of loyaltly... what a joke. I get that maybe pony social structures are different from ours and maybe polygamy is a common thing for them but... what Rainbow did to Twilight. I do not approve.
I was a little confused at the part where Twilight was freaking out about becoming pregnant, since that's a technical impossibility, but after thinking about it for a while, Twilight does have a way of freaking out over small things, which you have captured beautifully I must say, and that, topped with the mindless abandon of post coital bliss, and the lack of rational thinking thereof, made for a surprisingly in character chapter, which, given the pretense of this story, is quite refreshing.
I agree with Zyrian. Twi freaking out over a small detail was captured beautifly. Sure with would have been award for all of them. But considering that AJ and Dashie have done it multiple times without become prego, how could that change with Twi?
Everyone seems to be going on about Twilight, and it's true that she was characterized perfectly, but the highlight for me was "applejacks cock looked like it lurked around seaports and mugged other penises for their money". It was the greatest analogy I have seen in my life.
Twi was pretty darn convincing. I liked how she went utterly insane with the possibility that she was pregnant. I feel like things are a bit more clear now that you explained things for me. That was some pretty hot stuff right there. I'd really expect Twilight to be able to think up a spell that can sterilize her insides temporarily or something like that.
3029836 A lot of fics refer to a spell similar to that. 'The Morning After Spell'. But it doesn't sterilize your insides, it sterilizes the sperm inside you.
I think that the way this is going, it might end up in a orgy between the mare 6. Also Twilight said as Apple Jack is a farm pony she wouldn't know about sex and sperm making babies, but if AJ lives on a farm, wouldn't she see animals mating and giving birth to babies all the time so she will have just as much knowledge on sex or maybe more than Twilight even though their both lives are too busy to have sex with anypony on a regular basis?
Twilight was such a drama queen at the end xD
lol i haven't finished it yet but that like about aj's dick looking like it hung around seaports beating up other penises and taking there money had my laughing my ass off hahahahaha
haha alright i finished it. I thought she was actually going to be pregnant at first, then i thought "naw how would that even work" then i thought "well its magic" then it went away. No prego's haha. Twilights a bit of a nut haha. Anyway this stories great. Keep it up.
Rule #1 about Drama Queens and ponies.
Place #1 is ALWAYS. TWILIGHT. SPARKLE.
Place #2 is Rarity but is close to tying.
I'm pretty sure that Twi was just freaking out at the end there.
At least... I kinda hope so. Otherwise this magic bit gets more complicated.....
Haha. Nice. AJ finally look more like that hard, honest, dominant and strong Applejack I love. Hope she'll fuck Dash hard, untill she begs to stop))
Really nice chapter, I think this has been my favorite so far. Looking forward for more, keep it up!
Twilight seemed really cute in my opinion, regardless of her dramatic outbursts here and there
Her personality you emulate makes her seem believable from what we've seen of her on the actual show from time to time.
As I mentioned in your thread, I simultaneously applaud how well Dash's hard-to-narrow-down personality carries over, and am sad that she's not as sympathetic as she is in my headcanon. All the same, your Twilight characterization is nothing short of wonderful. Great work as always.
It's... different, that's for sure. I don't quite understand Dash's logic, but I suppose you had to let everypony have their share somehow
On that note, I hope you plan on doing a Rarity chapter soon, or else I will be very cross with you.
Twilight was absolutely adorkable in this.
I know it's obvious, but I'm glad it's just single futa; don't really like that both-sides-have-a-thing thing.
Oh my good god, this is amazing.
Twilight is perfect here. This is so incredibly sweet that I am kind of melted over here.
Your writing for twilight here is defimitely some of the best i've seem in a fanfiction. Best chapter so far, looking forward to continuing on.
That was just beautiful. you caught twi exactly as i would have imagined her. That soft, nerdy, sweet little mare.
Can't...stop...laughing...
Oh Twilight, you adorkable little thing, you. I just want to take you home and snuggle you forever. It's alomost a shame this story isn't AppleLight.
That... that was very cute and sweet. Nicely done.
821464 Buddy if you want Twilight, you're gonna have to go through Copy.Data (My O.C.), just saying.
I am liking Rainbow less and less, just as much as my respect for Applejack is going up. She's supposed to be the element of loyaltly... what a joke. I get that maybe pony social structures are different from ours and maybe polygamy is a common thing for them but... what Rainbow did to Twilight. I do not approve.
That last scene was beautifully written.
I was a little confused at the part where Twilight was freaking out about becoming pregnant, since that's a technical impossibility, but after thinking about it for a while, Twilight does have a way of freaking out over small things, which you have captured beautifully I must say, and that, topped with the mindless abandon of post coital bliss, and the lack of rational thinking thereof, made for a surprisingly in character chapter, which, given the pretense of this story, is quite refreshing.
I agree with Zyrian. Twi freaking out over a small detail was captured beautifly. Sure with would have been award for all of them. But considering that AJ and Dashie have done it multiple times without become prego, how could that change with Twi?
And on that note;
Twi-logic; AJ just came inside! I'm pregnant now!
hats off for twilight, totally in character
also: youve really got a knack for describing dicks in a kind of mouthwatering way....
Everyone seems to be going on about Twilight, and it's true that she was characterized perfectly, but the highlight for me was "applejacks cock looked like it lurked around seaports and mugged other penises for their money". It was the greatest analogy I have seen in my life.
Twi was pretty darn convincing. I liked how she went utterly insane with the possibility that she was pregnant. I feel like things are a bit more clear now that you explained things for me. That was some pretty hot stuff right there. I'd really expect Twilight to be able to think up a spell that can sterilize her insides temporarily or something like that.
Words cannot express how I feel right now. So here, have a picture that I found on the Internet when looking up memes.
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That was my fav part too :D
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A lot of fics refer to a spell similar to that. 'The Morning After Spell'. But it doesn't sterilize your insides, it sterilizes the sperm inside you.
3167061 I too thoroughly enjoyed that part I was laughing so hard I quite literally choked on my own mirth.
I think that the way this is going, it might end up in a orgy between the mare 6. Also Twilight said as Apple Jack is a farm pony she wouldn't know about sex and sperm making babies, but if AJ lives on a farm, wouldn't she see animals mating and giving birth to babies all the time so she will have just as much knowledge on sex or maybe more than Twilight even though their both lives are too busy to have sex with anypony on a regular basis?