Just a normal college kid... and a brony... who likes to write. Not a lot, but it's there.
Rainbow Dash finds herself searching for help after an argument with Fluttershy reopens wounds from their past in Cloudsdale. As Twilight tries to help the two sort out the their issues, she finds herself falling deeper into the confusion.
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Alrighty everybody. This is my first attempt at a fanfic with actual substance, so of course the characters might lapse into... out of character moments. How are you even supposed to word that?
...AAAAAAAAAANYWAY! This is more than likely only going to be a three-parter. Sure, that may not seem like a whole lot, but when I write, I don't like my stories overstaying their welcome. Leave your comments or suggestions below, and I shall read and consider your demands. Or something like that.
Be kind. Be productive. Be Black Mesa.
P.S. This fandom needs a little bit more FlutterDash, so I figured I'd get the ball rolling a bit. But don't think that's all this is.
A nice little premise. Tracked.
pretty good.... keep up the good work man.... rainbow dash messed up big time
Can't think of anything to say other than I like this so far and look forward to more
Wow. This is great reading. And I must say that that is a hard school. I give you a favorit and a
hoof-up.
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You don't know the half of it... which is why I'm going to be working on it some more after my night class.
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Thanks for your support!
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Thank you much! I definitely wanted it to come off that way, so mission partially accomplished!
Like I said, more is on the way! Thanks for the love, everyone!
--576 Belligerent Coil was here
wow i like where this going; very interested to see where it goes. Liked and favorited
I like where this is going.
460599 I would say it like: The characters might get a little out of character.
Great story!
Poor Fluttershy!
Seems interesting, love the brutal take on Cloudsdale, certainly different, keep it up!
Can't wait for the next chapter
Made it a fav so i can keep following you 
Okay, guys. Next chapter's up. It's significantly shorter this time around, and that trend may continue. Not sure as of now how long the whole thing is gonna be, but...
Take it as it is!
--576 Belligerent Coil loves you!
ARGH! why must you stop there? I want more lol.
Keeping hooves crossed for happy ending.
Short chapters :( oh well as long as you keep em coming! good job so far!
Man alive, guys, am I sorry I haven't updated this yet. I've had so bloody much on my plate as of late (it's getting close to finals), so it's probably going to be a while before I'm ready to put the next part up. Bear with me, everyone... I will finish this story!
EDIT: As my roommate pointed out... I DIDN'T SIGN OFF!
--576 Belligerent Coil was here!
When you typed 'somehow i don't think dash will like it if i read it now' you lapsed into the first person. Just thought you should know. Other than that, me like
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Whoa, broski. Thank you for catching that. That was supposed to be italicized, but all my formatting was erased when I converted from a Word document.
That was originally meant to be Twilight's thoughts about the book. Now it is fixed, and the original meaning is restored =w=
Thank you very much for that, man. Brohoof!
EDIT: And I found another spot in part 2... I'll have to be more careful when I upload part 3.
...which is coming, people! I'd say within the next three days... but don't hold your breath. -whispers- You'd die.
Woohoo, guys! Part three is UP!
Third and final part is successfully uploaded, and I can get on to the rest of lif--
...wait. This isn't the final part?
Who the buck made that decis--
...IT WAS ME?
Egh...
That's right, guys... I'm planning a fourth and final segment to end my little saga here. It's gonna be the epilogue, not really a full chapter. Just tying up a few loose ends and throwing some hints to the future. So be looking out for it.
--576 Belligerent Coil loves you!
hooray new chapter woohoo!!!
NOOOOO ITS ENDING SO SOON
Yay, more plot.
Nice! NEW CHAPTER!
I have been waiting for this great job! 
I had fun reading this, and I really do hope to see more from you. c:
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w00t! Glad you like it so far. Shall be more soon.
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It's not over yet.
Still got the epilogue to go... might release some 'deleted scenes', so to speak.
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Yeah, this one might be ending, but I'll probably be doing some more later... Not sure what though.
...suggestions are welcome!
--576 Belligerent Coil was here!
I will be waiting for your epilogue. How will Ms. Sparkle end this confusing tale she has witnessed?
Will another story come from this or will you go off in another direction entirely?
I can't wait to find out
You should know who I am, Mr. Coil
If you don't know, I may just send you to the MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON for your seeming ignorance!!!!!
**JK I am not Celestia...or am I...
Woo~
Well, the epilogue is finally here. It's a bit short, but that's what the epilogue's for, right? Hope you've enjoyed the ride (I know I have!), and be sure to keep a lookout for my next fic, which is going to be an extension of that story Twilight was reading in the first chapter.
Sorry this took me so long; the summer's new, and I've been working and sick for quite some time. Now that I got laid off (unyay), I've had some time to work.
Thanks for reading!
--576 Belligerent Coil loves you!
Minor grammatical fix. Stupid finals, making me unable to proofread.
Hrmm
A shipping triangle
What could come of this?
oh my Celestia! you have no idea, i love this story so much, until i get to the epilogue... then it got 100 times better! i woke up my parents i was laughing so hard at what twilight *ahem* stumbled upon, you have made my night, i honestly dont think i have laughed that hard in a while! and how you ended the letter, classic!!!
"And they’re doing just fine."
Best. Line. Ever!
Why do I have this feeling that Twilight was misinterpreting what they were doing? I mean, they've only been dating for a few days and Rainbow Dash seems kind of clueless/uncertain about the whole thing. Maybe it was a massage...or maybe some game like twister gettin' difficult... Or maybe Fluttershy really did get hurt and Rainbow Dash was merely trying to help... *shrug* Ending just puzzled me, 'tis all.
Incomplete?