Once upon a breezy night, counting the stars and snuggling up close for warmth atop a low-hanging cloud somewhere over Ponyville, two young pegasi who had always been friends first admitted the true depths of their affection for one another.
But that was eighteen months ago, and Rainbow Dash isn't sure she understands Fluttershy anymore; what she wants, what she's afraid of; what she really feels. Frustrated and sworn to silence, all she wants is what she thinks is best for them both - but can she work out how to reconcile their differences, and after she's been through so much to get to this point, does she even want to anymore?
Chapters (9)
Holy crap, why wasn't this featured? Or at least, be a bit more popular! This fic is amazing! Everyone's in character, the conflict's believable, it made me laugh, it's just, dare I say it, awesome!
Oddly enough I keep on trying to think of something to compare my opinion on this fanfic too, and two comparisons come to mind. In my eyes this fanfic is like a review I disagree with the opinion of but one which is well written and explains it reasons, or like the episode of 'The Mysterious Mare Do Well' but with the Fan comic 'Alone' by Yuki-Orin attached to it as canon. What I mean by those two comparisons I will soon explain however there is a rhetorical question I must first shout out "Why has this fanfic got so few comments!"
The spelling, grammar, detail, writing style, characterisation, romance, (and the little amount we got of it) comedy, can all be summarised with one word; mind-blowing. Seriously this is...this is just amazing. The spelling and grammar is practically flawless (although I did read the entire thing in one sitting so I may have missed the odd error), the plot is not only unique and original but realistic, and the style of writing, oh for all the themes that are expressed in the details and plot it just works ever so well. Romance is realistic and well expressed, nicely described, and though very heavy the characters still felt themselves and this lent itself well to the progression of the story. As for comedy, there wasn't much of it and most of the time when it appeared it felt kind of...out of place although even with this difference in mood I just could not help but burst out laughing at just about everything Rarity did in this fanfic. Some of the best usage of the character I have ever read about.
Most of the criticism's I could point out are more matters of personal opinion, for instance, the chapters of Twilights and Applejack's actually made me angry. I read on because the writing was good but I started to feel angry at how...one-sided it all seemed, as if all the blame was on Rainbow Dash and she was the only one at fault. Thankfully it balances itself out a bit better when Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy converse but I still felt it was awfully heavy on Rainbow Dash, and rather light on Fluttershy, something that could be solved if the fanfic also followed Fluttershy's activities and thoughts during the events of this story. Similar to the case of 'The Mysterious Mare Do Well' my anger was also invoked by a feeling of sympathy towards Rainbow Dash, and oddly enough the ability to relate to the character. I have next to nothing in common with Rainbow Dash with exception to two things addressed in this fanfic, her pride and her bluntness, both of which I'm naturally inclined to defend, and your explanation between privacy and secrecy still isn't enough to convince me they are different (then again being honest to the point of being blunt is one of my defining characteristics). These are opinion based ones and most were dissipated a great deal by the end due to how the Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy scene played out, and though it was negative emotions being evoked it is still quite a feat to be able to make me care so much for the characters and their dilemma that these feelings could be evoked.
Less opinion based criticism is rather small and this should only take me a sentence or two. The opening of chapter two is a bit confusing with the change from narrator to Pinkie and back, Applejack's Earth pony magic thing makes no sense, and the Epilogue feels rather pointless particularly when Chapter 7 ends so much better. Also, isn't Fluttershy scared of Nightmare Night? Why would she need a costume?
Regardless of my difference in opinion to certain moments and views within this fanfic it is still a phenomenal read, a great experience both as a piece of literature and as a means of enjoyment. I love FlutterDash and it makes me smile to know that it has not just been featured in a fanfic but a wonderful one at that capable of tugging my emotions up, down, and all over the place. Finally, this may be a stupendous emotional tale but the following '"L... Love has triumphed!" she shouted, mostly to regain some dignity. "And... in my bed!" Her horn began to glow threateningly' was the best scene of the entire thing. Astonishing job, keep up the fantastic work!
Dang dude, this is a good fanfic. I agree with the other reviewer, this really should be featured.
I don't understand why things like this are not more prominent on FIMfic. This was really poetic in its structure. In other words, this is the good shit of the literary world.
I got nothing else to say to this.
This, is definetly one of the best Rainbowshy fics i've read yet.
rather short though, but i guess i can appreciate not dragging the drama any further than necessary (and it could have been milked for dozen more chapters easily) and ending before reader fatigue has change to set in.
Wow ... Words fail to describe how incredible this was. This probably the best shipping fic I have ever read. Congratulations!
ME GUSTA
This was absolutely beautiful. I love romance stories involving Fluttershy, they always turn out so cute.
So, yeah. Beautiful.
It's criminal that a masterpiece like this has to wallow in relative obscurity. This is easily one of the greatest stories I've ever read from this fandom. Hell, from ANYTHING. I've read entire novels I've liked less.
I'm almost ashamed to never have read a proper FlutterDash shipfic before this, but I'm glad this one was the first. Oh my god am I glad.
Yes.
It was good.
Possibly the best.
I'd love to see this get featured. As strange as this fic is in some ways, I have found it a highly unique read and styled very engagingly.
FTW!
So much character and emotions squeezed into so few chapters. It still is inconceivable how you've managed to do all this..
You messed something up with this chapter, the last half of to is in italics
Why is everything in italics?
Dash, run, Fluttershy is gonna kill you
LOL
I see what you did there
This song is relevant (for once)
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This should be featured. The story is very well written, and the romance is sweet, and doesn't seem forced at all. It seems natural, like something the show would do if they ever abandon the TV-Y.