mmmmmm love it

Pinkie, not Pinky

“We are the holder of the Elements of Harmony

No, you're not the holders

5218114 Sry I dont know why I keep doing this. .... probably stupid Word and I am unable to see it.
Thank you that you remind me of it. I will try to do better in the future.

This is a really good story so far, though i have one problem with it, and that is it seems you are trying to write in a perspective that is younger than you are, by a good bit, and that makes the character seem way too mature for his age, especially only being in 6th grade, and also i would suggest asking someone who knows English as a primary language to proofread this, just to help fix any small oddities that there might be.

5224731 thank you a lot for the critism. I am glad that you enjoy my story, even if it has its flaws. To write Robert correctly is not easy and I try to stay true to his age. Like when he was afraid to sleep alone or the fears when he reached Equestria but all in all you are right.
I appreciate your comment a lot and I will try my best to improve myself and I will take on the offer of a proofreader

this is a great story please keep writing more

MOAR!!!!!