We were rushing through the forest, trees flying past us and the ground blurry, until everything stopped. I looked at the manticore, whose back I was still resting on, as he scanned the forest and flicked his ears.
"What's wr-" I tried to ask, but he quickly cut me off with a 'shush'. I wondered what could be so bad until I saw two red eyes glowing in the darkness. I looked closer, trying to figure out what it was until everything turned black and cold.
It was if I were in a dreamless sleep, the kind where you don't realize that you are sleeping, until the manticore's concerned face invaded my vision. I blinked a few times, wondering what just happened. The manticore seemed to read my mind as I woke up.
"A cockatrice." He stated.
I wanted to facehoof. I easily got a cockatrice to turn me into stone.
"How foolish of me to not see that coming." I muttered.
"I wasn't exactly expecting it either, I just knew that I heard something in the bushes and I tried to pinpoint where it was." He said, picking me up in his maw and gently placing me onto his back. "We must be more careful in the future. Otherwise, you might not survive."
I nodded, relaxing as he began to slowly continue walking in the direction we were headed before. I let out a stressed sigh and a tear came out of my eye. "I can't believe this is happening. After so much, I cannot believe this is happening."
"Must be hard."
"And I can't help but think... did I trigger this?"
"What?!"
"Equestria was in peace for a thousand years. The time I was gone. Before that, we had to deal with Discord, Sombra, Tirek, The Sirens, so many other villains and demons. Then I left and there was harmony. Now, when I come back after being banished on the moon, they all want to come back and attack our innocent ponies. Then Chrysalis attacks, and now one of our poor little subjects has become a huge murderous insane beast who cannot control his rage and sorrow. Did my magic somehow disrupt and awaken these beasts when I came back? It did take a lot of magic to bring me back... I don't even know any more."
"Do you realize how insane you're sounding right now?"
"I've been stuck on the moon for a thousand years, ostracized by everypony, fought evil beasts, watched hundreds of ponies die, some by my hooves and now I've had to watch helplessly as my sister's horn was torn right off of her head! I don't just sound insane... I am insane." I said quietly. There was a moment of silence before I started talking once more. "But I have to keep up this proper, regal act but to be truthful, I want to scream in rage. There are some days, where I struggle to keep my mind intact so that I can lower the moon. Casting magic is a mental task after all..."
"Wait a second... You and Celestia both raise the moon and sun right?"
"Yes that is common knowledge."
"You and Celestia...?"
I frowned for a moment and I jumped as I realized what he meant. How could I have been so blind? "Th-the sun... She has no horn... I have to do it! I have to raise and lower the sun! Oh no... this.... is bad."
"What's wrong? Can't you...?"
"I've never raised or lowered both of them before. Celestia... is connected to the sun in such a way that it's easy for her to raise it. She had trouble raising the moon... but she has more power than me. While I'm a better fighter, her magical prowess is very impressive. How...how will I do both?"
"I think you've forgotten something, Luna." The manticore said, now looking at her in panic.
"Wh...wha-" And then it hit me. "I... I-it doesn't matter if I can't control both... my magic still won't work... I forgot.... I never... We're going to die! It will get too hot! We will burn to death! The radiation from the sun will damage and kill us off!" I panicked "And the other side of Equus... will freeze."
"Hey, don't think like that. Look, we'll find a way to get your magic back. And hey, didn't the unicorns do it before you and Celestia did? And we still have Discord. We have some hope." The manticore assured me. I calmed down.
"I guess the stress is getting to me..." I said. "I can't think rationally at all..."
"It's fine, Luna."
There was a moment of silence as I thought. But I didn't want to think. The more I thought about what was happening, about the present, the future and life itself, the more depressed I get. I thought about the ponies who were screaming in agony as they tried to crawl away from green flames, their blood spilling out of them, eyes open wide and crying for me to save them. But I couldn't. I sat there, useless, and then I was tossed like a ragdoll.
"It's not fine."
"Luna, listen..."
"NO, YOU LISTEN! Listen really closely! My ponies are burning to death out there and it's my responsibility to protect them! And I CAN'T! I can't save them! They're dying, all of them! And you know what the worst part is? It's my fault! I gave him a message and hoped he would understand it. I didn't tell him directly what to do, because I figured he would learn a lesson after it! And he never understood it! AND I DIDN'T TELL HIM! I knew he was smart, but sometimes anger clouds your intelligence! OF ALL PONIES I SHOULD HAVE UNDERSTOOD! I SHOULD HAVE HELPED HIM! SO MANY PONIES ARE DYING BECAUSE OF ME!"
"LUNA! Shush!"
"No! I can't shush! I need to say this. I've been bottling all of my problems. I turned into Nightmare Moon because I didn't talk about what was wrong!"
"Luna..."
"Ponies are dying gruesome deaths because I just couldn't open my mouth!"
"Luna!"
"I'VE RUINED SO MANY LIVES BECAUSE OF MY IDIOCITY!"
A loud roar echoed through the forest. It went on for about twenty seconds before the forest was completely quiet. I couldn't even hear and of the forest critters making noise. I looked to see the manticore frowning at me.
"It's not your fault, okay?! Stop blaming yourself! I hate it when ponies blame themselves! That's what I did when my best friend died, but I was blinded by sadness and anger..."
"W-what?"
"Yes, I had a friend. He was one of the few sentient timberwolves out there. We've been through everything together. I had been frozen in fear and I hadn't said anything and he died. A hydra killed him. It was the first one I had seen and it terrified me... I had been enraged, I wanted to kill that monster!" He yelled. "But it was starving... It doesn't excuse its actions but... well, it was either my friend or it. And it won."
He sighed as a tear ran down his face. "Since there weren't many sentient creatures out here, and I didn't want to get any more friends, I stayed out here, isolated and alone..." The manticore then looked at me "But you're the first creature I spoken to in years... hundreds and hundreds of years... I feel your pain, Luna." He said softly.
"I-I'm sorry about what happened... You're... you're right. I shouldn't blame myself. It won't make the situation any better..."
"Great. I'm glad you finally realized." He smiled. "Now, it's getting pretty late. The everfree is full of vicious nocturnal animals, and it's worse in here now than in the daytime. Let's go find us a cave shall we?" He said, going around the forest in search for a nearby cave. I yawned and fell asleep. My magic was drained, and so I was drowsy throughout the entire talk. At the last minute I realized something...
When I do into the dream realm, I'll see how many ponies did not survive under Spike's wrath.
well, good to see what is happening with Luna since that manticore began to help her, although I prefer to see what happened to the 5, Twilight, Noteworthy, Doctor and Ditzy and to whether Twilight really died or was like the Shining Armor that survived in the end. Also didn't like the fact that you have done EG be cannon, but whatever this is your story and is your opinion that matters. And you can't fool me with your April Fools attempt.
5811590 You think I'm joking... I have serious physical and mental pain to deal with along with school, friends turning out to be dicks, and little inspiration to help me. Maybe I'll continue when life starts being nicer to me and I have my head cleared enough to think about what to do with this story.
5811617 so why don't you only put on hiatus?
5811629 It doesn't look like life's gonha be easier on me any time soon and this body/emotional pain has been with me for a few years and probably wont go away. It's becoming more of a struggle to keep up with. The only thing that kept me going was inspiration. Now that that's gone, I belive that it's a lost cause and there's no more hope for it. I could very well put it it on hiatus, but I've simply lost hope.
5811680 well, rather than give up you could "put it out", use all these negative emotions and thoughts as inspiration to continue with this story and discount all these bad feelings, many singer-songwriters of blues and country music do it and most of the times works.
5811680 Don't worry buddy, the people who know and love you are here for you!
5811749 Well if it weren't for the fact that when I stand, sit, walk, lay down, bend the wrong way, etc. It hurts, which makes my mind focused on that too. If every few paragraphs, my carpal tunnel, arthritis, and stiffness wants to bother me. Please understand it's hard to concentrate with that happening, and that the main reason this story is so popular is because I've poured my feelings into it to make it relatable. But after being in a car accident 7 years ago, I'm still feeling body pain.
5811751 Thanks for the support. It is very appreciated, friend.
You know if you are going through rough times note that you ain't alone out there. Private Message me if you have a question on... well... Depression. Not saying I'm the answer to your problems but I can listen to yours.
5824871 Ah, thank you very kindly for your generous help. You know, lately, I've been getting more than just 3 and a half hours of sleep... If this continues I may be able to just un-cancel it and put this on hiatus. I'll keep your offer in mind, though I do have one friend I often talk about my problems to on this site. She's very, very helpful, but i'll likely speak to you soon, since I don't want to dump all of my problems on her when she has her own problems. It's nice to have someone else to turn to, so once again thank you very much for your support.
5825863 No problem. It wouldn't have been decent to leave you to wallow in nothingness. If you need help, want a second opinion or just want to talk to somebody entirely different my door is always open.
5825960 People like you are the reason I'm still breathing today. Thank you... so much. I cannot express how thankful I am to have you and every Brony else who has helped me. This is why when people criticize this fandom, I stand up and defend the bronies. You've all saved my life. There was a time where I didn't know where to go and who to go to so I figured I'd end it all... but MLP and more specifically, Bronies and Fanfiction, have save my life. So know that when you offer to make my day brighter, even if you don't know how to help, that your care brings a smile to my face. Your kindness is deeply appreciated.
5826592 I'm more than happy to help. I know the feeling of just ending it all too well. I can not turn my back on someone going through the same thing.
Only way to kill spike?
Throw him into a Black Hole
5927094 That's totally true. That may be something I could use. Or maybe not. I just go with the flow.
Wow... the raw emotion of despair that is put into this story... I am amazed on how when you read it you truly can feel the emotions the characters are going through. Well done. I have so many words that I want to express about this but the only ones that I can say without sounding insane myself are Well, Freaking, Done.
With sincere gratitude
Oblivion Prophet
6008668 Wow... really? I really... don't know what to say, so I'll settle for thank you so much. I didn't think it was that good. Then again, I an a person who is always sad, down, depressed or angry. I just put my emotions into words. Nothing too special. Once again, thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.
-Sonic
6009055 It was my pleasure reading a work from someone with that habit of feeding their emotions into their art. Because that is what fanfiction is, it is simply art. And an art piece is only as good as the emotions put into it. Just look at Picasso. When an author genuinely pours their heart and soul into a book or story, it makes it so much better, as the characters are given life. The fact that you are/were willing to pour your heart-break and despair into your work, even for as long as you have so far it says so many wondrous things about you! It takes true courage to be able to convey your feelings to the world, even when those feelings aren't so colorful themselves. Trust me when I say this: I'm glad to have read your story, even when incomplete.
--With the warmest
reagrdsregards and sincerest of gratitude's--Oblivion Prophet
6014481
Ah yes. The art of literature. You can just see so many things in words and it's such a beautiful thing. Thanks again. Also, speaking of art, I also make drawings of my favorite people. Would you mind if I were to draw that OC on your profile picture.
6015003 Go right ahead! In fact, here: http://imgur.com/HADae4J This is pretty much the whole character. PM me if you have any questions about him! He has... a bit of a dark story. In fact that's actually going to be my first fanfic. The Story of Oblivion. It's still in the works so he is a bit subject to change im afraid... But don't worry too much as whatever changes I do make will be minute to minor.
--With hopeful gratitude--
Your friend, Oblivion Prophet
P.S. Can you pleeeeease give me an honest opinion about my OC? I'd much rather hear the truth and work on my failings than be in the dark about something until I show it off.
6016240 Can't wait to read that fanfic!
Also, I'd say that the wings and the... things around his lower hooves are a bit much. Wild wings are okay, but that's a bit over-the-top. And I thing those little things around his hooves are unnecessary. Also, there's the fact that he was made in Pony Maker, but I understand that some people just don't have the skill to draw their OCs on their own yet. Other than that, I say that Oblivion will make a wonderful (And cute!) Oc from what I see so far.
6018862 OK yeah I won't argue with you there. I guess I'll just settle for the bug eyes then, cuz his mom is kind of a changeling please don't kill me I have my reasons for it. And admittedly the doodads were a bit much. I think ill keep the arm bands but not the big bulky black and white things. I was thinking of him having like magic-suppressants but in hindsight that was a tad extreme. As for the pony-maker thing... Well let's just say my only private computer happens to be my Netbook... But anyways, thank you for your feedback! I seriously appreciate it! Also the fic is a little slow-going at this point. I'm not very... good at this sort of thing and I have a fairly short attention span when it comes to my own work... . But i'm going to try to keep chugging along at it! First I have to get past how his parents met...
--With warm regards and deepest apologies--
Your friend, Oblivion Prophet
6018933 I find the bug eyes cute! I don't mind that his mother's a changeling. At least you have a reason to do it, instead of saying "He's part changeling because changelings are cool and he has potential for an 'I-don't-belong-anywhere' sob story". I understand where you're coming from. If you ever need help with your story, just contact me. I'll be happy to help you out. Things may be going slow with my story, and it may be at the brink of falling downhill and plummeting to its death, But I'll assure you that I actually am still able to help you. I've just been loosing that spark I had at the beginning of this story.
6020068 I will! Seriously thank you for your feedback. I know I have a bad habit of just going overboard with stuff but I seem to be oblivious about what it is that I'm actually going overboard about. I'll be sure to fix my mistakes and fix a couple of things in my fic! Heh... Lets just say I wasn't exactly thinking straight and made the said Changeling Queen Chrysalis herself Heh... Yeah I'm going to fix that ASAP. Hmmmm... *Idea* OHHHHHH!!! I JUST GOT THE MOST AMAZING IDEA EVER! *Clears throat* SMGA... Are you willing to be my proof-reader?
--With warm regards and hopeful wishes--
Your friend, Oblivion Prophet
P.S. Yes I just used a non-Derpy emoticon. The situation demanded a Pinkie
6020129 I completely understand. Also, I would love to be your proofreader! Just PM me any of your chapters and I will edit it and tell you how to improve it (Instead of improving it myself so you can grow as a writer.). I would love to help out.
P.S. I was very impressed that you managed to use only Derpy without me even thinking twice about it.
6021332 Thank you thank you thank you thank you!!! You have NO idea how much this means to me! The only person that I would even get the light of day to even talk about Fimfics IMMEDIATELY turns down almost any idea I have! Lets just say constructive criticism isn't one of his strong points. Anyways I better get to writing so I don't let you down!
--With bouncing joy and an infectious smile--
Your friend, Oblivion Prophet
P.S. It's a gift I picked up on from using MSPARP alot. Puns are my specialty don't mew think? :33
6054585 That's because he's basically dead. If only somepony could revive him, then this whole mess will end!
-Sonic