What if, long ago, primitive ponies ate meat as well as plants? What if, when most ponies turned to farming the land, the meat-eaters were chased away into the caves. And what if they still survived today?
the sections fit. maybe not as the same chapter. That may just be me. I will say that I want to know more. What happened to Mr. Truth. besides insanity and being marked. I need more
I was hoping for a more drawn out process of change, if it had been slower, each gradual change would have had more of a profound and emotional effect on him mentally
Thank you all for the input. I think I might makes some revisions to this chapter, acting out on your requests.
I honestly wish I could think of more to write, but with the journal style, it makes sense to keep it shorter, more like journal entries.
All I can hope is that I succeeded in writing an at least somewhat chilling tale.
If you have any questions that aren't answered in the story, I'd be happy to do my best and explain.
At the moment, I will explain two of the things brought up in these comments. 1) Truth went through a prolonged magical process of being turned into a ghoul, just like his assistant Scribe had. 2) Eating meat sped up the process. However, I can see what you mean, and will try to stretch it out a bit more.
5177298 Honestly, I've been considering a bonus chapter. And I still use the ghouls as characters on my art blogs. Hell, did an epic pic of one the other day.
I am primarily an artist. Writing is more of a side hobby.
I think it would be amazing if you did a short follow up story, with sort of a Lovecraftian vibe with a private investigator trying to find out what really happened on the expedition.
the sections fit. maybe not as the same chapter. That may just be me. I will say that I want to know more. What happened to Mr. Truth. besides insanity and being marked. I need more
I was hoping for a more drawn out process of change, if it had been slower, each gradual change would have had more of a profound and emotional effect on him mentally
Sections fit. Turning on all the lights in the room, now.
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Thank you all for the input. I think I might makes some revisions to this chapter, acting out on your requests.
I honestly wish I could think of more to write, but with the journal style, it makes sense to keep it shorter, more like journal entries.
All I can hope is that I succeeded in writing an at least somewhat chilling tale.
If you have any questions that aren't answered in the story, I'd be happy to do my best and explain.
At the moment, I will explain two of the things brought up in these comments.
1) Truth went through a prolonged magical process of being turned into a ghoul, just like his assistant Scribe had.
2) Eating meat sped up the process. However, I can see what you mean, and will try to stretch it out a bit more.
5160311 I hope you can write some sort of sequel or spin-off to this, since it was quite the ride :)
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Honestly, I've been considering a bonus chapter. And I still use the ghouls as characters on my art blogs. Hell, did an epic pic of one the other day.
I am primarily an artist. Writing is more of a side hobby.
5177594 Very well then.
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Come see what I mean.
I love my ghouls. I will most certainly not be getting rid of them.
5179097 Nice
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Made it myself.
5179192 Well done
I think it would be amazing if you did a short follow up story, with sort of a Lovecraftian vibe with a private investigator trying to find out what really happened on the expedition.