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Tomsketchit


I am a writer dabbling in many genres. I only write what I love, and can only hope for others to love it the same. This is usually no the case.

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I'm interested in this. Keep it going.

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Oh, I plan to. This is the most I've been inspired to work on a story in a long time.

Hippology would be the horsey equivalent of anthropology. Sorry it doesn't sound punnier.

4932209 No problem at all! Thank you for your help! I'll go and fix that up immediately.

I'm pretty sure a bloody picture is alright. Just not too gory .

Is that a Fallout: Equestria picture? It looks like Taint Fare, but more evil.

4947935 Nope. It's a commission I had done of a pony race I had created based off of the ghouls from the HP Lovecraft story Pickman's model. I am aware that Fallout has beings called Ghouls as well, but this is unrelated.

So no, not at all Fallout: Equestria based. Story or image.

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I was thrown off by the mottled and bare skin, the truncated tail, the tentacles, and obvious spine and ribs showing through. It looks like my friend's mutant character.

A ghoul... stalking us and calling for aid from its pack...

SHOOT. FUCKING. EVERYTHING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Not intentional. Just wanted to make a carnivorous and primitive subterranean pony that was the product of many years of inbreeding and living in the dark. And then I wanted to support an artist friend by paying her to make a better looking version of it.

I honestly don't care about Fallout Equestria any, so any resemblance is coincidental as I would not have seen the things you are referring to. I do apologize for the confusion. I will say that it is loosely based on this, though, with a few embellishments of my own. Sort of a mix between HP Lovecraft's ghouls and the Falmer of Skyrim. Pictured below is the ghoul, the main inspiration.

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Sorry...
As a side note, I do want to check out that anime some time, does sound interesting.
But no, this is based on Lovecraftian ghouls.

Looking forward to more!!!

as I was reading the story thinking of it being related to the movie descent where the cave explorers were exploring and uncharted cave system and ran into ghoulish humans that started picking them off one by one

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Huh... yep, that's the basic premise. Never actually seen that movie though.

Wow, I keep reminding people of things that are completely unrelated to this story.

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I should have known. I love Lovecraft, and Pickman's Model is short enough to read over and over.

I also enjoy the Falmer for the tragic backstory. These folks should be studied and see if they can be supplemented, like cats who just need taurine to live on non-meat diets.

Somebody needs to call Nathan Drake, Laura Croft, or Joel or Ellie. Definitely Joel and Ellie

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Good to hear!

By the way, just added a minor detail to this chapter, something that I'd forgotten the first time. It's in the portion with the description of the ghouls appearance.

In any case, thank you for the support!

This is story is great. Only wish I could say so about the narrator's situation, he looksto be doomed.

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Oh, you have no idea! :raritywink:

One chapter...well that sucks.

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The ending will be worth it. Hopefully. Honestly this is in my opinion the best thing I've written. Shame it gets the least attention. Why oh why did I have to get my start as a writer in clop...

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Oh, not quite. Just magic. Ghoul magic.

5151434 OMNOMNOMNOMNOM BRAIIIIIINS!

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Naaaah.
It's more of a high pitched ghastly SCREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!! that chills you to your very soul than anything. THEN comes the nomming of the flesh. And organs. And bone marrow. They eat every part of the body. Thorough that way. Gets the most nutritional value out of it.

5151448 Oh, sorry. I meant OMNOMNOMNOMNOMNOMNOMNOM EVERYTHIIIIING!:pinkiecrazy:

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Fun fact: Horses CAN eat meat. And sometimes will develop a taste for it. There's even a famous case from India where a horse became a man-eater who actively killed and ate people. Just look up the Man-Eater of Lucknow. It's actually a bit of a chilling real story.

5151480 I have to admit, that was quite unnerving.

the sections fit. maybe not as the same chapter. That may just be me. I will say that I want to know more. What happened to Mr. Truth. besides insanity and being marked. I need more

I was hoping for a more drawn out process of change, if it had been slower, each gradual change would have had more of a profound and emotional effect on him mentally

Sections fit. Turning on all the lights in the room, now.

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Thank you all for the input. I think I might makes some revisions to this chapter, acting out on your requests.

I honestly wish I could think of more to write, but with the journal style, it makes sense to keep it shorter, more like journal entries.

All I can hope is that I succeeded in writing an at least somewhat chilling tale.

If you have any questions that aren't answered in the story, I'd be happy to do my best and explain.

At the moment, I will explain two of the things brought up in these comments.
1) Truth went through a prolonged magical process of being turned into a ghoul, just like his assistant Scribe had.
2) Eating meat sped up the process. However, I can see what you mean, and will try to stretch it out a bit more.

5160311 I hope you can write some sort of sequel or spin-off to this, since it was quite the ride :)

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Honestly, I've been considering a bonus chapter. And I still use the ghouls as characters on my art blogs. Hell, did an epic pic of one the other day.

I am primarily an artist. Writing is more of a side hobby.

5177594 Very well then.

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Come see what I mean.

I love my ghouls. I will most certainly not be getting rid of them.

I think it would be amazing if you did a short follow up story, with sort of a Lovecraftian vibe with a private investigator trying to find out what really happened on the expedition.

I've tried to decide to either condemn the queen for her actions. Or allow them. I have yet to reach a conclusion that doesn't make me question me sanity.

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You definitely have to keep in mind that while she is technically sentient, she isn't quite entirely intelligent. Like, I would compare her intelligence to similar to that of a young child. She can think for herself fairly well, but her knowledge is limited and so she makes assumptions based on what she does know.

Not really many opportunities to learn what a 'normal' pony is when she's never seen one and has no access to any learning material. To her, they literally just looked like malformed Ghouls.

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Hm. I'll consider it. Although I did say Celestia demanded that investigations ceased, so it's doubtful anything like that would actually happen.

I do definitely hope to use the Ghouls again in some form or another.

5359940 Is it okay if a child kills someone doing something they think will help them?

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It'd be an odd-interesting idea to see them intersect more with canon characters in some way. Actually, now kind of curious what they would think of the alicorns, if they met.

That was downright demented but also sad and heartwarming in a twisted horrifying way.
I think that I may need do be concerned about my mental health...

I'm glad ta did thia mate. I wanted more. Nice to see the ghouls aren't just a wild pack if meat eaters but are...civilized to a point. Now, to go become one

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Yeah, I definitely wanted to paint them as seeming beast-like but in reality are just very primitive and tribal.

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