A man with no way to leave decides that saving a dark princess is worth more than the temptations of the dark... But can he save her from the same darkness he has forsaken for her? Meet DARTH Corpus... A man of almost intangible powers as he marches
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I'm kind of surprised Corpus isn't a lucid dreamer, I mean he most likely has trained his mind to its limits and back and he has at least some ability in emotion manipulation. I'm surprised but at least he isn't good at everything, Corpus is in the outer reaches of Gary Stu territory so it's good that he has flaws.
I have some strange feeling I'm going to hate that griffon's guts though...
4955516 Who Aurora?
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Yes, Aurora, I just have a very distinct feeling that I'm going to hate her guts... Hate is probably too strong a word for me so I'll just say I dislike her.
4955652 hmm, Alright, I could possibly see that, But I wouldn't hold to strongly to that feeling for long... You might just soon as feel pity for her.
BUT! it is your opinion! So I will respect it for what it is worth! And also say thanks for reading this and putting in your two cents.
Also, what do you think of this story so far? If you'd be so kind
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It's a great story so far in my opinion.
And pity her? I'm assuming that has something to do with that warning? I doubt I'll pity her but I'll possibly stop disliking her. My personality and a couple other things stop me from pitying anything for more than a few seconds.
4956131 First off, thanks man!
And I can understand thy feelings of not really giving a hoot about anything emotionally for more than a few seconds. So no hard feelings there mate! XD
now I wish thee a wonderful eve and I hope that thou still enjoys the future chapters of this hopefully entertaining Novella
hmm,either you are an incredibly subtle writer, or there was no rape in this chapter.
Alright, ima go ahead and start off with things i do like about this story.
1: The plot
Well developed and paced, and no small amount of ideas. Its exciting and i enjoy it.
Things i dont like about this story.
1: the plot.
Its all full of holes mate. You call him a dark night, yet he openly enjoys company with these peace loving people, and avoids his own dark power. Also, the writing is good, but you need an editor. Badly.
Gj tho m8