Revelation day
The world real world pulls me from my dreams with a kiss from my new coltfriend. I peel my eyes open to see him staring into my eyes, and I do the same, taking in everything there is from the deep pools. We don't say anything, just lay there appreciating each other's company. I break the silence, saying "I love you." and kissing him. It's the first time I've actually kissed someone, and it starts my heart racing.
When we finally break, I ask the question that had somehow slipped my mind before. "Am I the first pony you've kissed?"
The cyan stallion across from me thinks for a bit before he answers "I'm pretty sure you are, but I'm absolutely sure it wasn't a bad thing."
We both laugh and just enjoy cuddling with each other. Eventually, Blitz bursts out "I'm hungry" half whining. It causes me to laugh even more.
"Come on. Let's get something to eat." I look over at the clock. It read 8:04. "No wonder you're hungry we missed dinner. I'm sure Spines has left some leftovers in the fridge." We walked down the stairs together, I leaning on Blitz all the way down. Even after reaching the bottom, we're so close our pelts are rubbing against each other.
When we enter the kitchen, we see Spines staring at us like we're crazy. "What's up?" Blitz asks.
"Did something happen between you two that I don't know about? Why are you two so close?"
I look over to my lover and finally realize that we hadn't told Spines. I'm kind nervous, not knowing what my number one assistant would think. Would he even want to work with me any more? Blitz eliminates my fears by just saying it. "Dusk asked me to be his coltfriend and I sad yes. You cool with that?"
"Yeah, as long as the two of you are happy."
"Thank you Spines. Now Blitz, we're gonna have to tell our friends pretty soon."
"Sure. Why don't we have them over? Berry's been going crazy about not being able to throw you a "get well" party. We can tell him can throw her party and we can tell them there."
"You sure?" I was just thinking about her reputation
"Of course. We're gonna have to tell them at some point, right?
The party was a week later when I felt it was safe for me to be at it. Bubble Berry's party, like most, was happy and upbeat. With as easily as Spines had noticed, we expected that our friends would at least be able to recognize it. Blitz had his wing draped around me the whole time.
When it finally came time for us to tell everypony, Blitz was the one to say it. I had tried my best, but I just couldn't get the words out. I'd end up stuttering or not speaking at all. Eventually, Blitz just blurted it out. "Me and Dusk love each other and now we're together!" He said as fast as he could, almost putting Bubble Berry to shame.
All of them looked confused, trying to break apart what Blitz had just said. Elusive was the first to speak. "I'm sorry darling could you say that again?"
Blitz opened his mouth to speak, but I got there first. "He said we love each other and were together now."
There was a collective "ooh" and everypony gathered around, congradulating us on our new found love.
"Oh darlings, that's simply wonderful. How, may I ask, did you two find out?"
Blitz was a bit calmer now and decided to not speak at supersonic speeds. "Well," he said "I had just brought Dusk home and we had eaten lunch that he told me he wanted to play Magic. He also told me at that point that he wanted to tell me something when I got back, 'cause I had to grab my cards, right? So I come back, and there he is waiting for me. We started to shuffle up, and asked him what it was he wanted to talk about and he jus told me then and there."
"And you said yes?" Asked Applejack
"Well, duh. Why would we be together if I hadnt. I'd had the same feelings for him for a while and I planned to be the one to tell him. So when he told me, it took me by surprise."
Bubble Berry pulled them in a bone crushing hug. "I'm so super duper happy for you two." She suddenly gasped, almost inflating herself to a ball like state. "Do you know what this means?! We have to throw a 'Yay! Dusk and Blitz finally admitted their feelings to each other and just got together' party for you guys!"
"Awesome, Berry. Wouldn't have any one else throw it." Blitz said
"But, how do the rest of you feel about this." Dusk put in, "I know it's really sudden, and it's not exactly normal-"
"So what if it isn't normal? We're the Elements of Harmony! No pony really expects us to be normal." AJ said
"I know that, but some ponies think it's just wrong. You know, with old traditions of a mare and a stallion."
"Who cares what they think darling? It's your life. You do what you want."
"Anyone who thinks otherwise can just go screw off" Everypony turned to the source of the comment. Their eyes widened as well when they saw it was Butterscotch who had said it. "Did I say something wrong?" He asked, his timid voice returning.
Everypony laughed at this. "Nothing wrong, sugar cube. Just wasn't expecting it from you." Applejack said, walking up to comfort the yellow Pegasus.
"Well, I'm glad you're all so accepting." Dusk said, now held by Blitz's wing. "We're still gonna have to tell our parents, but for now, I think we'll have to take Bubble Berry up on his offer of a party." Looking at the bubbly pony, he commented "It looks like he's about to explode."
"I am!" He squealed, "I'm just so happy for you guys."
"I'm happy, too" said Blitz, "Happy I got so lucky."
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Incorrect pronoun
you never refer to time in present tense; should be read
Pinkie?! (how did she get her in this r63ed universe...) also missing a noun/ pronoun
I know that Pinky doesn't care for the laws of physics. But she can change gender at will too?
edit: It seems that I was too slow...
I loved that phrase though!
I’m not that much into two stallions as I am with two mares. But I really like your story so far.
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5367619 Thank you both for pointing those out. I'll be sure to change them ASAP
Beginning to lose faith in this. Everything happens so fast, and there's no buildup.
5367748 One of the things I wanted to do with this was remove all the doubt the pair had about actually admitting their feelings for each other. It war starting to really piss me of having to read so much of any two sitting in their opposite corners, "building the confidence" to talk to the other. They're already friends. Why should it be awkward between them? I guess it's just my opinion and style of writing, so I don't really care if you don't like it.
Daw! Its so cute! I love this.
5367786 I understand that, but there's really nothing going on in the story. Has nothing happened during Dusk's recovery period? You're four chapters in, and two things have happened, with no buildup to anything major happening. Part of any story is a problem, and none has been presented, so far.
5368876 What ideas do you have? I could certainly write something in. I really couldn't think of much to put in there. I mean Dusk can't really do much with his injury.
Never, ever have more than one person speaking in the same paragraph.
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Um... I think you mean line. It's perfectly acceptable for two people to be speaking in the same paragraph, so long as it is on a separate line. Unless it's a different rule where you come from? I've always been taught the above.
E.g.
"Man, my stomach has been rumbling for hours. When's lunch?" Blitz grumbled loudly. The purple unicorn walking beside him snorted, before glancing at him laughingly. "How would you know if it's been rumbling for hours or not? You've only just woken up!" He replied, unable to suppress the grin slowly forming on his face. "I've never known anyone sleep for so long before. It's incredible!" Dusk continued, his eyes sparkling with mirth.